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Quote by Dancing_Doll
I think the carved 'W' signs are signalling the new "Bad Guys" on the horizon... assumably some renegade psychos that will challenge the Alexandria Safe Zone and want to take it for themselves.

This would technically allow Rick to be 'right' about everything he screams about in the last episode (Alexandria is not secure, there are bad people who will want to take it from you, we have to prepare etc.). If they do punish Rick for his totally unhinged outburst, the arrival of a new threat would be what the show would need to allow Rick to redeem himself among the group... and pretty much come out as the 'I told you so' Hero.

Also - there was this foreboding graffiti written on the wall inside Noah's demolished community ('Wolves Not Far').... plus they found that truck of half-chopped 'W'-carved walkers just outside the broken walls there - so it seems like whoever wrecked that community likes to make their mark, maybe to intimidate and scare people first, and then take what they want. It would make sense that a relatively sheltered community like Noah's, and even Alexandria, would be seen as soft pickings filled with people that are easy to scare into submission.


I think you're definitely onto something there, Doll. I completely forgot about the truckload at Noah's old place. Man!

Giving this probably way more thought than I should, I wonder about Nicholas digging up that gun after the dust settled in the last episode. If that was the gun Rick left behind in the blender, maybe he's the W crew's inside man. It would be a great ploy for him to slowly erode the community's stronger defenders and leave them exposed for an attack.
I really need a big-ass hug from KK...and maybe a bit of a grope too while we're at it. Grrr.
I think you were on the right track from the get go. It always makes for a stronger story when you gradually introduce your characters with subtle clues, slowly working their physical appearance into the action, and revealing their characters through what they do, rather than explicit statements. Weave a story. That's why we're all here.

You should check out some of Sprite's stories to see how it's done. I'd like to think I do the same, but there's certainly no shortage of good examples amongst the Recommended Reads and Editor's Picks categories.
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Nope - let's break it down:

"He left his best mate for dead." - Technically what else could he have done. Rick was hooked up to machines in the hospital. Machines failed. He seemed pretty dead. And zombies were coming. At least he pushed the hospital bed in front of the door to block them out. If he was really evil, he wouldn't have bothered. He probably wouldn't have even bothered checking on his BFF either when the world was basically going to hell. So really - let's be honest here - he was a true friend against all odds. smile

"He fucked his wife." - Ok, yeah... sorta tacky. But he was obviously very in love with Lori. It wasn't just to get laid. As far as he was concerned her husband was dead and here he was - willing to take on a single mother with a kid (a total liability in an apocalypse). So really - he was essentially protecting Rick's family when Rick couldn't. :)

"He murdered one of his group so he could get away." - Technically he'd only just met Otis a few hours earlier - not like they had some longstanding relationship. And, if he hadn't done it, they both would have died. And then Carl would have died too - poor innocent little Carl, whom Otis had negligently shot earlier that day. So really - he saved a little boy. He's a bit of a hero, really. :)

I know there was that whole 'trying to kill Rick' bit later on at the farm, but love and PTSD will make ya do crazy things.

I do love wearing my rose-colored Shane Goggles sometimes.


Hmmm, maybe. I'll give you leaving Rick behind, although I would have played it differently. And I'll even concede him slipping Lori one under the circumstances, especially given what a bitch she was. But no deal on Otis.

They might not have both made it, but it was definitely worth trying. Dropping Otis like that was stone cold psycho shit. That was his death sentence for me. The rest of it: undermining Rick with Carl and you know, trying to kill Rick, that just hammered it home.

But hey, I get it. Girl's gotta eat.

This week's episode had me so frustrated. I can't believe Nicholas. Even after everything, he was still too stupid to take the pass Glen gave him. Impressive stuff from our boy though. A better man than I.

And Rick... *sigh* He's way too over the top. Sure, Dr Wifebeater needs to be brought into line, but suggesting he should be killed is crazy, at least at that point. Thank God we were spared another speech.

