So I have a new story written, but I am trying to do something a bit different (for me). I am writing a companion piece that rather than being a prequel or sequel, happens in parallel. You see, the one that I have written is about a groom getting left at the altar and getting some "comfort" (of the Lush variety) from a good friend. Now I want to write what happens to the bride in roughly the same timeframe. That may be followed by a third story that is a sequel to both and ties things back together but we shall see. But, damn, it is harder than I thought. I had something written yesterday but realized it broke a couple of the touchpoints I had set up in the groom's story so I'm back to square one trying to rewrite it to fit better.
Anyone else who has done this before care to share wisdom (surely it's not a new idea on Lush)? Did you just actually keep cross-referencing as you wrote to keep things in sync or just write the parallel piece and then deal with sync'ing things up later?
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Hi Seeker4.
OceanRunner and VirgoGo did a collaboration of this variety about two months back (roughly). Their "Bling and a Blowjob (His / Hers)" stories. Mike (OR) telling the tale from one perspective and VirgoGo from the other. Have a read and see if this is the vein you're thinking. I'm sure they'll see this and pop in anyway. Good luck!
OceanRunner and VirgoGo did a collaboration of this variety about two months back (roughly). Their "Bling and a Blowjob (His / Hers)" stories. Mike (OR) telling the tale from one perspective and VirgoGo from the other. Have a read and see if this is the vein you're thinking. I'm sure they'll see this and pop in anyway. Good luck!
Primus Omnium
Greetings. I noticed in the Bar that you were referring to this writing project. I've also written a series called Death in the Family. It has three parts and they are from various viewpoints of people in the household, including the new widow, and some of the servants in the house. It might be of interest to you.
Hi all - here are the Bling links, if anyone is interested:
Bling and a Blowjob - His (oceanrunner)
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/oral-sex/bling-and-a-blowjob-a-tiffanys-story.aspx
Bling and a Blowjob - Hers (VirgoGo)
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/oral-sex/bling-and-a-blowjob-a-tiffanys-story-1.aspx
I also tried writing the same side of the same story by myself a while back.
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/quickie-sex/the-doorbell-variation-1.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/quickie-sex/the-doorbell-variation-2.aspx
Oddly, I think I did a better job in the second version, from the woman's pov.
I have a theory about why this happens to me sometimes.
First off, I'm always more nervous about writing from a woman's pov, so I think I may be more careful in certain respects.
But here's where I'm curious if other people have had the same experience.
I'm pretty confident that I "get" the typical guy. If I write from the guy's pov, and I'm writing a MF story, then the woman has to behave plausibly, whatever that means in the context of the story, without the benefit of the reader knowing her internal monologue. So I have the limited benefit, so to speak, of writing from a "comfortable" male pov while at the same time having to make the female character act in a way that makes sense, but without the advantage of showing the reader what she's thinking except through her actions.
If I choose to write from the woman's pov, then I get to sort of explain what's going on in her head, whether it's 1st or 3rd. presumably I can make her actions make sense. And then I just have to have the guy react plausibly, which to me is easier.
Curious to hear what others think.
Bling and a Blowjob - His (oceanrunner)
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/oral-sex/bling-and-a-blowjob-a-tiffanys-story.aspx
Bling and a Blowjob - Hers (VirgoGo)
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/oral-sex/bling-and-a-blowjob-a-tiffanys-story-1.aspx
I also tried writing the same side of the same story by myself a while back.
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/quickie-sex/the-doorbell-variation-1.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/quickie-sex/the-doorbell-variation-2.aspx
Oddly, I think I did a better job in the second version, from the woman's pov.
I have a theory about why this happens to me sometimes.
First off, I'm always more nervous about writing from a woman's pov, so I think I may be more careful in certain respects.
But here's where I'm curious if other people have had the same experience.
I'm pretty confident that I "get" the typical guy. If I write from the guy's pov, and I'm writing a MF story, then the woman has to behave plausibly, whatever that means in the context of the story, without the benefit of the reader knowing her internal monologue. So I have the limited benefit, so to speak, of writing from a "comfortable" male pov while at the same time having to make the female character act in a way that makes sense, but without the advantage of showing the reader what she's thinking except through her actions.
If I choose to write from the woman's pov, then I get to sort of explain what's going on in her head, whether it's 1st or 3rd. presumably I can make her actions make sense. And then I just have to have the guy react plausibly, which to me is easier.
Curious to hear what others think.
Gravelly-Voiced Fucker
That's sounds like a great idea. Good luck. I did something like that with the Open stories and it was really fun.
One problem I had was not noticing that some of the details contradicted each other in the two stories, because I had misremembered what I had written in the other story (some of that was on purpose in my stories, but that's just me being weird). So reread to make sure the details match up. And I also found I needed to change the plot of the first story while I was writing the second story, because I figured out a better way to plot it. I actually went back and did a rewrite of the first story on Lush right before I submitted the second story. So realize you can go back in and change the first story if you find a better way to do it.
I love writing from a woman's POV. It's hot to be inside a woman's head.
Good luck! It sounds like a cool project.
One problem I had was not noticing that some of the details contradicted each other in the two stories, because I had misremembered what I had written in the other story (some of that was on purpose in my stories, but that's just me being weird). So reread to make sure the details match up. And I also found I needed to change the plot of the first story while I was writing the second story, because I figured out a better way to plot it. I actually went back and did a rewrite of the first story on Lush right before I submitted the second story. So realize you can go back in and change the first story if you find a better way to do it.
