I am writing a serial about a cheer leading squad from Hawaii who turns to the worlds oldest profession to raise money. One scene I am trying to write is a golf foursome who hire four of the girls to caddy for them.
Part of the deal is that each girl can only wear 15 items.
The lowest scoring golfer gets to personally strip two items of clothing from the highest scoring golfers caddy, and one item from the other two caddys.
Of course there are side bets for additional items of clothing.
I need someone who knows golf to read the story, suggest dialogue, and side bets, as well as terminology and jargon and make sure I'm don't sound totally ignorant about golf, which I am.
So far, I've written about 4900 words and they just teed off for hole four.
The golf course is privately owned by a fictional golf equipment manufacturer called Tropix Stix. They are trying to convinvce a young golfer who just qualified for the PGA to let them sponsor him. So the glofers are
Buck recently qualified for the upcoming PGA tour.
Chipper his agent
Vitali CEO of Tropix Stix
Doc Johnson an older plastic surgeon and majority shareholder of Tropix Stix
The caddys are
Bree (chipper) sereotypical cheerleader brunette
Sasha (Buck) a thicc black queen
Lucinda (Doc) a bootylicious Latina
Kailani (Vitali) a gorgeous Polynesian
Any and all help is appreciated.
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