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As you can see, I'm a new member here at Lush; the more writers that I can converse with and learn from, the better!
Thanks.
There was a knock on the door and when I answered it I saw it was Kelly the girl from next door. She was crying so I said, "Are you all right" and she said, "No, my boyfriend has broken up with me." I knew her boyfriend, ex-boyfriend now I guess, was a jerk so I gave her a sympathetic hug and invited her in for a drink. I made her a coffee and as we sat chatting she suddenly said, "Listen I don't want to be on my own tonight, is it okay if I stay with you?" I was surprised but quickly agreed, "Yeah sure." We went up to my bedroom and quickly undressed before slipping between the sheets. "Just hold me." She said and turned her back on me. I slipped one arm under her head and wrapped my other arm around her, my hand grazing her breast as I pulled her in tight. After a few moments I became aware that the feel of her body next to mine was arousing me and my cock gave a twitch. Kelly must have felt it too as she giggled and pushed her buttocks into my groin. Experimentally I ran a hand over her breast, feeling her nipple harden under my touch and she gave a little sigh. "Do you want to fuck me?" she asked. "I don't know," I replied. "Do you think anyone is still reading this by now?" She looked thoughtful, "I doubt it. Why?" "Well, to be honest, and you're a really nice girl and everything, but the author is always writing me into these situations where I end up in bed having to shag all these women. It's a bit tiresome really." She went very still and I started to worry that I had offended her, then she said, "I know what you mean. It's the same with me. I always seem to end up in stories where I take dick in every hole, sometimes repeatedly, for hours on end. Sometimes it would be nice to grab a nice cup of hot chocolate and curl up with a good book. I mean I never wanted to be a character in an erotic story, I always wanted to be in a romance. Don't get me wrong I like sex, it's just I feel there is so much more to me as a fictional character than bonking constantly." I nodded understandingly. "Tell you what, I think even the writer must be fed up by now and anyway, how's he going to proof read all this, it's virtually incomprehensible. Why don't we grab an early night: I doubt he or any of his readers will notice." She gave me a sweet smile and agreed enthusiastically, so I turned the light off and seconds later we were both soundly asleep.
Quote by Dancing_Doll
eg. don't write about going to your corporate summer picnic and then spontaneously fucking your entire family on a gingham blanket in front of your boss and coworkers while they cheer you on and then having him slap you on the back at the end of it saying 'you 'ole dog, you!' and giving you a hearty raise for being such an insatiable pervert.

Quote by Wildcat
You'll find a wealth of knowledge here: http://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_forum3_Erotic-Stories-Writing-and-Reading-Forum.aspx Morgan Hawke's writing tips and advice. Good luck with your writing!
Quote by DirtyMartini
As far as things not to do...I know its been mentioned before, but avoid second person...just sayin'
Quote by naughtiestmommy
BUMP to this. DO NOT EVER WRITE A STORY WITH A SECOND PERSON PRESENCE. It sounds really stupid.
"I took off your clothes and you were really wet...."
THAT crap is for cyber sex, not storytelling.
Quote by clum
That's still first person, surely. The writing is directed at the reader but it's still from the point of view of the narrator. Second person is when the author writes from the point of view of the reader.
"You walk down the hallway warily, hearing every creak of every floorboard. Turning the corner, you think you see a shadow flit before you but you can't be sure. You start to regret spending the night by yourself in this dilapidated, old house."
In either case, it takes a lot of skill to write a story like this well.
The Wild Girl anthology need not be read in any order but does take place in the following timeframe
Wild at Heart- 1968. The story of Dani’s Great Aunt Evie.
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/first-time/wild-at-heart
Wild Oats. Part 1&2. -2021. Dani is 16 and sets her sights on her stepfather.
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/taboo/wild-oats-part-1
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/taboo/wild-oats-part-2
Wild Child. 2025. Dani is now 20 years old.