I love writing from a woman's POV. It's hot to be inside a woman's head.
Good luck! It sounds like a cool project.
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One problem I had was not noticing that some of the details contradicted each other in the two stories, because I had misremembered what I had written in the other story (some of that was on purpose in my stories, but that's just me being weird).
This was one of the problems I ran into with draft 1 of the woman's story. In the man's story, I had explicitly said a neighbour told the limo driver that she heard the bride and bridesmaid leave the bridesmaid's apartment around midnight, but in the woman's story they woke up in the apartment.dXxTPinhhYIf1tZC
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First off, I'm always more nervous about writing from a woman's pov, so I think I may be more careful in certain respects.
But here's where I'm curious if other people have had the same experience.
I'm pretty confident that I "get" the typical guy. If I write from the guy's pov, and I'm writing a MF story, then the woman has to behave plausibly, whatever that means in the context of the story, without the benefit of the reader knowing her internal monologue. So I have the limited benefit, so to speak, of writing from a "comfortable" male pov while at the same time having to make the female character act in a way that makes sense, but without the advantage of showing the reader what she's thinking except through her actions.
If I choose to write from the woman's pov, then I get to sort of explain what's going on in her head, whether it's 1st or 3rd. presumably I can make her actions make sense. And then I just have to have the guy react plausibly, which to me is easier.
Curious to hear what others think.
The woman's POV I am not too worried about this time. I've written with female POV in both first and third person before so I know I can pull it off. It's more figuring out why she does what she does and then framing that in a way that won't contradict the man's story.
I'm taking another go at the woman's story today and it's working better this time so we shall see. At least the opening sex (in a nightclub) is hot so I got that much right. I'm itching to post the first story but I'd rather have both done in case I need to make changes to for "fit" as Verbal discussed.
The Right Rev of Lush
Seeker, I gave this a try on Lush 'way back when' with only limited success. In that case, I wrote to separate stories retelling the same events. One was in third person from the female pov. The other was first-person in the man's pov.
I've also had surprising success using a female pov. My only contest winner is first-person female pov and my RR is female pov third-person.
I'm not as cerebral as others using an opposite gender pov. all I do is try to put myself in the woman's head and describe the events and what she's seeing and feeling from her perspective. That said, I think it might be best to make the first story the one in the opposite gender.
As always, don't hesitate to get back to me if you want to cuss, fuss or discuss my stories and/or thoughts on this subject.
Here are the links:
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/interracial/disorderly-orderly-1.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/wife-lovers/disorderly-nurse.aspx
I've also had surprising success using a female pov. My only contest winner is first-person female pov and my RR is female pov third-person.
I'm not as cerebral as others using an opposite gender pov. all I do is try to put myself in the woman's head and describe the events and what she's seeing and feeling from her perspective. That said, I think it might be best to make the first story the one in the opposite gender.
As always, don't hesitate to get back to me if you want to cuss, fuss or discuss my stories and/or thoughts on this subject.
Here are the links:
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/interracial/disorderly-orderly-1.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/wife-lovers/disorderly-nurse.aspx
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Well, something I was thinking about for story 2 poked a bit of a hole in story 1. There's a scene of "dialogue" (it's people texting back and forth rather than talking, hence the quotes) that appears in both and as I was revisiting it for the second story, I realized that something about it didn't make sense. So now I'm going to write a new version for the second story and then go back and revise it in the first to match.
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In that case, I wrote to separate stories retelling the same events.
I'm not really retelling the same events so much as what happens to each of the protagonists in a similar time period (the aborted wedding day). The woman's story basically explains why the man's story even happens, ie. why the bride leaves the groom at the altar. Different things happen to each, save for a scene or two that necessarily have to appear in both (e.g. the groom texting the bride to find out what the f*** is going on).
Gravelly-Voiced Fucker
Quote by VirgoGo
Even when your bride and groom are talking, each can recall things a bit differently. Don't be afraid to introduce a few misalignments...it can make things more interesting!
This is a great idea.
It makes me want to write two stories where some key event is remembered very differently by the two main characters.
Good thread.
So, after working on the second story for a bit, I have realized two things;
- I went in an altogether wrong direction in the second story. I basically turned the bride into a "slut" and that's not what's needed.
- A key element in the first story felt seriously forced. I had another version that flowed better but involved sex between two people that I wasn't sure should be getting it on, even though it felt right putting them together.
So I'm not sure where this is going now. I hope it's just me having second thoughts due to my struggles with the second one and maybe I'll get back on an even keel later but if I scrap and start over as I'm currently thinking ... this project could be another stillbirth. It is rare for me to scrap and restart and actually finish. Once that happens, SHIFT+DELETE isn't far behind. I have a lot of those which is why i publish so rarely anymore.
- I went in an altogether wrong direction in the second story. I basically turned the bride into a "slut" and that's not what's needed.
- A key element in the first story felt seriously forced. I had another version that flowed better but involved sex between two people that I wasn't sure should be getting it on, even though it felt right putting them together.
So I'm not sure where this is going now. I hope it's just me having second thoughts due to my struggles with the second one and maybe I'll get back on an even keel later but if I scrap and start over as I'm currently thinking ... this project could be another stillbirth. It is rare for me to scrap and restart and actually finish. Once that happens, SHIFT+DELETE isn't far behind. I have a lot of those which is why i publish so rarely anymore.