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There is one thing I don't understand after that forum post of great detail and truth that simply radiated a man of honor... How is yourmisterdark single?
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ThatStoryGuy
Over 90 days ago
Bi-curious Male, 29
United Kingdom
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It's great to get some feedback on it all.
I asked simply so I could see what the modern day gentleman should adhere to without seeming, as put by dancing doll, as smothering. Gone are the days where a large sword, although arguments can be made it is simply called something else now, and a suit of shiny armor would sway a lady into your arms. Got to say though in the list diamond supplied the biggest thing that confused me was "No.31 Call her babe". There was me thinking it objectified women and made you seem stereotypical macho man.
Then again, at my inexperienced age, what do I know?
I asked simply so I could see what the modern day gentleman should adhere to without seeming, as put by dancing doll, as smothering. Gone are the days where a large sword, although arguments can be made it is simply called something else now, and a suit of shiny armor would sway a lady into your arms. Got to say though in the list diamond supplied the biggest thing that confused me was "No.31 Call her babe". There was me thinking it objectified women and made you seem stereotypical macho man.
Then again, at my inexperienced age, what do I know?
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I just felt a rant would be necessary. If anyone else just saw the woman throwing eggs at the judges on BGT... Is it just me that disgusts? Whether it is political or for the most important reason, is it really necessary to spoil someone else's chances at winning a competition? You might be thinking i'm a ranting idiot but all in all I think we have a permission to rant and I wanted to get other peoples views on it :P
I'm shell shocked. Get it? Ah... who doesn't love terrible jokes?
Also to add an actual point to this topic. What do people think of Britian's got talent? Should it just be scrapped or it worth keeping?
I'm shell shocked. Get it? Ah... who doesn't love terrible jokes?
Also to add an actual point to this topic. What do people think of Britian's got talent? Should it just be scrapped or it worth keeping?
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Not what I meant... Damn... I don't think I can ever phrase this question right. Bugger, now I look like a dick. I'll get back to you when I finally work out what my question is :P
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The title says it all right? On my journey of writing and, recently sexual knowledge, it occured to me that it was all well and good writing a story involving lesbians but... What really does it for you?
So i'm asking any lesbians, bi-sexual ladies or even men who used to women! What little things they like in bed and even beforehand such as the aspects of another girl. So, simply: What does it for you?
If you reply thanks for taking the time it's greatly appreciated
So i'm asking any lesbians, bi-sexual ladies or even men who used to women! What little things they like in bed and even beforehand such as the aspects of another girl. So, simply: What does it for you?
If you reply thanks for taking the time it's greatly appreciated
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It appears all the gentlemen are on here and not in the real world! Or at least none near where I am, causing ladies to have a generally bad disposition towards men. *sigh* The world we live in.
Keep em coming!
Keep em coming!
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I wrote a story and used the ask a reader section to find out how to make it better. The biggest problem was I misinterpreted the feedback given at first changing my story to include what can only be described as a completely irrelevant reference to something that happened earlier in the characters life. All in all it just made the story more confusing. So I believe, even being the brand new writer I am, that the best thing to do is simply to use powerful adjectives in short stories so that the thoughts and emotions of the character add depth to it.
Oh... and of course what the fancy people above with their snazzy ranks said ;)
Oh... and of course what the fancy people above with their snazzy ranks said ;)
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Thanks to all! Got it accepted, the start of a story writing journey I hope.
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Hello!
I, much to my own admittance, am a hopeless romantic and probably the worst attempt at a gentleman for a long time :P So, scratching all assumed standards and rules of a gentleman, I want to know what the opinion of the people who put up with us would like. And I hope to compile them into a charter.
If that confused you at all then I will simplify it:
What rules should a gentleman follow?
Any guys that think they know what they're doing feel free to help
I, much to my own admittance, am a hopeless romantic and probably the worst attempt at a gentleman for a long time :P So, scratching all assumed standards and rules of a gentleman, I want to know what the opinion of the people who put up with us would like. And I hope to compile them into a charter.
