Forum posts made by hefjr76

Topic Virgin author seeks some advice
Posted 22 Jun 2008 14:46

I do try to be careful about my paragraphs, but I'll be honest in that I don't usually even proofread these before I post them. I usually sit down and write them out straight through, and then just usually do a quick spell and grammar check in word. I had noticed the odd gaps in between paragraphs o here, but I am unsure how to fix that. I tried in my latest story, by deleting all of the spaces in between my paragraphs, but it still did it. Any ideas?

Topic Virgin author seeks some advice
Posted 14 Jun 2008 15:10

That is a pretty funny video, I can see what made you think of it. The first story, the Dance, was written for a friend, using a few of her ideas. The second was actually the first one I wrote, and inspired by a few of the currents events of my life. I'm working on a theme to tie all of the stories together into the one run-down mall. I'm having fun and working on the ideas for the next one in my head. I don't even sit down to type it until I get all the story in my head.

Topic Virgin author seeks some advice
Posted 14 Jun 2008 04:45

I do appreciate that. I've only written these two so far, but it does help me to forget all of the crap going on in my life. I'm actually kinda surprised that both have my stories have don this well. I had a couple of female friends read them and they liked them but I wanted unbiased opinions. Thanks

Topic Virgin author seeks some advice
Posted 13 Jun 2008 18:08

Just thought I'd pop on here to introduce myself. I recently decided to start writing this kind of thing for the first time. I'd really just like to get some comments on my work, and on how I can improve. I've found that I really enjoy this as an outlet for my frustrations with life right now. Please be nice and let me know what you think!
http://www.lushstories.com/stories/straight-sex/the-dance.aspx
http://www.lushstories.com/stories/straight-sex/hot-breakfast.aspx