Forum posts made by nathandrake

Topic Help...I've been arrested by the grammar police
Posted 29 May 2013 23:08

I only got slightly annoyed by a rejection one time. At first it was sent back by sprite for a legit reason regarding subject matter guidelines, and I agreed with sprite and removed it from the story. The thing is, when I resubmitted it went to a different verifier who then rejected it for something different, something that apparently didn't bother sprite. It was borderline maybe, but I disagreed with the reason it was rejected, and also wished it went back to sprite because I never was satisfied with the changes I made.

It's not a big deal here, I was annoyed for about ten minutes. I understand that some of this stuff is borderline and comes down to a judgement call. I'm just posting for the sake of making a post.

Topic which do you think is the better movie
Posted 26 Dec 2012 10:39

Shawshank, but that "I miss you Jenny" scene in Forrest Gump is one of the best scenes in movie history... I must have got something in my eyes because they were really watery.

Topic Can I get an interview with you?
Posted 12 Dec 2012 09:34

Title: The Stalking Dead

Genre/Category: Pink Elephant

Link: Can't post the link, perhaps I don't have enough forum posts. It's the first story on my profile page.

1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?

I had the idea of writing a post-apocalyptic zombie story for a few weeks, mainly from watching the good TV show The Walking Dead. Writing an action scene sounded like it would be fun, and it was, especially this:

I glanced over and saw Tabitha swing her axe handle like Babe Ruth, and that motherfucking zombie's head flew off and zipped past me like a line-drive base hit to right field.


Zombie chick began yelling sloppy gibberish from her gaping maw. She sounded like a deaf seal.

2. How did you come up with these characters?

This story is in the Pink Elephant (incest) category, but originally I wanted it to be my first straight sex story. Couldn't do it. I found that even with the tension from being stalked and chased by zombies, it still wasn't enough for me. I can't seem to write an erotica story without the tension that Pink Elephant brings. That tension drives the words out of me.

3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?

It has zombies in it, some action.

4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?

Like all of my stories, the challenge is of making the Big Taboo as natural and as palatable as possible. Where the reader says: "okay that's taboo but I can see that happening", or, "I'm not usually into this genre but that was pretty good." To make my characters sound like normal human beings caught up in the circumstance of feeling attraction where they're not supposed to. The motivation is organic and not contrived. Normally people don't act on it an move on, but since this an erotica site, my characters do.

The other challenge is putting words together to form sentences. Sentences that are not only functioning and readable, but entertaining to read. I'm not a "writer". I only wrote Amazon product reviews before this, never fiction. Editing myself and getting to the point is another challenge. I like the build-up a bit too much, and one reason for that is writing sex scenes in ways that I haven't written before is sometimes excruciating (lol), so I find myself stalling.

5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?

I like it, it was fun to write. I got positive comments from sprite and Dancing Doll, which is like getting them from Al Pacino and Meryl Streep if you're an actor. Honesty, it's also too long, and there are not enough zombies in it. The second sex scene is superfluous and hurts the pacing.

I think it only took me about 4 or 5 days to write it.

I have Episode Two half-written. It's a pretty simple straight sex story, my first. I'm up to the sex scene and I dropped the story like a sack of dead zombies (true dead). So if I could get sprite or Dancing Doll to write the sex scene for me, and credit them, I would.

(I'm now thinking about writing a story about an invasion of actual real live Pink Elephants.)

Topic Site Outage – 22 September
Posted 21 Sep 2012 20:57

They're back. Thanks Gav.

edit: oh, you still have the old problems. Hope you get it worked out.

Topic Site Outage – 22 September
Posted 21 Sep 2012 19:33

...and we're back.

anyone lost any cheese?

Whats up. Four of my stories are missing.

Topic What do you look for in a story?
Posted 07 Aug 2012 14:54

A down-to-earth realism is what I enjoy the most, particularly from stories in the incest category which usually don't sound believable to me.

I love dialogue that sounds like words people would say and is easy on the ear.

Of course, effortless prose and wordplay are a pleasure to read but I understand how difficult it is to construct interesting sentences so I'm lenient if solid realism makes up for it. (personally just about every sentence I write takes too much effort.)

A sense of humor, especially in the incest category, is appreciated. It usually humanizes the characters.

Good description is nice. I greatly admire writers who have the talent to describe sex in interesting ways. Personally I find writing sex acts to be tedious and difficult and it's my least favorite thing to do. I prefer the build up, which is why my stories are way too long. I have quite a few build ups written on my hard drive that all abruptly stop right at the beginnings of sex.

