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Reprehensiballs
Posted: Thursday, September 30, 2010 4:47:57 AM

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I have been trying to decide on the plot progression for my first story 'Bouncy Rain". I am torn between a very believable but possibly tame plot line that will almost wrap itself up and hopefully leave no loose ends, or a much more raunchy plot line that will almost certainly open up a raft of questions that readers would probably want answered. Should I be aiming to make each instalment as exciting as possible without worrying too much about where the story is going, or should I be concerned with long-term plotting over short-term action?

I actually thought about doing a little straw poll and letting readers decide the next step. I haven't noticed anyone else doing this, is it a valid way to proceed? Being so new to all this I am not sure what is acceptable and what is not.

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Posted: Tuesday, October 12, 2010 10:06:04 PM

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Writers tend to agree its best to just tell your tale as it comes. Write and don't worry about how exciting each installment is. Tell the story. If you concentrate on making each segment hot, it can and likely will detract from the overall story. IMHO


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Posted: Wednesday, October 13, 2010 7:31:16 AM

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I have always said... and will always say... write for you and only you. Write how you want to see it.

Personally for me... the story just writes itself.

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Posted: Friday, October 22, 2010 7:50:40 PM

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You have to believe in what your writing for anyone else to. When I write, it's like a scene from a movie. When writing erotica it takes a mixture of both to make a hot story. I write for me. Sometimes people don't like the story that is published, maybe it's not the normal, but who wants to be normal?
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Posted: Monday, November 29, 2010 9:30:57 PM

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Use allusions and creative writing to describe actions. Rather than using bluntness and crude words(pussy, dick, cock, cunt). It degenerates from the writing, if the attempt is to produce a good piece of writing or give off a good story with even a slight bit of depth. Now characters speaking the words above is a little different, provided it isn't misused and abused. But when describing a scene or action, I'd say its better to refrain from the use of such words.
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Posted: Monday, November 29, 2010 10:07:36 PM

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Posted: Wednesday, December 22, 2010 10:49:21 AM

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Write both, 2 chapters maybe but name them according. Something like "Bouncy Rain: Drizzle" for the the soft stuff and "Bouncy Rain: Downpour" for the raunchy stuff. More work but you obviously want both.
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Posted: Wednesday, December 22, 2010 12:27:03 PM

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If it is your first story, then I would keep it simple. Once you have finished it, then you can try your hand at something more complicated/convoluted.

Reprehensiballs wrote:
I actually thought about doing a little straw poll and letting readers decide the next step. I haven't noticed anyone else doing this, is it a valid way to proceed?
I tried this once and it turned out to be harder than I thought, so never tried again.

I agree with Woman and Contessa wholeheartedly. I find that once I have the basic idea, and start to write, then the story takes on a life of its own. I think this is why I hated the ‘reader decides’ style as it made my stories stilted and jerky. I write for me and to have some-one suggest changes tends to put my back up and I’d happily completely delete before amend. I don’t do this for financial gain, and as it’s for me, feel no loss in doing so.

As to the balance of sex against plot, I find that the story dictates that for me, some of mine are fuck-fests whilst others are glacial. And I don’t like splitting stories if I can possibly help it, I want to get immersed in a story and not have to go hunting for the next part, it’s like watching tv with adverts- you just get to the exciting bit then there is a break, I find that intensely annoying.

My only really constructive suggestion is to write it, leave it for a few days, then come back and read it again. This I find, helps to highlight overly jarring prose as well as bringing any excessive changes in fluidity to light.

Top This has a good idea. I once wrote a story twice from the perspective of each of the two characters, and submitted both seperately without mentioning it, letting the readers find out for themselves. It went down an absolute storm, so it’s an avenue worth considering if you wish to try a story in two different styles.

Oh, and enjoy it. Writing should be fun and not a chore :)
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Posted: Friday, December 31, 2010 6:02:27 PM

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There are only so many ways to describe a big cock entering a wet pussy/ tight asshole/ willing mouth. For me, the turn on is the setting of the scene and the dialogue between characters. The build up of sexual tension and desire is often more exciting than the sex that transpires.

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Posted: Saturday, June 09, 2012 3:53:58 PM

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Ups and downs make the world go round...Pint Drunk

How will you view your character as? A human of course, and we are complicated beings. We are raunchy, sweet, sexy, cute, naughty and more evil4 I dont know how long it will be, but if its long, add a bit of everything for a sweet and sour dish :)

If its short, well...Write what your mood allows. My personal opinion is to bring in the best of both worlds angel7
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Posted: Friday, September 21, 2012 5:32:29 AM

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Erotica should concentrate on having an equal balance of story and action.
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Posted: Friday, September 21, 2012 5:46:42 AM

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Any story, whether erotic or otherwise, should have a good plot. What is critical to erotica though is to have believable characters and to express their emotional state in a way that connects to the reader. One can write that he or she is excited but for the story to succeed, the reader must not simply know that they are, the reader must feel it too. If you can do that, then your story will be able to arouse the reader and get their blood hot. That is what makes a story erotic.

