Great, I'm happy to do the same for you or anyone who just wants another opinion. Looking forward to getting some feedback, even if it's not all good. I just want to improve as a writer so any help is great. Thanks!

"A bit airy..." remarked the American.

It took me a minute to get it as well, LOL. I think the problem is that no American would say "A bit..." that's very English and I don't think they would say "airy" either. I think it would probably have worked better if you had someone British say the first part, perhaps from London?

I think an American would say, "It's a little windy huh?" but then that don't work with yer joke, now does it?

Ok, now that we've thoroughly picked this joke apart...ummm...LOL?

Happy 4th Everyone! Looks like it's going to be a beautiful day for everyone on the East coast. Anyone out my way just drop on by. :-)

I thought it would be nice for any writers looking to find critiques and/or reviews of their work strictly for the sake of improving their writing skills and story telling abilities to have a place to post their story links and then ask for reviews. I think it would be nice for reviews to be sent directly to the person rather than posted here. What do you think?

I posted a rather long story, meant to build several characters and then bring those characters together in an orgy situation. I personally find it difficult to get even remotely aroused unless I feel like I know the characters and have some window into their lives. So I thought it would be good to build that story, establish who the people were and then bring them together. Did I succeed? I don't know. Perhaps some of you might take a moment and let me know?

First Chapter:

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/incest/angelas-night-chapter-01.aspx

Final wrap up:

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/group-sex/angelas-night-conclusion.aspx

I hope to find other writers with strong story telling interests online as well. By story telling I mean that the writer has a idea of where they are taking the story and their intention is to bring the reader along on a journey. I believe all good art, writing, music, literature, or visual arts must focus on connecting with something deeper in the human spirit. I look forward to finding others with such a passion.

Thanks for your time.

Wow, I'm just impressed you could work in the bible and the end of the world into two women kissing. That's awesome! I bet Nostradamus never saw that one comin' and the book of revelations, the horsemen; famine, pestilence, death, and two women kissing.

Thanks for the fun topic, God bless ya and may he have you rub your tits together as you tongue fuck your best friend, bless your little heart.

Congrats Daisy, excellent!

I write at the computer at home usually in the mornings or late at night. I write because if I don't write the stories still play out in my head. I see new people, new things and story ideas just start flowing. I have more stories in my head than I'll ever be able to write down. I do have dreams of being a well published author one day but I'm an artist for a living and doing art for money sucked the life out of art for me. Nothing like having other people telling you what is good to pretty much kill any creative energy and the art world is so trendy that it's hard to keep up. I feel a bit like the kid in art school confidential sometimes.

It's been fun writing and having no stress behind it. I enjoy just writing a story for myself and having others read it and sometimes relate. It's also nice to read others work and talk about it without the fear of money, not making money, not making enough money...ugh. utopia on lush!

Can we collide with the Goddess and not the planet? Better yet, can we watch while the God Mars and the Goddess Venus collide and then roll around and collide some more? See, life is so much better with a dirty mind.

I don't know, just look for the legs tremblin' and if that happens you know you did something right. God, you have to love when they get that leg tremble. Mmmm...nirvana! Best time that ever happened was once when I was fucking her in the ass and she had her legs up high holding onto her ankles and then she came and the legs trembled and the body shook and those cute little stomach muscles tighten and release. Hell, if a girl goes to that much effort to fake it, then she must really love you because that's a hellova lotta work to train that many mucles to tighten and release all at the same time in rapid succession.

Thing is, men love women in a way that can't be explained. Intoxication is probably the best word for it. Women, don't fake it, ain't no reason to fake it. If your fella is so lame-ass you need to fake it, just train his stupid ass. Tell him what to do. Trust me, if he is worth half a hard-on he'll listen and do better.

Much luv to ya.

'cause we are like dogs, plain and simple. Give a dog a toy and they love it, chase it, chew it, run around with it in their mouths and sleep with it for sometimes a day, sometimes even two... but then they find a new toy and BAM! they are gone. The old toy forgotten. I think the secret is ya gotta get the dog to love the toy, it has to become their reward for a long hard day of work, it has to become their comfort, their security and their best friend. That takes a lot of work, not just holding it in front of their faces and sayin', "Oh, don't you love it, don't you love it, yes you do, you love this toy, yes you do, love it, love it because it's beautiful and you should." Do that and the dog sniffs it, pees on a bush and walks off sayin' "Yep, I was here and now I see something over there that I need to chase."

Ok, now don't hate the playa', hate da game.

Cause let's be fair, women are like cats. They want to be loved, petted, fed, taken care of, and then left alone. They want to rule the house and they want to have you bring them fine things and dote on them constantly. A cat will play with a toy obsessively for hours but when they loose interest they expect you to know EXACTLY what toy they want to play with next. Cats also will jump in your lap, want to roll around and purr and do what I call "makin' biscuits" on your chest and then suddenly they scratch you for apparently no good damn reason and you are just supposed to know why. You can't just expect a cat to love you, you have to get to know the cat, learn the cat, know what the cat is thinking because she'll never, ever tell ya. If you don't the cat will run away in the middle of the night and never give you a reason why and one day you'll see them with a new owner and they'll look at you like, "SEE! This owner actually LOVES me." and flick their sexy little tail and walk away.

This whole thing is a game. Play it at your own risk. Best thing is, sometimes you find someone that just knows you and you know them. You get to that level of comfort and then the dog never wants to leave that chew toy and the cat sleeps tucked in between the dogs legs every night and purrs like a kitten. When you find that you better just hold on tight because it don't happen often.

Much love to ya, I wish everyone still searching for someone the best. It's a jungle out there, plenty of prey animals and plenty of sheep.

What? People rate stories? *heehee*

Actually, I do think your "ads" on each one of your posts kinda scream (give me ratings, read my stories) but then I could be just reading them wrong. Honestly I write just because I love writing. Seriously. No really...damn it, I'm being honest here...Ok fine...I'm a rating whore but still, I think if you write for ratings or reviews or popularity you are on a one way ticket to failure. Rejection letters WILL come in by the score, you'll put up paintings in galleries and watch not a single one sell, it's just part of being a creative. The question is, will you get better?

Honestly I LOVE this site and all the really cool people here. I haven't had the chance to get thrown down in the gutter yet but my latest story is bombing pretty hard and I thought it was pretty dang good. I do think ya always have to keep in mind the audience. I think there are a few people here that like stories, good stories and if you make a few friends, meet a few cool people and share some good times, isn't that what life is really about?

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