Please help me!

22 Jun 2009

Ok being new this I need help and I'm relying on you guys for advice. Outside of lush I have created many great stories that people love. I love sex and am a equally good writer so I thought hey why not. I posted my last story and got told words are my power point but need help otherwise. Please read my stories (if u wish) and tell me what I can do to improvise on this or should I just go back to regular stories?
Thanx
Scarlet dontknow

22 Jun 2009

Welcome to the site Scarlet hello2

Come on folks, show some encouragement to a new author here a1089

22 Jun 2009

Quote by SinfulOne82
Ok being new this I need help and I'm relying on you guys for advice. Outside of lush I have created many great stories that people love. I love sex and am a equally good writer so I thought hey why not. I posted my last story and got told words are my power point but need help otherwise. Please read my stories (if u wish) and tell me what I can do to improvise on this or should I just go back to regular stories?
Thanx
Scarlet

The stories OK ...

I only pay great attention to the layout ..there was a couple of spelling mistakes the spellchecker would have picked up
but nothing serious ....this is how I would layout the last paragraph

He then lays next to me on the massage table and says I want to see you again. I say that I would like that very much he give me his room number and gets dressed. He apologizes about the ripping of my clothes and I say.

"There is no need to feel bad I keep a spare here."

It was a nice dress from nights out when i didn't have time to go home and get changed and they had a shower here so I quickly showered after I said goodbye as we kissed. I put on my dress and tidied up a bit in the room and then left. My co-worker Carla said.

"Are you sure you are ok Chicky? You look awfully flushed." I just looked at her and smiled and she said

"I KNEW IT." She practically shrieked it.

I just looked at her with my questioning eyes and said "Know what?" She looked as happy as a puppy dog going for a ride with their master and said.

"You got laid by Jason didn't you." I walked quicker not answering her. She caught up with me and said.

"No biggy hun shit I would have too if I were not already married but here is the thing, I met my man the same way."

She put her arm around me and we walked out and locked up. I saw Jason later on that night and things went from there.