About Eager

I ended up here by chance, and read many wonderful stories. I then decided to try writing some myself. I think the best things in life are love and friends. I do care of them so much I would give anything for them. I'm on the side "few friends but good friends", so I will gladly add whoever ask to, and also I will easily remove whoever is only looking for a +1 in friend counter. If you don't care of my friendship, don't ask to me to care of yours either.

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Topic: Looking for help for my (rejected) first story...
Posted: 06 Nov 2011 15:15

I have pm'd you just in case you still want help.

Best regards and good luck.


Thank You :)

Topic: Looking for help for my (rejected) first story...
Posted: 06 Nov 2011 15:14

I have to say, based on your original post, you seem reasonably competent with the English language. Certainly I have seen stories posted with worse grammar/spelling.

It's lovely to see someone so keen (or "eager") to make a good contribution to the site.

Thank you :)
I'm flattered :P

Topic: Looking for help for my (rejected) first story...
Posted: 06 Nov 2011 08:33

Thank You, NaughtyAnn.

PM replyed, email sent.

And thank you moderator, who kindly answered and explained what was wrong In my story.
Sadly my english skill are not enough to understand how to correct it. Embarassed
Looking forward for the kind help of NaughtyAnn. Thank You again ;)

Topic: Looking for help for my (rejected) first story...
Posted: 05 Nov 2011 23:34

I had my first story rejected, with the reason:

"Story doesn't meet our quality standards. Please consider posting a request for proofreading and editing assistance in our Writer's Resources forum. Thank you. "

Since It is my first story ever and more than this it is in a - for me - foreing language, the rejection was something I considered possible and of course perfectly acceptable. The challenge is thrilling.
The problem is I can't understand what was wrong with it, since "quality standards" is quite a wide range of things.
Is it written with a poor grammar? Did I use wrong terms? Is it too fast, too slow, too soft, too hard? Is it tiring to read? Is the punctuation too heavy or too rare? Etc... Etc...
I don't know.

So, I'm here asking is there someone so gentle and sweet who would help me to understand, so I could correct the story and make it better? Or who could help a little in writing it better?
I would change everything needed to let the story at least acceptable :)

Thank You in advance :)

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Stories Published By Eager
A new start. The love story of a sub pt7

********** Thank again for the priceless help of NaughtyAnn. I suggest to read the previous parts before this. ********** I was standing there in the slave position and I had taken her request as a test on my will power. Also I was strong in my determination to stay there without making a move. The time passed and, after several hours, my legs began to go numb. Thinking to myself that...

Added 12 Dec 2011 | Category Love Stories | Votes 6 | Avg Score 5 | Views 2,998 | 6 Comments

A new start: The love story of a sub pt6

Thank you NaughtyAnn, for your priceless help. I suggest you read the previous parts first. Any comment is greatly appreciated. Over the next few months ourrelationship grew stronger. Mistress Serena took me several times to the Club; and also she wasn't using the blindfold on me anymore. Gradually I learnt the route to the club and what street it was in. A couple of times she told...

Added 07 Dec 2011 | Category Lesbian | Votes 8 | Avg Score 5 | Views 2,504 | 4 Comments

A new start. The love story of a sub pt5

Thank to NaughtyAnn for her priceless help. I suggest to read the previous parts before this. Comments greatly appreciated. One week passed by and Serena could tell that I had regained my strength. In fact I was fully recovered and I felt that it was time to pay my respects again to Mistress and her role. Also I wanted to show her how grateful I was for having her look after me in...

Added 30 Nov 2011 | Category Lesbian | Votes 8 | Avg Score 4.75 | Views 1,987 | 5 Comments

A new start. The love story of a sub pt4

Thanks to the priceless help of NaughtyAnn. ************ I suggest the reading of the previous parts. Comments are greatly appreciated. ************ Thenext morning I woke up before my Mistress did, it was one of those rare occasions when she stayed at my place and slept with me. I quietly moved down the bed, checked if my collar was in the right place, took a glance...

Added 29 Nov 2011 | Category Lesbian | Votes 7 | Avg Score 5 | Views 1,882 | 2 Comments

A new start. The love story of a sub pt3

Thanks, as always, to NaughtyAnn, for her help and support.  I suggest you to read the previous two parts before to read this one. Comments are strongly appreciated. ********* So, as the months continued, I received punishment and humiliation for my mistakes and also for my unworthiness. I concentrated totally on learning everything as fast as I could, not for me, but to let...

Added 26 Nov 2011 | Category Group Sex | Votes 5 | Avg Score 5 | Views 1,941

A new start. The love story of a sub pt2

This is the second part of my story. I suggest to read the first part before to read this. My full gratitude again to NaughtyAnn for her help and readproof. I couldn't have done it alone! The next day was Saturday and the weekend had started, so I stayed in bed longer that morning as I was puzzled about my feelings. I thought about the man at the club who had been rude to me, initially,...

Added 20 Nov 2011 | Category Lesbian | Votes 10 | Avg Score 5 | Views 3,847 | 2 Comments

A new start. The love story of a sub pt1

"This is the first part of my first story. Due to English  not being my mother tongue, I can post it thanks to the great work and help of naughtyann, a really kind and helpful person to whom I am really grateful. I hope you like the story, please let me know what you think." My name is Kelly and I am twenty eight years old, with a small body, thin, but not skinny with petite breasts and...

Added 13 Nov 2011 | Category Lesbian | Votes 14 | Avg Score 4.36 | Views 5,817 | 6 Comments

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