Quote by RavenStar
I've just taken a look at your story. There are actually quite a few things I'd send it back for, beyond what was actually mentioned in the return note.

Your paragraphs are indeed a bit too long. We ask that our authors keep them between 4 and 6 sentences long, primarily because it makes them easier for our mobile phone crowd to read. I'm almost always on my phone, so I get the request.

Your sentences, while mostly correct, tend to ramble a bit, making it difficult and uncomfortable to follow the action. Introducing commas and semicolons, as well as breaking some of them up into two or three sentences, would greatly improve the readability.

Your dialogue formatting is incorrect, per our site standard. We use the most widely accepted form of dialogue formatting:

"It should look like this," replied the moderator.

Note the closing comma inside the closing quotation mark. If it ended in a period, it would be inside as well.

Please also make sure every speaker has their own paragraph.

We do prefer that ALL CAPS not be used much at all for emphasis. Instead, we encourage the use of italics sparingly. No bold at all, please, unless you are denoting scene changes with a short title.

Why do we go to the trouble of returning stories for these seemingly inconsequential changes, when as some put it, this is just smut? Because we have site quality standards. We insist that the stories published here meet our quality standards, mostly when it comes to grammar and punctuation. This is one of the things that sets Lush apart from everyone else. We care about the quality, the construction and the reader's enjoyment when picking out a story.

We very eagerly encourage you to make the changes to your story to make it a better version of itself. If you're unwilling to make the requested changes, then unfortunately we will not post it.

Quote by Dancing_Doll
Btw... is anyone worried about Rick?

That last scene was awful for him and he looked so defeated. Also - it appears he got cut and walker blood is in his wounds. Apparently this means something in the comics but I haven't read them.

Quote by sexygeek
Stick and Pinata.. I'm the stick you are the Pinata..LOL

Quote by a_chica
Thank you for standing by me,
and lending an ear.
For helping me out
just being near.

Thank you for cheering me on
or saying a prayer.
For holding me up
and showing you cared.

Thank you for making me laugh
and giving me hope.
For showing support
and helping me cope.

Thank you for all that you did.
and that is that.

For the person that was there, while no one else knew.

Quote by Milik_the_Red
Having survived testicular cancer, I'm very sympathize to this disease. It not only threatens a woman's life, but even surviving it can destroy her self image.

I lost my right testical when I was twenty three, have some major scaring from related abdominal surgery and was left sterile and unable to ejaculate.

But

I survived. That was twenty eight years ago. Ladies, I feel your pain, and I urge, get your mammograms and above else, if the worse happens, never, ever give up.

Quote by sexygeek
I AM trying to calm down... Ugh, This rivalry gets on my nerves!