Topic Help - with my story
13 Apr 2012 13:47
I think something that many novice writers trip up on is thinking that their first draft should be perfect. You might think your work is a bit slow so far, but keep going with it. First get the ideas down on the page. Then you can take a step back and try to figure out why it's coming across slow.
You might find, as WCB suggests, that you're not starting it in the right place. Look for where the story itself actually starts, it might not be where you thought it was.
How's it going since you posted the message?
Topic Display Pic
02 Mar 2012 19:26
For me it depends on two things:
1) How they approach me and whether it shows any indication that they have, for example, read one of my stories, or looked at my profile.
"Hi, will you be my mistress" tends to come up a lot. That will get you nowhere. "Hi, I read your story and I really liked it," may be more successful. "Hi, I'm so-and-so, I really liked the way you portrayed x-character, what do you think about y-interesting topic of discussion," will get you an express reply.
2) Whether their profile shows them to be interested in... well anything really. Besides sex, we all get that one, I need to know what ELSE.
So if your profile shows cock pics and interests are listed as "tits" and "creampies" then you will be ignored. If they list something real, great. If it lists things I like too, even better. And it helps if it shows that you have posted a comment on a story or on the forum within the activity list's memory.
Ahh, hang on, all of the above applies to people with pictures too. So I guess the short answer to your question is no, not at all.
Although, lack of avatar pic tends to go hand in hand with tossers who want to cam with sluts. It's a stereotype, but an accurate one, unfortunately. Does it really take much effort to run a google image search and pick something?
Topic Story Posters
29 Feb 2012 14:21
I like to make forum banners for my stories. At some point I might look to do some bigger covers. For now, enjoy these three:
Topic Does the boyfriend not want to talk to me? Need opinions.
29 Feb 2012 07:51
So your boyfriend has disappeared and hasn't called or contacted you in any way in a week, with no warning or indication as to why he was going, where or for how long. And you want to know if he doesn't want to talk to you or has something to hide.
My short answer: "No shit, Sherlock."
I don't think even the crappiest of self centered men think they can simply up sticks and leave for a week without any explanation at all.
But, that doesn't necessarily mean the end of the relationship or that there is someone else involved. Some men don't like to be seen when they are vulnerable, so it may be entirely unrelated.
Treating you like this is unacceptable, though. Unfortunately, with no way of contacting him, all you can really do is wait. It won't do you any good to dwell on what the answer might be.
If he is contacting his parents you could try talking reasonably and rationally with them in the hopes that when he next contacts them they will pass your messages on. Try to keep calm and just focus on the fact you are worried about him and want him to treat you with respect.
Good luck. Give it some time and see what happens.
Topic Hunger Games!!!!!!!!
20 Feb 2012 14:35
I've been hearing good things about the books from my writing group for over a year, lol. Finally bought a copy this weekend. I just need to finish the book I'm reading then I'm diving in
Topic Ashamed of Something You've Written?
17 Feb 2012 12:47
Well said, thank you!
I've written stuff I've been disappointed with and stuff I've been embarrassed about, but I don't think I've ever gone as far as ashamed.
I don't think you should ever be ashamed of something you've written. It's just words.
Finding ways to convincingly write something they've never done is what writer's do. For example, I am currently working on a novel about an oddball reporter turned paranormal investigator. I've never been a reporter, let alone an oddball paranormal investigative one.
If you want to write something outside your own experience then go for it, but don't do it because you think it's what people want.
There is nothing wrong with vanilla! A rough BDSM story can be told in a boring, unstimulating way just as a story of boy meets girl and they have missionary sex can be packed with visual, sensual detail, emotion.
It's not about the type of sex you write about, it's about how you write it.
Keep writing. Follow your own instincts, don't try to make yourself into what other people want. Good luck.
Topic Change the start of your sentences.
15 Feb 2012 02:58
Great point Ann :)
For those who struggle with this sort of issue, I think it is something that should be picked up when reading through, rather than consciously worrying about it while writing a first draft. Your first draft is for getting the ideas on the page, you can re-write and improve it once you have that structure.
RF, I agree 100%. In fact, I think your example grates on me more than a string of I or he statements.
A couple of other things to bear in mind with using as statements and verbs with an ing suffix.
1) "As" statements or "-ing" verb statements like RF's examples above describe concurrent actions. That is to say, two things happening at the same time. If you are going to use them, make sure it is physically possible for the things you're describing to happen at the same time.
"Entering the room, he closed the door," for example should really be "he entered the room and closed the door," because he can't close the door at the same time as entering the room.
2) When you describe two pieces of action in the same sentence linked in this way, you make one piece of action subordinate to the other.
