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Ruthie
Over 90 days ago
Heteroflexible Female
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Empress of the Moon
Quote by Buz
If you show up for a social gathering and discover you are not dressed right for the occasion, do you prefer to be overdressed or underdressed?
Personally, I'd usually rather be overdressed than underdressed. I feel even more conspicuous if I'm underdressed.
I'd rather be undressed at a social gathering.
Empress of the Moon
People have bad memories. I, for instance, don't remember any Beerstained Bears at all. I think beer steins are good to keep flies out of your beer at Oktoberfest. It is Oktoberfest. As far as I'm concerned, it is Oktoberfest forever, and the bears can get their own beer.
What sort of half assed conspiracy theory is this anyway? Somebody comes back in time to change the names in a children's book. What kind of asshole would a time traveler have to be to do something like that? "Well, Roger, you went back in time in the twenty dollar time machine, what did you do?" It better be something better than changing the names of fictional bears. Talk about waste of money and time. I hope I live long enough into the future to find that person. I will beat them to death with a copy of The Berenstain Bears and the Bad Dream.
What sort of half assed conspiracy theory is this anyway? Somebody comes back in time to change the names in a children's book. What kind of asshole would a time traveler have to be to do something like that? "Well, Roger, you went back in time in the twenty dollar time machine, what did you do?" It better be something better than changing the names of fictional bears. Talk about waste of money and time. I hope I live long enough into the future to find that person. I will beat them to death with a copy of The Berenstain Bears and the Bad Dream.
Empress of the Moon
Quote by indiemommy
I figured there was a problem with depth and detail. Also yes it should be in present. Thank you!
You can find an editor by posting your need for one in https://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_topics3_Writing-Resources.aspx
Check out this thread from Sprite, one of our best writers and moderators, for a sense of what and what not to do when writing a story for Lush.
https://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_postst50778_Sprite39s-Pet-Peeves--writers-should-check-this-out-before-submitting-stories--it39s-just-go.aspx
This link is to help you with verb tense. It doesn't matter which tense you use as long as it is consistent throughout the story.
https://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_postsm1328422_Use-of-proper-verb-tense.aspx#1328422
