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When

I knew that day that this was it,
That we would end up together.
A simple vocabulary change was all that it was,
But it's a moment I'll cherish forever.

We've talked of our future before;
The future that seemed so far away.
Too early for the commitment I was sure I wanted,
Left only to dream of 'One Day'.

It changed as soon as I used that word;
You smiled and told me you liked it.
Suddenly that future was brought into focus,
So clear and brilliantly lit.

When we got together you said
That I was the one you thought you'd end up with.
I reckoned so, too, but I knew for sure
When I substituted 'when' for 'if'.
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Comments(14)

Aussie_kitty77
Posted 07 Jun 2013 02:59
beautiful

Saga
Posted 03 May 2013 22:34
Oh I loved this! And the audio made it that much more amazing.

Poppet
Posted 21 Apr 2013 13:29
Wonderful job, it was very pretty, and well read.

She
Posted 22 Sep 2012 08:59
Yeah, when we are in love we have this annoying habit of looking through pink shiny glasses. Beautifully expressed devotion to one you love.

stephanie
Posted 05 Jun 2012 16:53
Just listened to this on Audio....... How Perfect!!!! The words, the poem, quite beautiful as a reading experience...... To hear the same words delivered into my ear by the writer, and YES, the actor who wrote them..... Sublime and beautiful. Very affecting. A voice and a vision. I can't praise this enough.

xx SF

Michael
Posted 21 May 2012 03:43
Very romantic word play and highly inventive. So often it is those small changes that create the biggest changes. Great Writing!
Nice voice as well...
Piquet
Posted 16 May 2012 04:43
Nice one Callum. Well done.
cocokisses
Posted 15 May 2012 14:01
beautiful
SecretDesire
Posted 13 May 2012 08:07
Fantastic! Love your poem... wonderful words... 5+++
LauraLee_sugah
Posted 08 May 2012 12:52
you make my heart smile....
mickeyfinn1
Posted 08 May 2012 12:24
from the heart..nice poem!!

Buz
Posted 08 May 2012 05:17
This is excellent writing Callum!

AngelHeart01
Posted 07 May 2012 16:49
Love how it is now ... devotion. All with the one word ♥
etairay
Posted 07 May 2012 15:40
damn ..that is good thank you
 

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