Hopefully this W business comes to light next week and unites Alexandria. Speaking of, what do you think the deal is with that?
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Funny thing if the show had started out from the beginning with the Alexandria people as the "main group" and then they'd let in Rick's gang as newbies with the hopes of 'strengthening them' and continuing on with running Pleasantville, imagine how viewers would be reacting to many of those characters... They're all becoming kind of unhinged, ready to 'take over' or lay down new laws. Technically Gabriel isn't all that far off - it's just that our longterm solidarity with the main characters and their backstory makes him the bad guy now.

It certainly makes you appreciate Shane a lot more. He was kind of Apocalypse-evolved beyond his years. I miss that character. sad


Interesting idea on the switching perspectives. I think I always would have hated Dr Wifebeater and the cowardly dumbasses who don't know their asses from their elbows out on a run, but I'm okay with the rest of them so far. And I don't know that Rick's crew has actually done anything that bad. It's not really until they've arrived at Alexandria that Rick and Carol's paranoia has run away with them and ventured into the manipulative. It's still early days on that, but they do need to dial it back a bit.

To be fair to Gabriel, maybe more than he deserves, all he knows is that a bunch of badasses turned up, killed the Terminus guys in his church, and then hauled him away. He's kept himself on the outer, and may not have a full appreciation of the context of our group's actions. Still, there's something up with him.

And I know you've got a thing for the bad boy, but no way was Shane a productive guy to keep around in a zombie apocalypse. The head rubbing aside, he left his best mate for dead, fucked his wife, and murdered one of his own group just so he could get away. He was toxic, and in retrospect, just someone to hate in the boring farm season.
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That seriously felt like one of the most traumatic episodes in a really long time. On so many different levels. Damn.

All I know is - Nicolas. Must. Die. Like was anyone else wishing Abraham had gone on that run so he could've let the fists fly longer than Glenn did? That scene. I actually had to look away.

And WTF with Gabriel???

There's been so much character evolution over the last few episodes. Even Rick and Carol are feeling a little more complicated than I gave them credit for.

Also - how come nobody ever gets a mercy shot on this show? Like I know it's less dramatic, but that would be the first thing I'd establish in the zombie apocalypse. If it looks like my number is up, do me like Dale before you run away. silly


Amen, Sister, on the mercy shot! I couldn't believe they just left that first guy. I could kind of get how Glen would be too shocked to do the guy in the door, but still, he should be hard enough by now to just get it done.

Let's make a pact right here, Doll. If you and I are ever in a zombie apocalypse, we promise to do each other.

Ah-hem, anyway... If I was Glen, I wouldn't have just tuned him up. I would have killed him. Actually, I would have gone all Shane on his ass and put him down with a shot to the leg. These out-of-touch Alexandria softies are really starting to get up my nose.

I don't know about Rick, but Carol's character of late has really kept me guessing. I couldn't believe she went nuclear on that kid last week when she got caught nicking the guns. And she was so hard on him this week, which doesn't gel with the whole oh-shucks-Leave-it-to-Beaver thing she has going on. But I suppose it feeds nicely into the Dr Wifebeater scenario.

And I know! That fucking priest!

There's not enough time left... I can't wait another six months to see this play out...
Quote by Dani
So many people use the "I've been hurt" or "I have [insert issue(s) here]" line to excuse their emotional instability/immaturity. And when called on it, they'll revert to "I told you I had issues when we met."

We all have our baggage that we inevitably take out on the next person that comes along. But having issues shouldn't excuse you from owning up to your bullshit and trying to work through your issues instead of reveling in the fact that you have said issues and expecting whoever's with you to just make due.

It's one thing to say "I have issues, and sometimes I act like a total piece of shit...but I'm working on it." It's an entirely different thing to say, "I have issues, and sometimes I act like a total piece of shit...deal with it."