Topic Why Do People Have to Be So Crap?
Posted 04 Aug 2012 02:01

Regular as clockwork, at least twice a year, somebody says something mean about how I look. They are always strangers, always men, always in public (usually as we pass each other in the street), and always for no reason with no eye contact or provocation.

You just don't notice women saying mean things because more often it'll be behind your back.

I have more experience hearing women saying cruel, vicious things about other women, than men saying mean things to a woman to her face. Actually, for every one mean thing I heard a man say to a woman I've heard thousands of compliments.

Save some pepper spray for your fellow women.

Topic Getting Negative Comments
Posted 21 Apr 2012 16:53

Boringly is a bad adverb. That's what I learned from that comment. I also limit using the word very. It's often unnecessary. I do split infinitives though. Screw that.

Have you ever received a negative comment/s that you think was unjust?

As far as I know I've never received a negative comment. I'm sure people were thinking negative things while reading my stories, but for whatever reason they didn't post them. I have a good idea what problems my stories have anyway, so if they did post an honest negative comment, I'd probably agree with them.

edit: I've received one negative comment about an ending, the rest of the comment was positive.

Topic Remove the "Top Authors for the month" section?
Posted 23 Dec 2011 11:34

Some people prefer mediocrity over excellence. Like giving a trophy to every team that participated so they all don't get their little feelings hurt.

Political correctness makes me want to vomit! Competition spurs excellence. Set a goal and work hard to achieve it. If you don't make it get, your ass in gear and try again.

Keep the "Top Authors for the Month" section!

I love this man. In a manly way. I enjoy most popular lists, 1 to 5 ratings, votes, competition, and all that stuff. The more the better. It's fun to see what people react to and like. It would be disappointing if any of it were removed. I agree that maybe this Top Author list could be improved with a minimum of votes or something, I really don't get how it works.

Topic Your top 10 celebrities you love to have sex with.
Posted 29 Nov 2011 09:37

1) Kristen Stewart (I like her two front rabbit teeth and her hair and eyes)
2) Emma Watson (a lovely package of sexy cuteness with nice legs and a charming demeanor)
3) Veronica Belmont (a cute and bubbly electronics "geek" with raw sexuality lurking underneath)
4) Charlize Theron (no words needed)
5) Natalie Portman (at the top back in the day, is losing appeal these days though. Sorry Natalie. And yeah, she was hot in the movie The Professional. Oops, I mean cute.)

6) Ingrid Bergman and Grace Kelly (two of my favorite starlets)
7) Famke Janssen (tall brunette, I love very tall women)
8) Ivanka Trump (I don't know, I love the way this huge blonde carries herself, with class and elegance, plus she's really intelligent)
9) Kate Beckinsale (no words needed, except "the ultimate brunette")
10) Lee Triffon (just discovered her after I listened to the great song I Dive by Shulman. An amazing voice and a startling beauty. I have a picture of her in my image gallery (her best picture).

11) Diane Lane (MILF)

Topic Innate Bisexuality
Posted 10 Nov 2011 00:41


Topic Innate Bisexuality
Posted 09 Nov 2011 21:44


Topic What is the most important factor in attracting readers?
Posted 08 Sep 2011 16:10

What Mistress of Words said is good advice. I'll add, try not to start a story with:

"I was sitting in my room staring at the four walls..."

Kind of cliche. I did something like that in my last silly story and it annoys me. My title also stunk:

Keira and Mila . Sounds like it's going to be a boring Russian love story or something. It should have been Keira and Mila Go Crazy or Keira and Mila Get Wild and Naked .

I was glad that story didn't get views though, I just wanted to write something without a War & Peace sized build up for a change.

edit: when I say it didn't get views, I mean for an incest story ;)

Topic Embellishment
Posted 22 May 2011 22:40


Topic Why do the nice guys always get passed over when girls are looking for a guy?
Posted 22 Apr 2011 06:41

If a guy is looking for a good example of a "bad boy", read Dancing Doll's story The Cabo Connection. Of course, there's few men who can pull off the confident/cocky attitude the bad boy character does in this story, but it gives you a general idea. Notice the bar scene and later scenes. He:

- is not afraid, to use the old cliche, knock the female character off her pedestal
- is not intimidated by her sexuality
- can take it or leave it