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Head
Posted: Sunday, April 01, 2012 8:51:26 AM

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Hi All, I have written my first story but it'd been declined twice due to quality, I have a slight problem, I really can’t see the problems with it to fix, comma splices and paragraph run on's ??. Spell check has sorted the spelling problems, but being mildly dyslectic, I can’t see the other problems to fix them. It looks fine to me. Please help.
Coco
Posted: Sunday, April 01, 2012 9:32:10 AM

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Have you sent your questions to the verifier that reviewed and rejected your story? I would start there to get clarification and then come back to ask for help.

TopThis
Posted: Monday, April 02, 2012 7:50:28 AM

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I would be willing to show you examples of what is wrong as well as how and why to correct it. I have sent you a message with suggestions.
Guest
Posted: Monday, April 02, 2012 8:32:59 AM

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If you want me to, I could proof-read your story and change a few run on sentences. I'm one of those freaks who actually enjoy doing that ;)
Just PM me if you need help.

K
tashitasha
Posted: Monday, April 02, 2012 9:23:50 AM

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I could read it and try to help you, send me a message if you want to.

To unravel the truth behind everything, Megan is forced to leave everything behind to save herself and protect those she loves. Now on her own, this young woman will face challenges and dangers, relying on her only assets; her strength and determination. Read When The Truth Hurts by TashiTasha http://www.lushstories.com/stories/novels/when-the-truth-hurts-chapter-1.aspx
shadowcat
Posted: Monday, April 02, 2012 9:37:17 AM

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What is the subject. I would love to help you. Feel free to read my stories and see if you like the style. If you do contact me and we can work together to sort it without loosing the essence of your story.
Head
Posted: Wednesday, April 04, 2012 5:07:45 PM

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Thanks for all your replys, TopThis has helped me out, and i hope i can finish my story off now, for you all to read.
Thank Again
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