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Posted: Wednesday, November 17, 2010 1:58:56 PM

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It makes for easier reading if a full-stop (period) is followed by two spaces.
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Posted: Wednesday, November 17, 2010 2:01:33 PM

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Don't use possessive apostrophes with "its" unless you are contracting "it is"
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Posted: Tuesday, February 15, 2011 5:02:03 PM

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private4mylover wrote:
It makes for easier reading if a full-stop (period) is followed by two spaces.

Can I let you in on a secret? Typing two spaces after a period is totally, completely, utterly, and inarguably wrong.

Go here --> http://www.slate.com/id/2281146
Why you should never, ever use two spaces after a period. By Farhad Manjoo

Read that.


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Posted: Wednesday, March 16, 2011 4:53:47 AM

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Whenever you can, avoid filtering, as it creates an extra step of distance between the reader and what the character is seeing/feeling/tasting/etc.

"He saw the sun rise." vs "The sun rose."
"He smelled smoke." vs "The air was acrid with smoke."
"He tasted her kiss." vs "The taste of her kiss made him dizzy."

Lame examples, but you get the idea.


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Imagine the physicality of what you're describing.... People only have two hands. Act out the action so you know it's feasible....

Read the story ALOUD to yourself before you submit.... It'll highlight mistakes and glitches that you may not have noticed. (My readers will notice I don't always do this.... I Should!!!)

The cute bit at the top of your hips is not a 'waste'..... It's a 'waist'....

Never set a story in Oregon. (Nobody has EVER had sex there....) icon_smile

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Posted: Sunday, April 10, 2011 3:53:32 PM

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One use of the apostrophe is to show possession. If the possessor is a singular noun, an -'s is added to the end of the noun e.g. John's car ,Bob's cock, the poet's work, the prostitute's breast.

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Posted: Sunday, April 10, 2011 4:57:23 PM

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RUE - Resist the Urge to Explain.

Trust that your reader will get it, and trust yourself to get the point across without explaining it. This particularly applies to verbs and adverbs in dialogue mechanics. If well written your dialogue should be self explanatory.

"You're kidding me!" she exclaimed, excitedly.... (you don't say!)

It's the equivalent of saying, "did you get it?" after you tell a joke.

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Mistress_of_words wrote:
RUE - Resist the Urge to Explain.

Trust that your reader will get it, and trust yourself to get the point across without explaining it. This particularly applies to verbs and adverbs in dialogue mechanics. If well written your dialogue should be self explanatory.

"You're kidding me!" she exclaimed, excitedly.... (you don't say!)

It's the equivalent of saying, "did you get it?" after you tell a joke.


I have to admit, I didn't understand that one at all...are you suggesting someone would actually put "(you don't say!)" in a line of their story?

Hmmm...and btw, your one line writing tip was more than one line...

I have no writing tips myself, because frankly I have no idea what I'm doing...


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DirtyMartini wrote:
Mistress_of_words wrote:
RUE - Resist the Urge to Explain.

Trust that your reader will get it, and trust yourself to get the point across without explaining it. This particularly applies to verbs and adverbs in dialogue mechanics. If well written your dialogue should be self explanatory.

"You're kidding me!" she exclaimed, excitedly.... (you don't say!)

It's the equivalent of saying, "did you get it?" after you tell a joke.


I have to admit, I didn't understand that one at all...are you suggesting someone would actually put "(you don't say!)" in a line of their story?

Hmmm...and btw, your one line writing tip was more than one line...

I have no writing tips myself, because frankly I have no idea what I'm doing...


Everyone's tips are more than one line!

But perhaps I was trying to be too clever there. Imagine you read that line in a story. You can infer from what she says and the exclamation point that she is exclaiming excitedly. Putting "she exclaimed excitedly" is unnecessary explanation.

"She exclaimed excitedly? You don't say," he remarked, sarcastically.

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Posted: Monday, April 11, 2011 3:18:34 AM

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Shorter sentences are easier to read. Proving you can do acrobatic things with punctuation to construct a sentence four lines long does not make you a better writer.

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Posted: Saturday, April 23, 2011 11:36:39 AM

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Learn to recognise the difference between a scene (showing) and narrative summary (telling). Showing is much more interesting for a reader. For example, showing a conversation as a series of dialogue lines is more engaging than just describing that a conversation took place and explaining the outcome.

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stephanie wrote:
Imagine the physicality of what you're describing.... People only have two hands. Act out the action so you know it's feasible....




this isn't a one line writing tip, but... so, one of the things i find most useful in writing is the use of props or acting out a scene - sometimes it helps if you are doing what you're writing about an example - if your character is putting a record on a turntable, if you have some vinyl, go thru the motions quickly - pull the record from the shelf, slip it out of it's cover, handle it, put it on the record player, then sit down and write it out.

same thing with dialog - i do mine out loud at times, to see how it sounds, and if it sounds funny, i play with it until it sounds more natural.
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sprite wrote:
- sometimes it helps if you are doing what you're writing about an example - if your character is putting a record on a turntable, if you have some vinyl, go thru the motions quickly - pull the record from the shelf, slip it out of it's cover, handle it, put it on the record player, then sit down and write it out.



So you act out all your sex scenes before writing them out? Cool...

Btw, where do you get one of those cages??? Amazon.com was out of stock last I checked...


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Posted: Monday, April 25, 2011 9:24:26 AM

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DirtyMartini wrote:
sprite wrote:
- sometimes it helps if you are doing what you're writing about an example - if your character is putting a record on a turntable, if you have some vinyl, go thru the motions quickly - pull the record from the shelf, slip it out of it's cover, handle it, put it on the record player, then sit down and write it out.



So you act out all your sex scenes before writing them out? Cool...

Btw, where do you get one of those cages??? Amazon.com was out of stock last I checked...


Petsmart, actually - i know a welder who doesn't mind helping me modify them for certain favors. and up to a point, yes, i act out certain things like bondage ties, to make sure that they are possible and so i know what you can and can't do in one. balls in your court now, funny man *giggles*
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Please keep this thread on track, it's meant to be a resource for writers to skim occasionally for useful tips.
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Posted: Monday, April 25, 2011 7:50:53 PM

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[quote=obscura]Don't use too much overemphasis, at all. There's absolutely no need, whatsoever.



Now, well now I'm just confused. I understand capitals is yelling and emoticons are well... unnecessary at the best of times. But overemphasis? my life was founded on this stuff. lol

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Clarabelle wrote:
[quote=obscura]Don't use too much overemphasis, at all. There's absolutely no need, whatsoever.



Now, well now I'm just confused. I understand capitals is yelling and emoticons are well... unnecessary at the best of times. But overemphasis? my life was founded on this stuff. lol


Don't be confused, if one thing's clear, it is that your life certainly wasn't founded on IRONY CLARA.. (oops, pardon the caps)

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