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sprite
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 9:51:50 AM

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For Xuani, Ash, and Hiram Lawrence Jr.

Precious Things

I had her name traced above my heart
Cupped my belly, feeling the spark
Within, I felt the beat of life, the echo of her cry
Her breath a butterfly
Brushing the cobwebs from the grave with her wing
Oh you precious thing

And she, oh she had his name tattooed on her wrist
Delicate letters, a secret script
A reminder of what is precious, and what is not
And hearing that, I smiled and thought
Of all the songs he used to sing
Oh this precious thing

I remember one song, such a simple little rhyme
How does it go? Once upon a time…
There was a child, a light
Burning wild, burning bright
Gunfire erupted in the night
Where are you now, Reverend King?
Good bye, you precious thing

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/hardcore/west-coast-games-part-one-the-beach.aspx
Michael
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 10:09:42 AM

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A beautiful poem...

But such sadness.




AngelHeart01
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 10:26:44 AM

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Rachel <3

You have a big heart and precious soul. Your words transcend.
You couldn't have expressed it better.

BEAUTIFUL, and I'm sure they feel the love.

Powerful.
Augmax
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 3:46:47 PM

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Very nice !!!!
Guest
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 4:36:49 PM

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Beautiful, now pass me a tissue. Miss Kitty Meow approves too.
flytoomuch
Posted: Saturday, December 17, 2011 9:07:33 PM

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Beautiful poem....crybaby crybaby You deserve a big HUG for that one Big Hugs Big Hugs In response to your call for world peace all dogs dog dog will henceforth stop chasing all pussies cat cat and they will enter therapy to discuss their anger and abandonment issues.
frenchtoastman
Posted: Sunday, December 18, 2011 3:06:43 AM

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Wonderfully done, Sprite. It can be brutally hard, trying to make sense of it all in what often seems like a senseless world...

Thank the Fates that there are good souls like you out there making the effort, inspiring the rest of us to do the same.
Guest
Posted: Sunday, December 18, 2011 7:42:13 AM

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I've read this Lord knows how many times now and every time it still has the same impact. Not much can make me cry, but this just gets me. Once again, thank you for this beautiful poem.
Dancing_Doll
Posted: Sunday, December 18, 2011 4:45:34 PM

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Reaching for tissues...

This was just the sweetest and most beautiful thing I've ever read. Something really worth saving and committing to memory.

Truly a precious kind of gift.

Thank you. XO


MissyLuvsYa
Posted: Sunday, December 18, 2011 6:44:26 PM

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That is very sweet.
Buz
Posted: Monday, December 19, 2011 5:52:21 AM

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Great writing Rachel!

ethanjubal
Posted: Friday, June 15, 2012 10:19:35 PM

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well scripted good imagery love is never crule just so bitter sweet we rool with the punches have you shown your muse this do you dare?
adele
Posted: Wednesday, July 25, 2012 6:10:23 PM

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Big Hugs

There is no mark of self,
And no mark of others,
No mark of living beings,
And no mark of a life.


-- The Diamond Sutra
BleakMessiah
Posted: Sunday, August 12, 2012 4:47:23 AM

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I do enjoy the rhythm of your poetic flow.
Thanks for sharing this piece.

" 'He rubbed her shoulders sensually,' what the Hell is that? That isn't sexy. You can't do somebody in the shoulder!"
adagio_sabadicus
Posted: Monday, September 09, 2013 12:13:06 AM

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Precious things are children and animals who are innocent of what the world has become

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Soleillalune
Posted: Monday, September 09, 2013 1:59:05 AM

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adagio wrote:
Precious things are children and animals who are innocent of what the world has become
agreed

Babies.. Sweet and round
Grandmas and grandpas
Gestures of pure kindness

Dancewithme
Posted: Friday, May 09, 2014 3:55:44 PM

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sprite wrote:
For Xuani, Ash, and Hiram Lawrence Jr.

Precious Things

I had her name traced above my heart
Cupped my belly, feeling the spark
Within, I felt the beat of life, the echo of her cry
Her breath a butterfly
Brushing the cobwebs from the grave with her wing
Oh you precious thing

And she, oh she had his name tattooed on her wrist
Delicate letters, a secret script
A reminder of what is precious, and what is not
And hearing that, I smiled and thought
Of all the songs he used to sing
Oh this precious thing

I remember one song, such a simple little rhyme
How does it go? Once upon a time…
There was a child, a light
Burning wild, burning bright
Gunfire erupted in the night
Where are you now, Reverend King?
Good bye, you precious thing



Even a man can know this when his woman has lost one on the way. Or he was in the Civil Rights movement many years ago. I loved this profoundly. You really are a very special lady Sprite.
LYFBUZ
Posted: Friday, May 09, 2014 4:02:25 PM

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Heartbreakingly beautiful
avrgblkgrl
Posted: Friday, May 30, 2014 10:05:10 PM

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Sprite, damn, that is beautiful. notworthy

My latest Poem explores the power of submission--A Recommended Read:




~Sit back and enjoy several voice readings of my poetry too~
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