Just finished a new story i've put a lot fo effort into and would love some feedback.

Link >> http://lushstories.com/stories/straight-sex/detention.aspx

lush, what do you think? should i make a part 2?

yeah, it was intentional. I only did a female viewpoint because i thought it showed the story better than if it was form the lifeguard's point of view, because then you wouldn't know exactly why she was being so slutty for him, you know?

I'm thinking of making a part two. is it worth it?

I just finished my first story and I'm dying to know what people think of it.

Can you read it and tell me what you think please?

If so:
http://lushstories.com/stories/straight-sex/the-challenge.aspx

^There's the link^

She wrapped her fingers around the handle, turned around and said, "Just don't let them get to you and I'll see you at lunch." My first day at school. Don't think I'd ever felt so nervous in my whole life before. I could feel every single pair of eyes watch me as i walked to the middle of the class room, barely able to look up. "...My name is Mr. Wilson and I'll be teaching you about...

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As she walked through the entrance, she was relieved to see the pool was almost empty, except for the old lady slowly paddling back and forth across the water. She smiled to herself, she preferred when no-one was in so she could have more space. That's why she always went when most people were at work. She quickly walked to the edge of the pool, her juicy butt reverberating hypnotizingly...

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