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hardnhot18
Posted: Thursday, February 07, 2013 6:33:41 PM

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What's your favored technique? In particular when switching character perspective, or to indicate a time lapse. I was using three pluses like so:

Xerxes smiled seductively at John, then pressed her fingers into her moist towelette.

+++

John couldn't believe Xerxes took the last, moistest towelette. She was a bad girl, and needed to be taught a lesson.


But then I realized they aren't showing up in the stories, which is probably confusing to readers.

Sure, I could think of any number of ways to go about it differently, but then I wouldn't get to bug you all about it. :)
EDWolfe
Posted: Friday, February 08, 2013 11:08:06 PM

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I think that it's a personal preference thing. Some of the longer Stephen King stories actually use numbers to separate the parts, like chapters. One fiction workshop I attended had us use a # to separate our scenes within our stories. Another method I have seen in novels involves *** evenly spaced across a line on the page; specifically for Lush, this may not work because the spacing may be off. (In my story, I just used a single * to separate my scenes.) I've even seen dates in diary-style stories (would also work in a story written like a blog).

Bottom line, it's a personal choice. Whatever you think looks good.
Guest
Posted: Saturday, February 09, 2013 8:12:20 PM

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I usually use a series of asterisks, like so:

* * * * *
hardnhot18
Posted: Saturday, February 09, 2013 8:25:22 PM

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Thanks, I'm specifically looking for what formats correctly in Lush, if you have experience with that.
AbigailThornton
Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 4:00:00 AM

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I've just done this and used a row of asterisks.

******

I was tempted to go back and check that I'd put the same number of asterisks between each section... but managed to resist!!

overmykneenow
Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 8:04:27 AM

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My story Circle of Friends is broken up into seven distinct parts - one for each character. I used the three asterisks method ( *** ) to separate each section and it seemed to work well.

Another method I've seen used is switching from normal type to italic type - usually when there are two plot lines running at once. I personally don't like reading stories that do this - the narrative should enough to clearly separate what you're reading



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Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 11:31:54 AM

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mine is usually "o-O-o" just cause i think it looks fancy. :)
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Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 12:10:22 PM

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sprite wrote:
mine is usually "o-O-o" just cause i think it looks fancy. :)


Really? Damn, there was me thinking that was you having a very lady-like orgasm x

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Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 2:00:03 PM

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overmykneenow wrote:


Really? Damn, there was me thinking that was you having a very lady-like orgasm x


my orgasms are rarely "lady-like". :D
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Posted: Sunday, February 10, 2013 2:48:29 PM

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Word has it Sprite has several orgasmic originating 'Noise Abatement' violations pending. ;)


Some editors, both print and electronic, have guidelines for seperations...heed them. Otherwise, use three symbols, for some reason, the number sign '###' seems popular. I'd advise skipping a line before and after the seperator if the text is single-spaced and adding a second lank line if it's double-spaced.

Whatever your choice, be consistent. If for no other reason, that'll make it easier to delete and replace in the future should the need arise.

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Posted: Monday, February 11, 2013 3:03:04 AM

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I like to insert some cool animated lines between paragraphs...something subtle though, that won't distract the reader...like this, for instance...




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Posted: Monday, February 11, 2013 1:38:48 PM

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AbigailThornton wrote:
I've just done this and used a row of asterisks.

******

I was tempted to go back and check that I'd put the same number of asterisks between each section... but managed to resist!!


On verifying stories, I'll admit that I have gone through and made sure the number of asterisks was constant. Embarassed You're stronger than I am.

I use either one or three asterisks. I'm a simple fellow like that.

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clum
Posted: Monday, February 11, 2013 1:40:36 PM

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overmykneenow wrote:
Another method I've seen used is switching from normal type to italic type - usually when there are two plot lines running at once. I personally don't like reading stories that do this - the narrative should enough to clearly separate what you're reading


If I saw that in a story, I would strip that formatting. Please don't do that.

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DLizze
Posted: Monday, February 11, 2013 3:13:26 PM

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I usually use either asterisks or full stops. And, unlike some people on here who shall remain nameless, but whose initials are AbigailThornton, I ALWAYS check to make certain I used the same number each time.

(You realize I just couldn't resist that, Ms T. Well, that's not strictly true; I COULD have resisted, but I chose not to.)

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hardnhot18
Posted: Monday, February 11, 2013 3:23:58 PM

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Thanks all. Variety of techniques out there! My plus signs had mysteriously disappeared, so I went back and used asterisks. All seems well.

In the future, though, I think I'll go with the classic "tits, devil, sperm, bouncing-dick-alien":

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clum wrote:
If I saw that in a story, I would strip that formatting. Please don't do that.


But in rare cases, it works quite well to italicize one character's POV.

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/masturbation/he-said-she-said-the-massage.aspx

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Posted: Tuesday, February 12, 2013 3:29:00 PM

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magnificent1rascal wrote:


But in rare cases,


Very well played.




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DLizze
Posted: Thursday, February 14, 2013 8:36:06 PM

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I reserve italoics for thoughts. And I try to be very aware of them and not string a long series of thoughts together, forming a paragraph.

"There's only three tempos: slow, medium and fast. When you get between in the cracks, ain't nuthin' happenin'." Ben Webster
DirtyMartini
Posted: Friday, February 15, 2013 1:22:52 AM

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Damn, this is all getting real complicated here...why not just put something like this between each paragraph to make sure?




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overmykneenow
Posted: Friday, February 15, 2013 2:26:20 AM

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magnificent1rascal wrote:


But in rare cases, it works quite well to italicize one character's POV.

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/masturbation/he-said-she-said-the-massage.aspx


Frank_Lee used it here in this Editors' Pick http://www.lushstories.com/stories/love-stories/no-honey-no-baby-no-bitch.aspx

While both of these stories are fantastic, I'm still not sure about using typography to tell the tale.

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Posted: Wednesday, September 11, 2013 12:49:22 PM

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I'm bad at paragraphs running together...like a head on crash
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