I must say I did find your story to be serious with only a couple of witty cliches in one paragraph, that to me, were distracting from the seriousness of the story. If a reader writes, as one did, 'I don't know if you were going for a bit of comedy in this but..' you may need to add humor or satire to your tags so readers know what to expect and know that it is not just poor wording - not saying that yours is
I would say that if you wish to write a humorous story, that you need to add humor to the beginning, middle and end. If you wish to write a serious story with some witty comments, that you also need to add them at the beginning, middle and end.
I must say I did find your story to be serious with only a couple of witty cliches in one paragraph, that to me, were distracting from the seriousness of the story. If a reader writes, as one did, 'I don't know if you were going for a bit of comedy in this but..' you may need to add humor or satire to your tags so readers know what to expect and know that it is not just poor wording - not saying that yours is
I must say I did find your story to be serious with only a couple of witty cliches in one paragraph, that to me, were distracting from the seriousness of the story. If a reader writes, as one did, 'I don't know if you were going for a bit of comedy in this but..' you may need to add humor or satire to your tags so readers know what to expect and know that it is not just poor wording - not saying that yours is







