I tried to publish a story and it was rejected due to "bad dialogue structure". Silly me, I thought I was writing an erotic story and not a paper for English class. Nevertheless, I have looked over my piece and cannot find the offending sentence structure. Maybe someone can read it over for me a second time and help bail me out of grammar jail.
Thanks in advance!
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Sweetaboo
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I hate to disagree with you but I must. I agree that some might be born in wrong body and be transgenered and hate the idea that they have a penis, not a clit, or a pussy and not a dick but I have met a few who enjoy the shemale lifestyle, being both a woman and a man. They don't just exist in pornography, real shemales exists in every avenue of life.
Hormone replacement therapy is what gives a MTF transsexual a feminine appearance and causes the breasts to grow. HRT also destroys the functionality of the penis. And I have never heard of a transgendered woman who would appreciate being called a "shemale".
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"Shemale" is a despicable term for transgendered people, akin to "negro" for African-Americans. A "shemale" is generally a completely female-appearing woman with large breasts and a fully-functioning penis. Such a person exists only in pornography. The question posed in this thread should be "Would you fuck a sexy pre-op trans-woman?"
To answer the question, my first instinct is to say no. But never say never.
Also, it's a common misconception that a pre-op trans-woman would want to fuck you. That requires using a part of her anatomy that causes her shame and that she wishes she could get rid of. If I ever did sleep with a trans-woman, it would never cross my mind to want to play with her "thingy". It would be cruel and insensitive to assume she would want me to.
To answer the question, my first instinct is to say no. But never say never.
Also, it's a common misconception that a pre-op trans-woman would want to fuck you. That requires using a part of her anatomy that causes her shame and that she wishes she could get rid of. If I ever did sleep with a trans-woman, it would never cross my mind to want to play with her "thingy". It would be cruel and insensitive to assume she would want me to.
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I guess I am one of the few that finds this to be an amazing turn-on. They say if you find a girl that will let you pee on her, you've found a keeper. And for those who think this is icky or disgusting, it it worth mentioning that pee is 100% sterile, antiseptic in fact, when coming "directly from the tap". Kissing is actually much more disgusting from a hygenic point of view. As to the question posed at the top of the thread, it's actually not possible for a male to urinate during actual intercourse.
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I think the answer to that question is anatomical. A man gets his climax from sticking his member into something (whether it be a hand, a pussy, an ass, or a hole in a tree for that matter). He busts his nut and it's done. There is no vulnerability involved, and therefore emotions can easily be separated. For a woman, sex is an entirely different experience, as it requires something to be inserted into her body. This means that sex for a woman is by definition a surrender to vulnerability. Allowing yourself to be vulnerable requires emotions. So, for a woman, sex and love are intertwined for this reason.
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Focus on smell and touch and add a layer of emotion. Visual imagery is good, but too much description of body parts and not enough description of intimacy clearly sells more to a male audience than a female audience. Also, be descriptive as to the situation and the characters. A guy can fuck pretty much anywhere and get off. A woman needs an arousing setting, as well as arousing talk, arousing smells, arousing touches, even arousing tastes if you can describe that.
Hope that helps.
Hope that helps.
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I would like to publish some of my previous stories here on Lush. The problem is that they deal with gay guys who try straight sex for the first time, which is definitely a taboo if you belong to the LGBT community. But the "taboo" section mostly has stories about boss/employee, teacher/student, or some other pairing in which one is more powerful than the other. The "bisexual" section is mostly about threesomes. So I'm wondering what would be the best category?
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Introduce the title of your story: Daddy's Man-Cave
Genre/Category: Incest
Provide the link:
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
I had written five previous stories in other genres and decided to try my hand at incest.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
Both the father and the daughter are strongly based on people I know. The father had a very small appearance as a teenager in a previous story. The father's buddies who show up at the birthday party were the main characters in that story. In the opening scene, the man at the bank who finds out he's been scammed was the central character in yet another story. All my stories take place in the same universe.
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
It's the first story to not be about a gay guy trying straight sex.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
Finding a way to make the daughter's seduction and the father's giving in believable. I've read a lot of stories in the genre where that just doesn't sell. Before writing this story, I did a lot of searching things like advice about what to do if your own daughter is sexually attracted to you or how to sexually seduce your father. The scene where Monica drops the bath robe comes from the advice that was given on those forums. I don't know if I accomplished the goal of making that seduction and giving in believable, but I hope I have.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
I've since written a second story called The Ultimatum, which is the same story as told by the father instead of the daughter. I write in first person, so I wanted to tell the story of the father's thoughts toward what transpired, as well as set up for the sequel I'm currently writing.
Genre/Category: Incest
Provide the link:
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
I had written five previous stories in other genres and decided to try my hand at incest.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
Both the father and the daughter are strongly based on people I know. The father had a very small appearance as a teenager in a previous story. The father's buddies who show up at the birthday party were the main characters in that story. In the opening scene, the man at the bank who finds out he's been scammed was the central character in yet another story. All my stories take place in the same universe.
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
It's the first story to not be about a gay guy trying straight sex.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
Finding a way to make the daughter's seduction and the father's giving in believable. I've read a lot of stories in the genre where that just doesn't sell. Before writing this story, I did a lot of searching things like advice about what to do if your own daughter is sexually attracted to you or how to sexually seduce your father. The scene where Monica drops the bath robe comes from the advice that was given on those forums. I don't know if I accomplished the goal of making that seduction and giving in believable, but I hope I have.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
I've since written a second story called The Ultimatum, which is the same story as told by the father instead of the daughter. I write in first person, so I wanted to tell the story of the father's thoughts toward what transpired, as well as set up for the sequel I'm currently writing.