"As I leaned over to kiss her, I undid her bra," for example makes the leaning and kissing action a dependant clause. It makes it subordinate and incidental to the other half of the sentence "I undid her bra," which is the focus.
This doesn't make using this type of sentence wrong, it's just something to watch out for. Make sure the piece of action you are tucking away in the dependant clause is the less important of the two.
So, two things to watch out for - misrepresenting consecutive actions as concurrent and weakening important actions by making them subordinate.
I think in writing, there is nothing that you should "never" use, only things you should be wary of using too much.
Topic Getting published.
12 Feb 2012 15:58
Welcome to Lush. I've read your latest story (Nicky, My Babysitter) and I think you've got a lot of potential. There's nothing wrong with your spelling and grammar. The mods here are quite thorough when they check and don't let things through if they're not up to standard in that department.
But, getting published isn't all about the grammar. It's not all about content either. Somewhere between those two you have technique and structure and it's those which turn you from someone who can come up with a story and construct sentences into a good writer. If you'd like some extra feedback I'd be happy to pass on some of my limited experience. There's also a lot of great advice on this forum for starters, especially in Morgan Hawke's board.
Regarding finding a market for your work, try searching the web as Nic suggests. Start building up a list of blogs and markets as you come across them and you'll start to get a feel for what's out there. Network. Word of mouth can be a great way of finding leads. A lot of publishers advertise calls for submissions for short stories, so you might find you want to write something to their specific requirements as a way of getting your foot in the door.
If you're looking to write novel length stories then consider looking into finding an agent as a lot of publishers won't consider you unless you have one.
There are quite a few published authors here, so you could look to see who they are published with as a place to start.
Hope that helps.
Topic unexpected pleasures.
09 Feb 2012 03:25
You already have tonnes of tricks up your sleeve, any more and the poor girl won't know what hit her, lol.
Kim's right though, experimenting together is the key. Personally I think if you go straight for the unexpected or unusual you're less likely to be in her good books and more likely to scare her off. It might make for one fantastic night, but it's not going to build the trust and security you need to make something last.
For me, here's a couple:
- confidence is the biggest turn on ever. A guy who knows what he wants and how he wants it.
- being somewhere other than the bedroom. On the couch always feels like playing naughty teenagers.
- when it's unexpected and unplanned but importantly not my idea.
Any woman would be lucky to have you, Vance, and any that don't hold on with both hands once they have you is a crazy fool.
Topic What's your view on married men seeking casual sex?
08 Feb 2012 09:06
Okay, so several people have already suggested that perhaps you need to make more effort or assumed you're not considering her needs or feelings, but I've been in a similar position where I want more than my partner is inclined to give. I know what it's like to be the one who tries and still gets shot down. After a while, you stop trying, because what's the point?
I'm not condoning cheating though. Believe it or not, talking sometimes works. Not always instantly, but it's always a good start.
Have you actually approached your wife and simply explained how you're feeling, asked her views and listened?
You say the fact that she is not satisfying your needs is your problem not hers but I think if the situation were reversed, a man would be expected to satisfy his wife's needs and might feel inferior or even be stigmatised if he couldn't/didn't want to.
Women aren't a completely different species and shouldn't have a different set of rules in my opinion. If she loves you as much as you love her, one would hope she would care about the fact you have needs and try to satisfy them.
Even if she has made you feel like you cannot bring this sort of subject up to talk about it, you owe her the chance to understand the situation and do something about it before you go seeking your kicks elsewhere.
Talk to her. Good luck.
Topic Is It So Hard To Believe?
05 Feb 2012 16:13
I wrote a story about a virgin couple aged 23 (guy) and 20 (girl), and someone commented on the story to say it seemed unlikely.
I lost my virginity quite early, but, after that one time, I then wasn't with anyone till I was 18. I could quite easily imagine if things had worked out differently I could have still been a virgin in my 20s. It didn't happen that way for me, but it doesn't seem unlikely at all.
I definitely agree there is too much stigma and/or status attached to being a virgin.
Topic my stories
03 Feb 2012 16:42
Only you can be the judge of how much is too much. Inspiration drives us to write, so as long as you feel inspired, and you have the time to devote to it, keep going. Better to be prolific than suffer from writer's block.
One question to ask yourself is whether you are satisfied with the quality of your writing. Do you think you could produce something better if you took more time over it? Do you want to improve the quality or are you happy with it as it is?
I don't get as much time to sit and read stories as I would like, so I can't say I keep up to date with even my favourite authors here.
From the looks of the numbers of votes and comments you have on your stories, you're certainly reaching readers and making an impression. I have no doubt you have some fans out there.
