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The Shortest Poem I Ever Wrote
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I wish I was the only one that you made cum. That you touched, desired.
Hot tears fall, gently.
My heart breaks. My hand will not trap you.
Hot tears fall, gently.
My heart breaks. My hand will not trap you.
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This is my shortest poem.
(That was it. I'm goin'...)
xx Steph
(In MY ACCENT it scans... *Giggles Wickedly!*)
(That was it. I'm goin'...)
xx Steph
(In MY ACCENT it scans... *Giggles Wickedly!*)
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I look for you over the horizon and you are not there. I do not sense your return, ever again.
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Whenever I see a quaint poem, I tend to glide on by like a gentle summer breeze.
When I see a poet churn out numerous quaint poems, submit them for publishing on the Internets and sit back waiting for praise while said quaint poems clog up new poem queues ..... I get pissed off and write poems about them. Real poems. Poems that take some effort create. Poems that drip and ooze your intention of giving the reader his money's worth.
When I see a poet churn out numerous quaint poems, submit them for publishing on the Internets and sit back waiting for praise while said quaint poems clog up new poem queues ..... I get pissed off and write poems about them. Real poems. Poems that take some effort create. Poems that drip and ooze your intention of giving the reader his money's worth.
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Whenever I see a quaint poem, I tend to glide on by like a gentle summer breeze.
When I see a poet churn out numerous quaint poems, submit them for publishing on the Internets and sit back waiting for praise while said quaint poems clog up new poem queues ..... I get pissed off and write poems about them. Real poems. Poems that take some effort create. Poems that drip and ooze your intention of giving the reader his money's worth.
Quaint poems are short and sweet and truly neat.
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You have ripped my heart from my upturned hands that I so freely gave you.
(I do not seek praise, only comfort in said quaint poems. They are the only thing I have to give.)
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Whenever I see a quaint poem, I tend to glide on by like a gentle summer breeze.
When I see a poet churn out numerous quaint poems, submit them for publishing on the Internets and sit back waiting for praise while said quaint poems clog up new poem queues ..... I get pissed off and write poems about them. Real poems. Poems that take some effort create. Poems that drip and ooze your intention of giving the reader his money's worth.
All poems take an effort to create... (It's just that some can be created in minutes...) The Artist draws on a LIFETIME to create, in the right moment, a piece that might take seconds to write...
My background is as a songwriter, and many more times than once I've been fucking around in a rehearsal room and asked a guitarist/bassist or EVEN a drummer, (LAUGHS!) to, "Play that again..." It's usually in those moments you produce something unexpected, something special, something precious...
In moments we can all of course
Write the most simple obvious verse
And nine times out of ten it's not that good...
But the trick to writing is to WRITE
And in the dark of darkest inky nights
We sometimes find we write just like we should...
So write my fellow wondrous scribes
And take your chances and indeed if the words are merely bribes
Then smile when they turn out to be actually quite good...
Not everyone can do it.
(And if they could I bet they surely would...)
xx SF
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Seeing as how a mod here named Dani saw fit to chastise me with a warning and threaten suspension for my having the audacity to ridicule someone else's poetry, please allow me to clarify my comment in the proper context of the opinion I volunteered.
Yes, it takes talent to communicate emotions or a wealth of information or even many messages simultaneously using as few words as possible.
My comment was regarding individuals who do not even participate on this site, who see fit to litter the queue's of other publishing sites with 1 to 3 letter poems that don't convey anything other than wasted time and bandwidth.
I get enough false accusations and hasty assumptions about my poetry off the board as it is. If you or anyone have difficulty grasping or coping with my opinions volunteered in the forum, all you have to do is ask for a further explanation and I will be happy to oblige.
There are other sites to publish poetry at where so many conclusions aren't jumped to.
Thank you for listening.
Yes, it takes talent to communicate emotions or a wealth of information or even many messages simultaneously using as few words as possible.
My comment was regarding individuals who do not even participate on this site, who see fit to litter the queue's of other publishing sites with 1 to 3 letter poems that don't convey anything other than wasted time and bandwidth.
I get enough false accusations and hasty assumptions about my poetry off the board as it is. If you or anyone have difficulty grasping or coping with my opinions volunteered in the forum, all you have to do is ask for a further explanation and I will be happy to oblige.
There are other sites to publish poetry at where so many conclusions aren't jumped to.
Thank you for listening.
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Seeing as how a mod here named Dani saw fit to chastise me with a warning and threaten suspension for my having the audacity to ridicule someone else's poetry, please allow me to clarify my comment in the proper context of the opinion I volunteered.
Yes, it takes talent to communicate emotions or a wealth of information or even many messages simultaneously using as few words as possible.
My comment was regarding individuals who do not even participate on this site, who see fit to litter the queue's of other publishing sites with 1 to 3 letter poems that don't convey anything other than wasted time and bandwidth.
I get enough false accusations and hasty assumptions about my poetry off the board as it is. If you or anyone have difficulty grasping or coping with my opinions volunteered in the forum, all you have to do is ask for a further explanation and I will be happy to oblige.
