hello authors,
any tips on writing realistic descriptions of online encounters? My problem is with the dialogue. In the cold light of morning the chat log is about as erotic as a laundry list (error, some laundry lists are quite good cf Woody Allen).
I feel the reader should be seduced in the same way I was by my cyber partner's chat but oh how to do it?
Many thanks
So I'm thinking that maybe the OP is trying to write his first erotica piece and is hoping to use chat transcripts to accomplish that feat?
I really--and this is only my opinion--don't think that trying to incorporate all of the elements of any given "sexy chat" is a particularly good idea. I've seen it done once, where the author lifted whole direct dialogue from a chat he'd had with me and put it into his story.
Besides feeling slightly violated (plagiarism is plagiarism, and if you lift my words wholesale from a tract, it's plagiarism) the story was perfectly awful. Not seamless, very jumpy--I couldn't even follow it, and I was part of the story. He eventually killed it, I believe, and has left the site.
Point being, read the divine Ms. B, read Jen, read other writers. Learn to use the "sexy chats" more as research and less as actual verbatim material. Good luck.
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Start with 'how r u' followed by 'wanna pvt' and thereafter loads of 'Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh's' and 'Arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh's' and finally 'OMG I hav cum'. The end.
yea thats right up there with Bukowski and Mann and, well simplyjohn of course