Have you checked to see if you have any followers?
Topic I need help finding a story
03 Feb 2012 10:25
If it was some time ago that you saw this story it may no longer be here. The stories are tied to the members' accounts and if they delete their account the stories are removed from the site. Blackmail and forced sex are against site guidelines and so it is also possible that the story may have been flagged and deleted.
As Gurlyboy says, there is a search function. If you can remember the title or a line from the story that may help. Good luck.
Topic Erotic Stories Dos or Do Nots?
02 Feb 2012 15:11
Is it a No No for a male author to write a first person as if he is a female?
There are no hard and fast rules. If a story is well written it speaks for itself and the gender of the writer should be irrelevant.
Is it a turn off or doesn't it matter?
That's all about the reader's opinions. Write what you want to write, someone will like it. You will never please everyone.
I like making females my main character, what am i supposed to do?
I suggest you stop thinking about your characters as "a male" or "a female" and start thinking of them as individuals. You don't need to know what "a woman" would do or think in the situation you're writing, only what your character would do. If you can nail that, you'll create convincing characters regardless of gender.
Topic How to write sex differently
24 Jan 2012 16:25
Hi Cloud, welcome to Lush :)
You're on the right track in terms of setting up different scenarios in your stories, as this adds structure to your plot. Simply describing a scene doesn't really make a story. That's not to say a simple descriptive scene can't be fun to write or read, but to become a story it needs plot - e.g. challenges the characters must overcome and/or conflict between them.
Something else to look at is your characters' personalities. You'll find the more you try to get inside your character's heads, the more you'll be able to visualize their actions. What emotions are they feeling? Perhaps try writing a reluctant character, or one who feels guilty or ashamed of what they are doing. Vary the amount of experience your characters have, and their confidence. Try writing from the male perspective or from the perspective of a voyeur and see how this changes what you see of the scene.
If you still find you're struggling to find ways of describing things, try reading more stories by other authors and see how they do it, it might give you some fresh ideas.
Hope that helps.
Topic Help please with suitable synonyms for 'muffled'
23 Jan 2012 02:35
All words have specific meanings. So, you won't find another word that means "muffled". You may find synonyms that mean similar things but they will all, for example, "stiffled" or "muted", mean slightly different things.
Scot has a very good point. Instead of writing the scene using the word muffled and then trying to replace that word with a different word, try stepping back and describing the situation differently.
So, for example
She gave a muffled acknowledgement without removing her mouth from his massive member.
His massive member, still filling her mouth turned her reply to nothing more than a moan.
Although adjectives are descriptive words, you do not need to rely on them to provide all of the description in your writing. Instead of using a verb and looking for different adjectives to describe it, look for different verbs.
The other point to remember is that we don't just talk with words, so if you want to convey some meaning without intelligible speech, try describing actions and body language.
In her ecstasy she raked her nails along his thighs causing him to give a muffled cry of protest.
In her ecstasy she raked her nails along his thighs. He bit down, groaning through his clenched teeth and glared at her.
Hope that helps you think up some creative ways round your problems :)
Topic Do you write non-erotica?
16 Jan 2012 15:45
I write a lot of things, mainly speculative fiction (i.e sci/fi, fantasy, paranormal, supernatural etc), often with a romantic element, but also other genres (anything from silly kids stories to sappy poetry to dark horror, anything really). My erotic writing has been confined to short stories, while I have written (or at least started) a number of non-erotic novels.
I'm on Stories Space as MissAdventure.
Topic Blog hop giveaway
15 Jan 2012 04:28
I have a giveaway on my blog this weekend, as part of the Naughty Nights Press six month blog hop. I'm giving away a copy of the Campus Sexploits anthology featuring my short story Youth and Experience.
I hope some of you will check it out and consider entering.
Topic Who to follow on Youtube
15 Dec 2011 14:05
Would it be wrong to plug my own film making groups channel in this thread? Technically it is a channel I follow
Okay, enough shameless self promotion. Check out some slow motion awesomeness:
Topic Campus Sexploits anthology from Naughty Nights Press
09 Dec 2011 16:01
@FtLMale, Wow! Thank you so much! I'm not sure how one goes about signing an ebook, lol. I may have to give this some thought.
And, I just found out you can also buy from Amazon for Kindle - http://www.amazon.co.uk/Campus-Sexploits-ebook/dp/B006K3LJVU/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1323474625&sr=8-1
Topic Campus Sexploits anthology from Naughty Nights Press
09 Dec 2011 08:48
My first ever published story, "Youth and Experience" is now available to buy as part of the Naughty Nights Press Campus Sexploits anthology.