There are other sites to publish poetry at where so many conclusions aren't jumped to.
Thank you for listening.
I'm sorry for any problems that arose from this Magnetron.....
I know that would never be in your nature to do so.
Hugs for you.....
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Seeing as how a mod here named Dani saw fit to chastise me with a warning and threaten suspension for my having the audacity to ridicule someone else's poetry, please allow me to clarify my comment in the proper context of the opinion I volunteered.
Yes, it takes talent to communicate emotions or a wealth of information or even many messages simultaneously using as few words as possible.
My comment was regarding individuals who do not even participate on this site, who see fit to litter the queue's of other publishing sites with 1 to 3 letter poems that don't convey anything other than wasted time and bandwidth.
I get enough false accusations and hasty assumptions about my poetry off the board as it is. If you or anyone have difficulty grasping or coping with my opinions volunteered in the forum, all you have to do is ask for a further explanation and I will be happy to oblige.
There are other sites to publish poetry at where so many conclusions aren't jumped to.
Thank you for listening.
I have been censured in the past for indeed, yes, RIDICULING someone's poetry... I have to say, it was pointed out to me, firmly if politely, that a POSTED poem upon this site is deserved of a certain respect, whether I personally like it or not... And in hindsight, I have to agree with that... CRITIQUE may very well be valid, RIDICULE is not.
xx Steph
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I have been censured in the past for indeed, yes, RIDICULING someone's poetry... I have to say, it was pointed out to me, firmly if politely, that a POSTED poem upon this site is deserved of a certain respect, whether I personally like it or not... And in hindsight, I have to agree with that... CRITIQUE may very well be valid, RIDICULE is not.
xx Steph
I whole heartedly agree with that.
And being accused of doing things you weren't doing is equally as obnoxious.
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Now, in the spirit of short poem .............
The typographical error of your ways
Is a hypodermic needle full of nonsense
Interrupting my entire fucking universe
The typographical error of your ways
Is a hypodermic needle full of nonsense
Interrupting my entire fucking universe
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I whole heartedly agree with that.
And being accused of doing things you weren't doing is equally as obnoxious.
Sometimes it's important to be aware of the perception your words might give off not simply your intent.
To keep the thread on track:
I yawned, rolled over
Stretched and ached.
Pink light streaming through my window,
I blink, close my eyes to the glare.
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It's equally important to ask questions first and shoot later if necessary.
To keep the thread on track:
Writers
Can't help themselves
Always getting in the last word
To keep the thread on track:
Writers
Can't help themselves
Always getting in the last word
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Sometimes it's important to be aware of the perception your words might give off not simply your intent.
To keep the thread on track:
I yawned, rolled over
Stretched and ached.
Pink light streaming through my window,
I blink, close my eyes to the glare.
I'm going to take a pop at this!
Okay, TECHNICALLY, although it looks like Free Verse at first glance, it isn't. Why not? Well, count the stresses. It's all EIGHTS.
"I Yawned, Rolled O-ver, Stretched and ached..
"Pink light stream-ing through My Wind-ow...
"I Blink, Close My Eyes To The Glare..." (You get it...)
So TECHNICALLY, (although deceptive) it's spot on...
What does it mean?
Well, "stretched and ached" is a phrase that suggests one of two things. Describing an actual action, It COULD mean the satisfaction after a night of passion, But it COULD mean the opposite, a frustration, a lack of satisfaction, an ache unfulfilled... The phrase also can be read as DESCRIPTIVE OF STATE, in that the person herself could awake FEELING both stretched and ached.
"Pink light" certainly hints at a certain sexuality, and though it's pushing it, the "streaming through my window" phrase also contains an unmistakeable metaphor describing the sexual act.
"Close my eyes to the glare" is again a line that cleverly plays with ambiguity. Does that 'glare' refer to a deep and passionate state, sp powerful indeed that one is forced to close one's eyes, OR perhaps the very opposite, the 'glare' being that of a lonliness so hurtful that one's eyes close in order to blot it out...
xx Steph
I know this writer and her poetry and prose. I have no doubt that this was a throwaway piece. It amuses me then that even in a piece like this, there are levels under levels, questions upon questions, (and all as I stated written in a form that is TECHNICALLY quite perfect...) And isn't that what great poetry really is? Carefully chosen words and phrases, chosen for emotive impact of course, but slotted together with the skill of an engineer or artisan. This tiny snippet also accomplishes one OTHER essential thing in the mind of the reader. Quite simply, one wants to read more, to discover more, to FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENED!!!!
Hats off to The Nurse. (Again!)
EDIT!!!!!!!!
A CERTAIN PERSON, (while generally agreeing with my critique) has suggested that I missed the point that, given the observation that the original intention of her post was to note that SUBJECTIVITY on the part of the reader was crucial in interpreting posted comments, so she used this tiny snippet to illustrate that fact...
Point taken!
(Clever fucking bitch!)