I can appreciate the fact that people can be hurt many times in many ways, but using that hurt as a weapon to be manipulative, dismissive, abusive, or just plain unwilling to be a person worthy of being with is not cool.


Another vote for this. And what Buz said too.

Judge me on who I am, not on what the last guy did. Everyone's got a sob story. It's how we choose to react to it that makes us who we are.
It's all a bit overwhelming for me. I don't seem to be able to break into a conversation, I don't know what to say, and it's all too hard to keep up. Much like a real life social gathering...only in my underpants.

I much rather a lazy browse of the forums and the odd PM to the few good friends I've made here.
Yeah, I have once with my wife, before she was my wife. I came once, then kind of stayed still for a bit, catching my breath. Then in the subtle movement/adjustment, I came again with a couple of spurts about a minute later. All completely accidental I'm afraid.

Otherwise, the closest is when I masturbate and don't stop after I come. The orgasm subsides a little, then intensifies again briefly, but without any cum. But who has the energy for that?
Ambivalent. No, wait...indifferent. Yeah, that's it: indifferent.
It is going to be a challenge for them to maintain the tension in the Alexandria Safe Zone without rehashing Woodberry. There's only so far they can take the gang's suspicion.

I do love Badass Carol's approach to the interview though. It's probably what I'd do in that situation.

I can't wait to find out who nicked the gun out of the blender. What's that all about?

While far too late in the season for my liking, I think they're off to a good start. The hairdresser's husband, the weird PTSD girl, and the Congresswoman's son...there's no shortage of fuckwitts.

I'm gagging for next week...
The last of a stale bag of potato chips, some cheese on toast, a bowl of sliced watermelon and a handful of chocolate Easter eggs.

Dinner of champions!
Such a shame. He was an incredible sci-fi icon, and he will be sadly missed. My very best thoughts for his family and friends.
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Yada yada yada! I know the difference, told you I just got lazy and knew that some wonderful mod would help me out and YOU did, Thank you!!!


Yeah, yeah. Next time you pull that shit on me, I'll put myself down as a contributing author.
Overcast, with the odd shower. Wait, the sun's giving it a red hot go to peek through. It's quite cool, but I'll still get away with shorts and a t-shirt today.
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From Phil Phantom’s: “Guide to Writing Good Trash"
-- I know, you hate to think of your writing as trash, but if done well, others will. If done poorly, your magnificent creation is just crap, shit, or garbage. Excellent trash can rise to the level of good shit, but you and your good shit will never be studied in English Lit. As for riches, sure, but it helps if you are wealthy when you start.

Guide to Punctuating for the Reading Impaired


Okay, so you wan'na rite reel good.

Good use of punctuation is key to effective communication, even in trash, especially in trash. You may think trash is easy to write, but trash is the most difficult to write well. When you write about sex, passion, erotic feelings, and powerful emotions, you are taking on a major communication challenge. When you add scenery and a large cast of characters, you are taking on a writing challenge that makes "Moby Dick" look like a fishing trip to Lake Wannapoopoo.

Melville hardly needed any punctuation until they caught up with the whale. Mark Twain, in fact, used no punctuation. After his editor chastised him for this, Twain sent in a page full of periods, commas, colons, semi-colons and such with the following note:

"Here is the punctuation marks you wanted put them where you want them"

I can make punctuation easy for you. Simply imagine that all of your readers suffer from a condition called Myopic Un-Mitigated Balance of biLateral Equilibrium (MUMBLE). They move their lips when they read.

Actually, they silently speak what they read. They need punctuation in order to breathe properly. Long paragraphs of run-on sentences cause them to pass out. Please consider these unfortunates when you write. Although writing without punctuation or proper capitalization is no reflection on a person's intelligence or education, doing so is inconsiderate of people who suffer from mumbleopia. They knew nothing about mumbleopia in Twain's day. He had an excuse; we don't. MUMBLErs (as they prefer to be called) suffer in silent neglect.

