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Mystory ending

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6 Feb 2008

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30 Jan 2008

First I want to thank everyone who has read and commented my story, Its great to have feedback.

To the person who left the comment, indeed anyone else who is willing to help, can you please, please give me some advice as to a better way to end it?

30 Jan 2008

I wouldn't leave a disrespectful comment like that, but I would recommend a spelling/grammar check. I don't see anything wrong with the ending, either.

31 Jan 2008

roccotool, I think you misunderstood me...I was actually asking for feedback about the ending....I wasnt offended by the comment, I actuallly appreciated the writers honesty.

Roccotool thank you for your advice, patience and intervention.

I see that I am going to enjoy my time here.
happy8

31 Jan 2008

Opps, sorry freddy, I deleted the comment, I thought you had taken offence too!

Welcome again welcomes

6 Feb 2008

Nice story Hon, I left a comment & rated your story. My suggestion would fit the bill, at least for me on a your alternate ending.JggxNzd2QGMQagSK