I need advice on a story series.

27 Mar 2010

I have written a story about a truck driver who meets a lady in a bar and they enjoy a quickie together in his truck. Then while leaving the truck stop she gets accused by a security guard of being a "Lot Lizard" (truck stop prostitute) and is kicked off the property. A few weeks later, they meet up when he passes through her town again and she lives out a lot lizard fantasy with him. The story stretches out to over 10,000 words so I decided to split it into Part 1 and Part 2 for readers with a shorter attention span. Now, I want to make this a series with our "Hero" having other sexual adventures in his travels around the country. I have 4 more episodes in mind so far.

The original story was written in the first person:
Not that I have a girl in every port but, as a long-haul truck driver, I have met a few ladies over the years that I have the pleasure to visit once in a while when I pass through their towns. Suzy is one of these ladies. She lives in Albuquerque and I met her at a bar a couple of months ago when I had to layover one night waiting to deliver my load the next day. There’s a bar across the street from the truck stop where I parked for the night. I went in just to have a couple of beers to wind down before hitting the sack. Suzy was there drinking Margaritas with a couple of girlfriends. I hadn’t planned to try to pick anyone up; just watch some sports on TV and have a couple beers. But then she made eye contact with me and gave me one of those ‘come hither’ smiles.

So here is my question for all you literary gurus out there. Now that this will become a series, should I change to third person narrative style?
Not that he has a girl in every port but, as a long-haul truck driver, Joe has met a few ladies over the years that he has had the pleasure to visit once in a while when he passes through their towns. Suzy is one of these ladies. She lives in Albuquerque and Joe met her at a bar a couple of months ago when he had to layover one night waiting to deliver a load the next day. There’s a bar across the street from the truck stop where he parked for the night. Joe went in just to have a couple of beers to wind down before hitting the sack. Suzy was there drinking Margaritas with a couple of girlfriends. He hadn’t planned to try to pick anyone up; just watch some sports on TV and have a couple beers. But then she made eye contact with him and gave him one of those ‘come hither’ smiles.

My concern is that the First Person style will not be sustainable over a long series of stories. Also, I may use other people as the main characters in other episodes so I don't want the series to be locked into "Me" or even just "Joe".

Also, I need some help on a title for the series. The story was originally titled "The Truck Stop" but I need something more all encompassing for his erotic travels across the country. Then I guess I could subtitle each episode.

I would also like to find someone to proofread and edit the stories with me. I am terrible at proofreading my own work. I have three other stories posted here if you want to check out my writing style.

Mile High Club in a Balloon (When I submitted this story, wellmademale suggested I enter it in the Earth Day competition. If he thought it was worthy to be considered for the competition, I hope all of you read it and vote. Thanks for the shameless plug.

Foreplay

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Thank you all in advance and I gladly accept all constructive criticisms (he said with great trepidation).

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29 Mar 2010

This is a tough one hotairgasm. You could use something along the lines of: "The adventures of....", but that's not going to work if you're switching to different people as the main characters across a series of stories.

You don't have much of a choice really other than to write in third person if you are treating them as a series of interwoven stories with different main characters.

Anyone else?

29 Mar 2010

If you're going to keep it to the "hero", I'd recommend staying in the first person. It lends itself well to "more adventures from our hero..." Lexylove did it with her Sin City Stories and I did it with a few of my multi-part ones. If people liked the character, they want to read more, as he experiences it through his own eyes.

I don't do any proofreading anymore, sorry.

30 Mar 2010

I'd say if your truck driver is one having the sexual adventures in various towns and such then keep it going from his perspective. It helps the readers get into the stories if they already know the character, and can hear exactly what he's thinking and how he sees things.

31 Mar 2010

It is possible to jump to different point of views. Have done it in a few stories. It really does depend on the structure.
The series could be called “Adventures of a Lot Lizard”
Part 1: From the first driver’s point of view.
Part 2: From the point of view of the lizard (love that!)
Part 3: From the owner of the truck stop retelling events to, say, a policeman?

Just first thoughts. Sure you will come up with more.
As for editors – it is difficult to find good editors/proofreaders. Thankfully, have two for my transgender stories and one for the FemDom. Always need more so if you have any extra...
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1 Apr 2010

Possible title: Trucker Tails

1 Apr 2010

Quote by LusciousLola
Possible title: Trucker Tails

"Trucker Tales" you mean? Or tails, as in he's chasing them?

2 Apr 2010

I like reading and writing first person stories. It can be very intimate to share the head of a person from the inside looking out; not being able to read the minds of the other people. Also, the first person POV does not have to be locked to one character. For example, each chapter could be told 1P from the POV of a few different main characters. The story arc of the book (many chapters) could then be woven together in such a way that unifies the theme.

Possible Titles:
Long haul hustle
Blacktop & bare bottoms (my favorite)
Keep on Fucking
In the big hole (also trucker speak for the top gear.)
Hauling ass

2 Apr 2010

Quote by nicola
Quote by LusciousLola
Possible title: Trucker Tails

"Trucker Tales" you mean? Or tails, as in he's chasing them?

Tails, as in he's chasing them.

2 Apr 2010

I am leaning towards: Trucker's Tails ...with separate chapters utilizing some of Nobe's suggestions for titles.

Blacktop and Bare Bottoms thumbup

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2 Apr 2010

I like "Blacktop and Bare Bottoms". Throw in some Hank Williams and you're all set.

3 Apr 2010

And the winner is ..... LuciousLola !!! The title for the series will be "Trucker Tails". hello1

Thanks everyone for your comments and suggestions.

The first two episodes have been submitted for site approval. I hope you enjoy them and please let me know what you think. I am always open to suggestions and constructive criticism. And now I have to get the next episode out of my head and onto the virtual paper.

Trucker Tails Ch.1 - What the Hell is a Lot Lizard?

Trucker Tails Ch.2 - Suzy's Lot Lizard Fantasy

Have you ever had an "Airgasm"? Take a sexy ride in a hot air balloon and enjoy the view from a mile high.

Mile High Club in a Balloon

9 Jul 2010

"lot lizards" is an unique, curious, and compelling title

my first thought is that the life of a "lot lizard" is more satisfying, thematically: the idea of an infamous female truck-stop rat, who services truck drivers (and why not male *and* female) -- is more ironic than a male trucker just having adventures around the country

try this: maybe -- hungry to escape her broke, existentially dead-end life as a lot lizard: she could steal his truck in the first episode; next episode: he finds her but doesnt turn her in; next: they have sex, fall in love, travel together, etc.; down the line: they get on each others' nerves; she becomes a make-the-circuit hooker; they split the money; eventually, he settles down and buys a truck-stop and employs a fleet of by-appointment mobile lot lizards (male and female) travelling the country servicing the lifers doomed to drive the endless road

profound hilarity could ensue

title: "lot lizards"

good luck, and in exchange for this inspired advice: i expect to star! ;)

6 Sep 2010

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