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I am reminded of the tale of The Trojan War, when Achilles, driven to despair with grief slayed Hector, cut his heels and proceeded to abuse the corpse for 7 days. Even in death, Hector could not find respite and was to be tormented and violated beyond compare.The same trip with Michael, whilst there can be no denying that his life was a high profile one, it is tragic that this man cannot even be allowed to rest in peace but must have memory and reputation torn between the carrions and jackals of the scandal mill. The mafia has a tradition which I am fond of:upon th successful completion of vendetta, the DOn of the Family responsible for the murder will then attend the funeral of the fallen. At the funeral, all sins are forgiven, and men who were the day before at each others throats will sob in each other arms. Here, respect for the dead is paramount, and supercedes all else. I just hope the judiciary will make a ruling quickly, and allow Michael to finally be at peace.
When I was 9,I played doctor with my next door neighbour Amy. After a few hours of playing I came home to my uncle, in a dreadful state. Being a cop, he was quick to identify there was something wrong, and he asked what was up:"Uncle Dave, I think Amy has had an accident."he got very worried and I could see that look he only ever got when his radio came on."Whats up tony?" he asked."Its Amy. She has this really bad scar between her legs...."
yeah Lush, big oops....Shall write a story about how I WISHED it turned out hahaha
fystee, I give a valentine card...to a girl thats engaged. OUCH
Mines was a total disaster...what about you guys?
roccotool, I think you misunderstood me...I was actually asking for feedback about the ending....I wasnt offended by the comment, I actuallly appreciated the writers honesty.Roccotool thank you for your advice, patience and intervention.I see that I am going to enjoy my time here.<img src="/forum/images/emoticons/happy8.gif" alt="happy8"> <img src="/forum/images/emoticons/happy8.gif" alt="happy8">
First I want to thank everyone who has read and commented my story, Its great to have feedback.To the person who left the comment, indeed anyone else who is willing to help, can you please, please give me some advice as to a better way to end it?
Im really impressed and grateful for the site, its quite therapeutic releasing ones fantasies, and being able to realise that (because Im such an uptight prig lol) that they arent dirty, or nasty, but just an expression of sexuality.I hope to really sharpen my writing skills and my creativity here, and Im really glad to meet you all.
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