Guide to Punctuating for the Reading Impaired

ALL CAPS is like shouting. Writing in all caps causes swelling of the inner ear which presses on the cerebral cortex, leading to a loss of bladder and rectal control. Avoid using all caps for more than a few words in a row, even during explosive orgasms.

PERIODS allow a MUMBLEr to breathe. Sprinkle a few in each paragraph. Mumbleopiacs don't care where, but after each complete thought is generally a good idea.
-- (Note: Follow a period with a sentence or paragraph that starts with a capital letter. MUMBLErs breathe out on the period and breathe in when they see the capital letter.)

COMMAS don't give time to breathe, but do give the lips a rest. Severe lip injury can result from long sentences with no commas. On the other hand, overuse of commas is the leading cause of stuttering in mumbleopiacs.
-- (Note: You probably had a teacher who advised (as a rule of thumb) place a comma where a natural pause seems right. That teacher didn't write trash, or good trash. Commas have a purpose. Commas separate items in a series, phrases in a series, an introductory phrase, a parenthetical expression, nice-to-know shit you don't really need, or a person being addressed. You don't just slap them where you feel like it or omit them where they are needed. We all need commas to make sense out of a complex sentence in a crazy, mixed-up, tumble-down world.)

SEMI-COLONS are better than commas for easing lip fatigue but do not allow for the taking of a breath. Use them sparingly to separate short sentences that beat the same drum.

DASHES signal a pause - so mumbleopiacs take advantage and snatch a dash of oxygen.

HYPHENS join words to make a combo word, like "that no-pussy-eating wimp." Also ex-this, ex-that. MUMBLErs seem to be ambivalent toward the hyphen.

ELLIPSES MARKS (...) are like speed bumps on a page. In proper English usage, they signal omitted (or skipped) material, but they make a MUMBLEr's head rapidly bounce three times. Never get carried away with those dots as speed-reading mumbleopiacs have lost contact lenses and jarred fillings loose when they hit multiple periods, ie: ....................
-- (Note: Grammar pinheads get all twisted when you use their precious ellipses dots as indicators of long periods of silence. In our field of literature, we need this tool as sex often involves long periods of silence. Mouths are often occupied and the writer has to wait. Most will keep tapping the dot key while waiting the suckers out. Readers of trash, shit, crap, and garbage have learned to ignore three dots as meaning omitted material, because fuck and suck stories don't omit anything.)

COLONS introduce lists of shit. MUMBLErs and proctologists know to take a deep breath when they see a colon.

EXCLAMATION POINTS raise the eyebrows of mumbleopiacs but do no lasting harm unless repeated after every statement or used in multiples. Overuse of EPs can lead to nervous brow twitching. Multiple EPs (!!!!!!) have caused the eyebrows of some mumbleopiacs to migrate to the top of the head.
-- (Note: Here, again, we give the pinheads fits with our multiple EPs. Fuck 'em. If that is your style, go for it. Me, I prefer to go to CAPS when the hubby walks in and finds the wife in bed with her mom. I think "WOW!" is better than "Wow!!!!! and WOW!!!!!! should be reserved for those times when you catch your wife and mother in a threesome with Bigfoot.")

QUESTION MARKS wrinkle the brow and bring the eyebrows down and in. Question marks should never be sandwiched between two EP sentences! Never leave a question unanswered. The answer allows the individual to slap the forehead and re-align the eyebrows (note that hyphen).

PARENTHESIS If something isn't all that important, (nice to know stuff, but you can live without it,) put it inside a set of parenthesis. In long sentences, a MUMBLEr who is running out of breath knows he can jump over this part in a pinch.

APOSTROPHIES thrill a MUMBLEr as they know you are omitting letters, words, and sometimes, bunches of words. For instance, "them" can be shortened to "'em," and spitting can be spittin', and in words that show possession, ie: "Mary's ball" replaces "the ball that belongs to Mary." Thrill a mumbleopiac; use apostrophes.

