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Wilful
Over 90 days ago
Straight Cis Male, 49
0 miles · Sydney
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Devil's Advocate
I'd double down on the hand job for the sheer novelty of it. I've only been in that situation once before, and let me tell you, that memory has been withdrawn from the spank bank more than for any of the countless blowies I've had. Hell, I think I've... looked back with fondness on that encounter more times than I've actually had my cock sucked.
Devil's Advocate
I think the approach you're taking is a good one. It's really too much to dress every line of dialogue - or worse still, first person narrative - in the accent/dialect of your character. It makes it much harder to read and can be quite annoying. The odd sprinkle here and there is more than enough to convey the style of speech.
The reality is that we don't speak the way we write. If we did, we'd sound like we were on the set of Downton Abbey. And if we wrote the way we speak, literature would look like a Gen-Y's text message history. for example, the opening line of one of my stories, Warning Order, is, "Are you all right, Mate?" But what the character actually said is, "You right, Mate?"
Having said that, there are exceptions to the rule where very skilled and talented authors can pull off writing all the dialogue or even the whole story in stylised language. As moderators, we'll allow dialogue. However, the entire first person narrative will be very closely scrutinised and likely debated backstage, so it'll need to be flawless to even have a chance.
The reality is that we don't speak the way we write. If we did, we'd sound like we were on the set of Downton Abbey. And if we wrote the way we speak, literature would look like a Gen-Y's text message history. for example, the opening line of one of my stories, Warning Order, is, "Are you all right, Mate?" But what the character actually said is, "You right, Mate?"
Having said that, there are exceptions to the rule where very skilled and talented authors can pull off writing all the dialogue or even the whole story in stylised language. As moderators, we'll allow dialogue. However, the entire first person narrative will be very closely scrutinised and likely debated backstage, so it'll need to be flawless to even have a chance.
Devil's Advocate
Stories are definitely better than porn. The biggest sex organ we have is between our ears, and stimulating the imagination is the best way to get off... if you're not actually getting off with someone else. Even then sometimes.
I've seen more than my fair share of porn and the hardcore stuff that gets right down to the good bit, maybe with a brief interview with the starlet beforehand, is certainly the best to look at. But for me, the story that leads to two, or many many more people banging was missing.
And, oh my God, the pissweak porn where the performers furrow their brows and pout as they act there little hearts out is a real boner killer, to say nothing of the mediocre bash at it after.
Definitely the stories.
I've seen more than my fair share of porn and the hardcore stuff that gets right down to the good bit, maybe with a brief interview with the starlet beforehand, is certainly the best to look at. But for me, the story that leads to two, or many many more people banging was missing.
And, oh my God, the pissweak porn where the performers furrow their brows and pout as they act there little hearts out is a real boner killer, to say nothing of the mediocre bash at it after.
Definitely the stories.
Devil's Advocate
I haven't collaborated with anyone here yet, but I did team up with a publisher in the States to ghost write some werewolf erotica a few years back. They gave me the plots and I wrote them out, fleshing out the odd bit here and there based on their feedback.
I'd love to work with some of the authors here on Lush in more of an equal partnership. Of course, any of the heavy hitters I follow, or any of the other story mods, are a given. And there's plenty of other talented writers here I'd be excited to work with too.
Just waitin' for the right opportunity...
I'd love to work with some of the authors here on Lush in more of an equal partnership. Of course, any of the heavy hitters I follow, or any of the other story mods, are a given. And there's plenty of other talented writers here I'd be excited to work with too.
Just waitin' for the right opportunity...
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Quote by Liz
I like adverbs but you have to be careful not to overuse them.
I think if you strip too many out you run the risk of making your story sterile, like a triple distilled shot of literature. The flipside is cramming the piece with so many that it ends up fat and fluffy.
Well said. It's all about finding the right balance.
I'm prone to be a bit heavy-handed with the adjectives myself, especially early on in my stories. I think it makes for building a more vivid scene in the reader's mind. Liz and Sprite do it seamlessly - I'll have to go back and see how they do it.
Devil's Advocate
Congratulations to the winners and finalists! Played hard, done good.
I did my best to get through them all, and of course, I'll keep going. But the judges... To actually read them all and be able to sort out the winners... You guys deserve the biggest congratulations.
There were a lot of fun entries this time around. But I was most surprised, and impressed, by the quality of writing from so many writers here on Lush. My following authors list is going to blow out something shocking now! Really great work everyone.
I did my best to get through them all, and of course, I'll keep going. But the judges... To actually read them all and be able to sort out the winners... You guys deserve the biggest congratulations.
There were a lot of fun entries this time around. But I was most surprised, and impressed, by the quality of writing from so many writers here on Lush. My following authors list is going to blow out something shocking now! Really great work everyone.
Devil's Advocate
I was all up in Claudia Schiffer's business back in the day, with a couple of posters and a little too much effort to get my hands on newspaper and magazine shoots of her, including the long-range grainies of her topless with David Copperfield.
But it's Linda Evangelista and Christy Turlington for me by far. Damn!
But it's Linda Evangelista and Christy Turlington for me by far. Damn!
Devil's Advocate
I'd really like it if the story tags were displayed at the bottom of the story instead of up the top. They're hard to ignore sometimes and it can really be a spoiler in some cases, ruining the suspense.
Those who can't help themselves or who otherwise might be a little sensitive to certain subject matter can still give the tags at the end of a story a quick skim before they start reading.
Those who can't help themselves or who otherwise might be a little sensitive to certain subject matter can still give the tags at the end of a story a quick skim before they start reading.
