Thanks for the feedback guys and thanks for the honesty.

I'll keep them in mind when I come to writing my next one.

Bob

Hi everyone,

I'm new to writing and I submitted a story for the first time last week.

I would be very grateful for feedback and tips for improving, like was there enough sex, was there too much build up etc, as I have lots more experiences with my wife I'd like to share.

Thanks

Bob

About 6 years ago I was just getting out of a long relationship. We had been together for four years and although it was obviously sad I had seen it coming for months and to be honest I was quite relieved when it finally ended. I went back to university after that summer for the new term with a feeling of adventure and freedom, I went out more, had more fun, and felt happier than I had for...

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