If that confused you at all then I will simplify it:
What rules should a gentleman follow?
Any guys that think they know what they're doing feel free to help
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MdeSade64 seems to be a nice guy. Got a cool picture and is polite. What else can you ask for?
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I used to have a load of commas in it but I mis-interpreted the feedback from the moderators and removed them. Ah, we all learn eventually. Thank-you again!
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Ah, thankyou! That is fantastic help. Let's see what my brain can come up with now I have a few guidelines.
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I am a young submissive. I would like a master or mistress. Message me soon please, and be my god.
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I recently submitted a few stories and have got feedback regarding sentence structure. I was hoping you guys could help me. After all, you have the experience. Not calling you old or anything ;) I apologize if you are not allowed to do this but i will post the story and I was wondering if you could pick a paragraph, obviously not the whole story I would like to get better at writing... not cheat :P, and correct it and show me why the sentence structure was wrong. And also punctuation. I am aware length is a problem, but I don't want to make it longer with the same mistakes in it.
Darkness is an odd thing to see. Sometimes, darkness can be scary but not this kind. This was self induced. The sun shone from above onto my neck and head, a spectacular feeling. It just couldn't overpower the feeling of nerves, sexual excitement that I felt. I felt, as I can only put it, like a slut. I'd never felt this way before and i'm not too sure I like it. We shall see. Sure I had done this before but not like this!
"Meet me in the Sherwood forest, on the floor, blindfolded. I'll take up your offer." Was a message I received but an hour ago.
I wondered why he wanted it blindfolded? Perhaps he was ugly? Maybe even famous?! I heard the crunch of leaves like a foot had fallen on them. Then another, and then another. It was time. The adrenaline began to get to me, I felt my cock slowly become hard within my trousers. I was only 18 but had been a cock loving slut for two years. My first taste was but a day after my birthday. Just turned 16 so I and a few friends decided to have a sleepover, a childish sentiment maybe. But after a few drinks and far too much porn we were all horny and... I stopped thinking about that night. Again, my attention was taken by the footsteps.
I was excited for my first ever meetup as I felt the sun blocked off by a sudden shadow. I noticed the footsteps had stopped. This must be him. He seemed to inspect me, without even touching me. His glare was piercing despite my inability to see him. It was as though he owned me and would inspect me like a possession. I felt his hand on my head as he brought me to his cock. I reached out my tongue to touch it and I licked all the way along it's shaft. It was huge perhaps the biggest I had ever touched. I let out a sudden moan of pleasure as I was unable to control myself. I reached out my hands and took it into my mouth, even while not hard it filled my mouth. I cupped his balls into my hands and felt them. They were perfect. I could imagine the cum inside, just waiting to be emptied down my throat. Suddenly he pushed my head further away so it no longer filled my mouth, this man knew what he wanted and I loved it.
I licked it slowly and flicked my tongue over it's head until it was fully hard. He pulled my head closer as I took it into my mouth and I began to suck it slowly to tease. I could be a naughty slut sometimes. Ten minutes of flicking and gentle teasing past but this man obviously had experience. He pushed my head slightly faster and his cock slightly further into my mouth. I felt so dirty and degraded. I knew nothing of this man and yet would do anything he asked.
Suddenly a frenzy caught him and he pushed it deep into my mouth. Not my first deep throat but one of my most difficult by far. And most pleasurable. He fucked my mouth fast it felt like he would never stop. It was like this for what can only be described as a while because I lost track of time. He began to moan, the first I had heard from this mysterious man. I could tell he would cum soon.
I heard "Make sure you swallow it, you little slut." in between his moans of pleasure.
