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Tags: chasing, love, fear

It’s when you turn and look away,

From me your eyes do shift and stray,

My heart, it sinks into dismay.

It’s when it’s night and we’re alone,

In leaving me you are so prone,

To then ignore my saddened tone.

It’s when I know it’s not your fault,

We’re not the same, like pepper, salt,

The way you think, brings the result.

It’s when you’re not aware of me,

That’s when I care the most to be,

The only one who holds the key.

It’s when I finally catch you,

That moment scares me through and through,

I might just quit: stop chasing you. 

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Posted 01 Mar 2014 14:20
This one is tougher to evaluate with a vote of 5. The essence / core meaning is well defined. The three phrase verse is difficult to navigate. You do well most of the time. Some of the rhyme rhythm patterns don't feel quite as natural as maybe they could. Tough - I voted a 5 for the essence / core meaning and the tackling of a difficult rhyme rhythm pattern. (NO, I am not much of a writer, and my ways of describing what you have here are most likely flawed.)
Posted 05 Apr 2013 18:18
Sweet romantic sadness.... very nicely expressed
Posted 26 Feb 2013 04:44
A poet in her prime
Quite a talent with a rhyme
You dazzle every time.
Posted 25 Feb 2013 20:39
The sadness in this beautiful poem is well expressed. Nice work.
Posted 25 Feb 2013 07:16

Posted 25 Feb 2013 03:06
This is very well written and expressive.
Posted 24 Feb 2013 21:58
Hold me; stop chasing me. 5

Posted 24 Feb 2013 19:29
Oh my sweet cherry pie, this is marvelous. Why don't you write more, my dear? You are so good.

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