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Posted: Sunday, September 23, 2012 9:15:20 AM

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Because I prefer to write in the first person, the persona of the storyteller/character guides the choice of words. So if it's "natural" for the storyteller to weave a complex story, that's what happens and if it's natural for the storyteller to get down to business and "git 'er done", that's what happens. What sells the story to the reader is the situation and the believability of the characters.

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Both. If you focus too much on the sex, the plot is lost. If you focus too much on the plot, the sex is lost. I've stopped reading stories in both of these cases. I like stories that have a balance. And it's even more amazing to me when the sex is wrapped up in the plot.



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Posted: Saturday, February 02, 2013 4:02:33 PM

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slipperywhenwet2012 wrote:
Both. If you focus too much on the sex, the plot is lost. If you focus too much on the plot, the sex is lost. I've stopped reading stories in both of these cases. I like stories that have a balance. And it's even more amazing to me when the sex is wrapped up in the plot.


my thoughts exactly, so it is best to sort of find a little middle ground

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Posted: Saturday, February 02, 2013 10:51:54 PM

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There's no single mold that all erotica will fit into. Some erotica is made for stories. Some is made for action. Compare it to video games. Super Mario and Final Fantasy are both fun, but no one plays Super Mario for the story, and Final Fantasy isn't very action-packed. It all depends on what you're trying to do. The important thing is to entertain.
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Posted: Saturday, February 02, 2013 11:39:54 PM

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Write from your heart better a good detailed story in my opinion to draw the reader into the raunchy parts.
















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Posted: Sunday, February 03, 2013 9:18:29 AM

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I think erotica should strive to strike a balance between story and action, just as any other genre should. I try to get a balance between story and action, sometimes I succeed, sometimes I just suck.
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Posted: Sunday, February 03, 2013 7:47:56 PM

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Story, certainly. A kiss is just a kiss without context.
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Posted: Sunday, February 03, 2013 8:52:46 PM

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Story and character development first, then use that foundation to BUILD to the hot action. Otherwise you don't care about the characters or what they're doing sexually.
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Posted: Sunday, February 03, 2013 9:47:41 PM

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i have read so many quick fuck stories... .the story line could have been there. great idea but darn lost due to no details. i love reading sex scenes like i am sure you all do too... but sex with just a cock and pussy, no face or personality behind it really doesn't do it for me. don't need romance. but the build up of heat is a must... anticipation is the ultimate.

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Posted: Sunday, February 03, 2013 11:22:57 PM

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i say the story, anyone can have sex but to make that sex so much hotter, it has to have a good story leading up to it and after it for that matter. really, what do you want your reader to get out of it? a story they read and forget 10 seconds after they finish it, or one they come back to time and time again. not just for the sex but for the whole story.
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Posted: Monday, February 04, 2013 6:58:39 AM

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If you can write an intricate sex scene that takes its time and has build ups in intensity within it, then you can actually create a compelling action-oriented piece of writing. But in this case, the quality of the writing is just as important as what's actually going on in order to really 'sell it' to the reader.

For the most part - I think a nice balance between storytelling and sexual action is the way to go. For me, the best authors in this genre always have the story building towards the sexual outcome or 'climax' though, so sexual tension should create excitement along the way.




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Posted: Monday, February 04, 2013 8:44:32 AM

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It should be whatever you are comfortable with. This is your site for what you want to write. Think of it this way, if it reaches its targeted audience, then it's all good..........
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Posted: Monday, February 04, 2013 9:36:34 AM

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Wondering what you're going to write, isn't writing. Your best work will be what comes most naturally to you.

Write it out, revisit, rework, redo, edit or leave it. The beauty of it is that it's yours and you can do what you like with it. Have fun.

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Why not read some stories instead
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Posted: Saturday, February 09, 2013 4:51:59 PM

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The story! It takes real talent to write a story but any old hack can write raunchy sex.
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Posted: Monday, March 04, 2013 2:57:26 PM

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If writing a short story then you have to go to the action almost straight away. However, if writing over 2,000 words then the build up is important to get the reader aroused.
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Posted: Monday, March 04, 2013 3:17:12 PM

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Just my opinion, but I believe in erotica, sex is the action and the characters make the story what it is or isn't. There is analysis that can go on, but to me that's academic stuff, like parsing sentences. charting the dramatic dynamics, and all that stuff. Good stories hook the reader, pull them through to where the writer stops, and that's it. Genre stories -- crossovers , really -- involve any other elements, like supernatural, western, sci-fi, romance.etc. with the erotica elements, which is fine, but too often seem like what is called a pastiche, that is the "story" (characters, plot, etc.) is a genre tradition and the erotica is just added in. Good erotica, like comedy or tragedy, is very difficult to write, partly because you have to be visceral about it. The narrative of the mind's desires manifesting physically...that's the key.
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I could not help but feel the original question might be interpreted to Porn versus Love Story. A short story without character buildup to capture the imagination of the reader remains a limited interest "quickie". This is acceptable for a five minute read, but fails to remain interesting enough to continue reading.
I would recommend to write a real story; one can still titillate a reader without going immediately into hard sex. Adding a characters sensual thoughts can help the story build, adding contextual motivation, and will do so without making them seem like a porn star.

But that is just my opinion...


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