I felt his cum shoot down my throat in streams after streams. Even if I hadn't wanted to I would have had to swallow it. I licked any cum left on his cock's head. It was delicious, better than I had ever tasted. He took his cock out of my mouth and presumably back into it's cage. The monster it was. He threw me to the floor and left. I felt used and devalued, like the cum slut I am... And I liked it.
Hope you enjoyed that, please feel free to leave any comments and suggestions. But this was my first time writing so play nice ;) If you pm me I will answer and If you enjoyed it I could try and do requests. Looking forward to talking to you and receiving your feedback.
As I said before, I apologize if it is not allowed and I am sure an admin will edit or contact me if there are any problems.
Looking forward to your help and, in effect, training of me as a young writer!
Darkness is an odd thing to see. Sometimes, darkness can be scary but not this kind. This was self induced. The sun shone from above onto my neck and head, a spectacular feeling. It just couldn't overpower the feeling of nerves, sexual excitement that I felt. I felt, as I can only put it, like a slut. I'd never felt this way before and i'm not too sure I like it. We shall see. Sure I had done this before but not like this!
"Meet me in the Sherwood forest, on the floor, blindfolded. I'll take up your offer." Was a message I received but an hour ago.
I wondered why he wanted it blindfolded? Perhaps he was ugly? Maybe even famous?! I heard the crunch of leaves like a foot had fallen on them. Then another, and then another. It was time. The adrenaline began to get to me, I felt my cock slowly become hard within my trousers. I was only 18 but had been a cock loving slut for two years. My first taste was but a day after my birthday. Just turned 16 so I and a few friends decided to have a sleepover, a childish sentiment maybe. But after a few drinks and far too much porn we were all horny and... I stopped thinking about that night. Again, my attention was taken by the footsteps.
I was excited for my first ever meetup as I felt the sun blocked off by a sudden shadow. I noticed the footsteps had stopped. This must be him. He seemed to inspect me, without even touching me. His glare was piercing despite my inability to see him. It was as though he owned me and would inspect me like a possession. I felt his hand on my head as he brought me to his cock. I reached out my tongue to touch it and I licked all the way along it's shaft. It was huge perhaps the biggest I had ever touched. I let out a sudden moan of pleasure as I was unable to control myself. I reached out my hands and took it into my mouth, even while not hard it filled my mouth. I cupped his balls into my hands and felt them. They were perfect. I could imagine the cum inside, just waiting to be emptied down my throat. Suddenly he pushed my head further away so it no longer filled my mouth, this man knew what he wanted and I loved it.
I licked it slowly and flicked my tongue over it's head until it was fully hard. He pulled my head closer as I took it into my mouth and I began to suck it slowly to tease. I could be a naughty slut sometimes. Ten minutes of flicking and gentle teasing past but this man obviously had experience. He pushed my head slightly faster and his cock slightly further into my mouth. I felt so dirty and degraded. I knew nothing of this man and yet would do anything he asked.
Suddenly a frenzy caught him and he pushed it deep into my mouth. Not my first deep throat but one of my most difficult by far. And most pleasurable. He fucked my mouth fast it felt like he would never stop. It was like this for what can only be described as a while because I lost track of time. He began to moan, the first I had heard from this mysterious man. I could tell he would cum soon.
I heard "Make sure you swallow it, you little slut." in between his moans of pleasure.
I felt his cum shoot down my throat in streams after streams. Even if I hadn't wanted to I would have had to swallow it. I licked any cum left on his cock's head. It was delicious, better than I had ever tasted. He took his cock out of my mouth and presumably back into it's cage. The monster it was. He threw me to the floor and left. I felt used and devalued, like the cum slut I am... And I liked it.
Hope you enjoyed that, please feel free to leave any comments and suggestions. But this was my first time writing so play nice ;) If you pm me I will answer and If you enjoyed it I could try and do requests. Looking forward to talking to you and receiving your feedback.
As I said before, I apologize if it is not allowed and I am sure an admin will edit or contact me if there are any problems.
Looking forward to your help and, in effect, training of me as a young writer!