Devil's Advocate
Introduce the title of your story: Naughty or Nice
Genre/Category: Exhibitionism
Provide the link: www.lushstories.com/stories/exhibitionism/naughty-or-nice.aspx
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
This is of course my entry for the Holiday Hijinks competition. I originally thought of getting a bit freaky with Mrs Claus when Santa took off to deliver the presents, but Mysteria27 beat me to it with her entry, Mrs. Claus Has Her Yearly Gangbang. So that left me scrambling for an alternative. A MILF trading sexual favours with Santa in exchange for a gift for her naughty son came to mind, along with a couple of schoolgirls busting out their feminine wiles.
My wife said that under no circumstances was I to go with the schoolgirl story, so that pretty much clinched it. If the Fun Police weren’t happy, it must be good.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
That’s easy, I just needed a couple of ratbags to pull this one off. We’ve all seen, or been, those hotties in their youth who sling their ass for a bit of fun. Who better for a holiday hijinks romp?
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
I’ve gone third person again, this time entirely in present tense. I’ve also kept it a lot lighter than usual, not delving into the emotional side of the characters like I usually do. Hopefully that makes for something fun for the holidays.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
I fucked myself on the timing with this one and I was up until 5 o’clock in the morning finishing it off. Unfortunately fatigue got the better of me and I just kept painting myself into corners with the finish. I just couldn’t get past the shattered lollipop. It looks okay after two hours sleep and the fresh light of day, but I’ll leave that up to you to judge.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
The competition closes tonight, so please get in there as soon as you can and slap a vote on it. And as long as you’re there, support the other authors who’ve entered too.
Enjoy
Genre/Category: Exhibitionism
Provide the link: www.lushstories.com/stories/exhibitionism/naughty-or-nice.aspx
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
This is of course my entry for the Holiday Hijinks competition. I originally thought of getting a bit freaky with Mrs Claus when Santa took off to deliver the presents, but Mysteria27 beat me to it with her entry, Mrs. Claus Has Her Yearly Gangbang. So that left me scrambling for an alternative. A MILF trading sexual favours with Santa in exchange for a gift for her naughty son came to mind, along with a couple of schoolgirls busting out their feminine wiles.
My wife said that under no circumstances was I to go with the schoolgirl story, so that pretty much clinched it. If the Fun Police weren’t happy, it must be good.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
That’s easy, I just needed a couple of ratbags to pull this one off. We’ve all seen, or been, those hotties in their youth who sling their ass for a bit of fun. Who better for a holiday hijinks romp?
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
I’ve gone third person again, this time entirely in present tense. I’ve also kept it a lot lighter than usual, not delving into the emotional side of the characters like I usually do. Hopefully that makes for something fun for the holidays.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
I fucked myself on the timing with this one and I was up until 5 o’clock in the morning finishing it off. Unfortunately fatigue got the better of me and I just kept painting myself into corners with the finish. I just couldn’t get past the shattered lollipop. It looks okay after two hours sleep and the fresh light of day, but I’ll leave that up to you to judge.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
The competition closes tonight, so please get in there as soon as you can and slap a vote on it. And as long as you’re there, support the other authors who’ve entered too.
Enjoy
Devil's Advocate
I've been with around thirty sex workers in my time. About half a dozen of those worked independently from rented apartments in the city, ten or so on out calls to my place and the rest in hotels. While most of those were escorts from a brothel, I've never actually been to one.
It's an intimidating proposition to walk through the doors, to say nothing of getting out to the industrial areas where they're usually located. I was advised by one of the girls I saw to ask for the private introductions if I ever went because all the girls swarm clients as soon as they step inside. There's often a criminal element hanging around as well from what I hear, either providing security and/or drugs. Of course, all my info is ten years old. It might be different now.
I was going to go to one in Brisbane on a business trip a few years back, their prostitution laws conspiring to make it the best option at the time. However, the three o'clock driver changeover made it near impossible to get a cab. Making matters worse, some jackass waiting in the queue outside the hotel took it upon himself to organise all of us into ride sharing groups, asking us all where we were going. I slunk back upstairs with my tail between my legs rather than team up with a disapproving grandmother on her way home.
It's an intimidating proposition to walk through the doors, to say nothing of getting out to the industrial areas where they're usually located. I was advised by one of the girls I saw to ask for the private introductions if I ever went because all the girls swarm clients as soon as they step inside. There's often a criminal element hanging around as well from what I hear, either providing security and/or drugs. Of course, all my info is ten years old. It might be different now.
I was going to go to one in Brisbane on a business trip a few years back, their prostitution laws conspiring to make it the best option at the time. However, the three o'clock driver changeover made it near impossible to get a cab. Making matters worse, some jackass waiting in the queue outside the hotel took it upon himself to organise all of us into ride sharing groups, asking us all where we were going. I slunk back upstairs with my tail between my legs rather than team up with a disapproving grandmother on her way home.
Devil's Advocate
I always liked the darker shades. Bright reds for dressing up and/or going out, and something a little more muted for everyday. The light pinks and glosses really don't do it for me.
But having said that, I'll take whatever I can get. If she feels good in dark, light or nothing at all, I'm there. What's most important about her lips is that they're curled up in the corners.
But having said that, I'll take whatever I can get. If she feels good in dark, light or nothing at all, I'm there. What's most important about her lips is that they're curled up in the corners.
Devil's Advocate
I'm definitely in favour of Option D. I want honest and constructive feedback that's going to help me grow as a writer. And in that spirit, I'll just point out that there's a small typo in that option. 
To that end, I try and offer constructive feedback on stories myself. I do it publically so that other writers reading the story and comments might hopefully find something useful in it too.
To that end, I try and offer constructive feedback on stories myself. I do it publically so that other writers reading the story and comments might hopefully find something useful in it too.