QUOTATION MARKS also thrill mumbleopiacs as they signify a speaker speaking. Very often, they are familiar with the speaker and can simply inject, "blah, blah, blah," or "yadah, yadah, yadah," and move right along.

And finally, a word on PARAGRAPHS.

Every new speaker gets his or her own paragraph, even if all he or she has to say is, "Huh?" Try to keep paragraphs short and sweet. Lump all of your (character's) related thoughts into one paragraph and start a new one when you get another thought.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~ Note from Morgan ~
Every new speakers' ACTIONS go in the same paragraph as their DIALOGUE. I have seen one too many lines of dialogue 'stranded', just hanging out all by its lonesome, staring at the action done by that speaker in the very next paragraph. Take pity on your poor Dialogue and put it with its Actions.

One other thing; if John licks Mary's nipples and Mary moans... John's licking and Mary's moaning do NOT go in the Same Sentence! They don't go in the same Paragraph either!

John wriggled his tongue across Mary's nipples.

Mary moaned, and gasped. "Oh God! That is so good!" She grabbed his head to pull him closer.

John yelped. "Hey, watch the hair!"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Paragraph breaks allow MUMBLErs to go to the bathroom. This also helps those who read from a scrolling monitor.

And another thing. Hit the return key twice following each paragraph. That places white space between paragraphs. Do not indent or tab. Keep it clean; keep it tight; just like pussy. (Note the use of the semi-colon with short sentences, and this don't-really-need-to-know shit I placed in parenthesis along with a combo word I made using the hyphens.)

Thank you for your attention.

From Phil Phantom’s: “Guide to Writing Good Trash"
Copyright Phil Phantom (C) 2003

May he rest in peace.
I read the first book to see what all the fuss was about. "Holy shit," I murmur. I haven't bothered to start the second in the years since.

But I have to say, I'm kind of a little curious to see how the movie turned out. I might have a cheeky look at it when it comes out on DVD.
Woof!

Despite the first rain we've seen for five years in post-apocalyptic Georgia, that was another snoozer. Literally! I missed most of Rick's big monologue in the barn. Woke up for him saying the name of the show though. Roll credits.

This new stalker guy looks promising. A long time coming, but I'm gagging for next week. Hopefully they wring the most out of him.
Yeah, I'll give you the good character development on Tyreese, and Beth getting shafted. Hang on, let me just sit with that thought a minute. Mmm...Beth getting shafted...

But horses for courses on the other, I guess. I felt they tried a bit too hard.

Definitely, Noah is one unlucky penny. Him and that priest. Hopefully they come into their own soon.

I don't know what that torso pile was all about. If it is foreshadowing the next lot of bad guys, I really want them to spend some more time fleshing them out. The last few whipped through too quickly for mine. We've had the enemy within and the Governor, and now we need another meaty antagonist. Let's hope the torso pile gang delivers.
Hmmm, I don't know. I thought it was a bit of a nothing episode to come back with. I'm not a big fan of the hallucination thing, and I thought it was a real waste of such a good character.

Then again, I still haven't forgiven them for Beth, so...

I prefer it when there's a little more going on; at least a little more tension. Hopefully it'll pick up next week when they hit the road for DC.
My one Valentine,
Gave you my body and soul,
And a life like mine.
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I love you, Will - Marry me?



Of course I will. I've already updated my profile page.

And check out my entry...

There once was a man from Nantucket,
He fell hard for the island's cum bucket.
She had the men form a line.
He asked her his Valentine,
And she gave him her ass to fuck it.

This poetry shit writes itself.
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I'm in - working on it now - anyone have a good rhyme for "gas chamber"?


Ass tamer?
I'm resurrecting my stalled entry for the flash oral competition last year. There was no way I could get it done in under a thousand words. It's a bout a woman who takes a little time out on her way home to do something just for her.

Unlike any of my previous stories, I'm actually going to try this one in third person. And if they'll have me, I'm going to try and submit it to The Vault.