You can buy it from All Romance books - https://www.allromanceebooks.com/product-campussexploits-654574-144.html
Did you ever do anything in college that was considered “outrageous” by your friends? Have one amazing night with a sex god only to never see him again? Play naughty sorority games that left you breathless and yet sexually satisfied? Or did you perhaps want to join your roommate in a naughty ménage a trois?
Campus Sexploits is the first book in a series of anthologies all about the fantasy fun days of youth. Four naughty college/university themed erotic short stories to tantalize and tease the senses while giving readers a little taste of the wickedly erotic worlds these four fantastic authors can weave. Worlds of incredible earth shattering sexual freedom involving college or university students and the sexual antics they participate in. Worlds you can just feel yourself fall into...
I hope some of you will take a look :)
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
03 Nov 2011 08:48
Not sure I've seen this one mentioned before:
I have a private album and I received some comments on the photos within. However, when I click on the link in the notification email or the link in the black box pop up, I get a 404 error.
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
03 Nov 2011 07:55
I've just been told my blog posts have been showing up as unreadable code...I've seen this mentioned before, but was not aware it was a widespread issue...
Just adding to the big "To-Do" list...I'll try not to let it happen again...
Just noticed I'm having the same problem with this.
My blog post looked fine on my profile while I was logged in but then I changed one of my privacy settings and wanted to check how things looked from the outside. When I logged out and then went to my profile I just saw a big block of code.
I'll leave it up for the time being in case it helps with figuring out the cause.
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
02 Nov 2011 13:32
MOW, you have a in-depth understanding of the code, fancy a job?
Na, I just live with a code monkey, so I've gotten quite good at translating geekspeak into laymans.
Or was that a sarcastic dig to stop trying to explain what I don't understand
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
02 Nov 2011 10:22
I believe you that the votes cannot be retrieved and restored but the votes had to include scores (each vote only registers at 1 to 5) because the loss off votes changed the scores in some cases quite a lot.
Nothing can be done but it is still a very bad bummer!
That I can't answer. Maybe Gav can shed some light as to how it worked out the average with no scores in the database, lol. I'm voting for magic.
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
02 Nov 2011 09:26
I want my votes restored! I think we all do!
Angel said I should say "pretty please." So here is a big PLEASE! PLEASE WITH A MUG OF BEER!
I think you may have misunderstood. The information doesn't exist. It can't be restored. It's not that Gav hasn't or won't do it, it's not possible.
The information existed in v1 as - a number of member votes with scores, a number of anonymous votes with no scores, a temporary total and a temporary average score.
The anonymous votes have disappeared in the transfer because they had no scores attached. When you get a new vote, the temporary total and scores are recalculated from the remaining data, which only includes member votes from before the switch and any votes after the switch.
I'm sure Gav will put me right if I'm explaining this wrong.
Sorry everyone. I've lost votes too, but they are gone.
Topic Lush V2 Bug List
31 Oct 2011 15:56
I thought that might be the case. I found it strange that only one of my stories was affected, but I understand now. The anonymous votes remain (like little ghosts of v1) only until you receive a further vote after the switch.
Hmm, probably shouldn't let it get out that the next vote on a popular story will likely slash it's vote count by a third, it'll become a whole new way to vote people down, literally, lol.
Topic How old is too old for you?
31 Oct 2011 03:03
There was another thread about age differences a while back which you might want to have a look at - http://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_postst19511_do-you-go-for-older-guys.aspx
For me it's hard to say. My partner is the same age as me and we have been together since we were 18.
I like to think I would have no limits and I seem to connect well with older guys as friends. I've formed some very close online friendships with a couple of guys in their sixties on lush and one of them in particular definitely does it for me (I'm 27 btw).
Thinking practically in terms of a long term relationship, with a house and kids etc... I think anything more than about 10 years difference will ultimately lead to problems.
Topic Writing about a past lover while in a relationship.
31 Oct 2011 02:49
Honestly I've never felt the urge to write about my one other past lover, so it's hard for me to relate. That's less a matter or guilt or awkward feelings because of my current partner and more a matter of not having anything good to write about, lol.
The closest I've come is writing a fantasy about a real life friend of mine and I did share that with my partner. Ironically, he was more comfortable with that than reading stories I had written based on chat sessions with friends on Lush.
Hypothetically, I think it would depend on how long I'd been seeing the new person, how relaxed and confident I felt about the relationship and how open minded my new lover was. Nothing would ever stop me writing what I wanted to write, but if I thought it would hurt them or make them feel uncomfortable I would hold off on showing them until a more appropriate moment. I think I would show them eventually.