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browncoffee
12 hours ago
Straight Female, 31
England
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Coco Pop
i'm 22 and craving some 18 year old. fuck yeah. he should be a total stud with like a nipple piercing maybe? whew! is it hot in here? no, it's not.
Coco Pop
Quote by Verbal
I'd never heard this word before in my life (I had to Google it). Thanks!
I did the same when I first heard it too!
Coco Pop
Introduce the title of your story:
Lost Angels
Genre/Category: Reluctance
Provide the link: https://www.lushstories.com/stories/reluctance/lost-angels.aspx
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
The idea for this story came to me late at night. I was sitting up in bed, the Wi-Fi was fucking lousy and I was watching the music video for Blue Jeans by Lana Del Rey. That video has fucked with my mind so many times; the way the guy slowly undresses, the way she watches. It's so aching. I found myself furiously tapping the story plot onto a Notepad document on my tablet (the free Word subscription on my Linx has expired!) A lot of the original ideas for this story made it to the final piece. Some I forgot about which annoys me. The story was inspired by a lot of things though, not just a music video. It's mainly about wanting things.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
Wow. I really don't know. I think I often want to fall into the trap of writing about rich people and how their lives are fucked up and stuff. But this was about poor people. Lise and Aiden. I really have no idea where they came from. I never described their appearances in much detail in the story but I know vaguely what they look like. I think the ideas, plot and characters just snowballed. I added their history, personalities etc. as I wrote. It wasn’t pre-planned. So these characters kind of formed as the story did.
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
This story is different to my others because it feels like more. It feels like I wrote it to put people right there, like voyeurs on all the different scenes.
The thing is, I feel as though I tapped into something and while I didn't get quite as far as I would like to get, it's further than I've ever got before.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
I've never been to Los Angeles (the story's setting) but I've heard a lot about it and I researched it furiously. It's hard when you find out things because you automatically want to show off your newfound knowledge but you can't because the characters see these things as normal. I hope that makes sense. You can't show off. You have to be all nonchalant and slip in one thing out of a thousand. I totally indulged while talking about (minor spoiler alert!) Bill's lieutenant status and the pins. I thought it was so cool that there was like this insignia system for cops in the USA (there might even be one in the UK but idk about it) and I JUST COULD NOT RESIST.
As a British citizen who's never been anywhere but Paris (for two weeks, hardly came out of the hotel), I'm obsessed with the USA. I'm obsessed with New York City and LA and Florida and Boston and all that. I guess if I ever went (don't particularly want to anymore) my ideas of it might get dampened a little. But what the hell. I'm writing fiction.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
The title came from a 30 Seconds to Mars video called City of Angels. Of course, Los Angeles is meant to mean something like "the angels"(?) but there was this dude who commented in the video saying something like he thinks it means 'Lost Angels'. I felt that it fit. It was only yesterday evening (three days after the story came out) that I realised I'd named my characters Lise and Aiden, their initials being L and A respectively. It's kind of weird and unplanned but amazing. I still can't understand whether it was a coincidence that I gave the characters those names, or a subconscious decision. Must've been a coincidence.
It makes me enormously happy when a reader tells me a sentence/quote that they liked. I had this one that JohnDoe specified. It goes like this:
“It never took long to turn him on. In fact, I privately believed he was always half-ready, sex just beneath the surface, ready and waiting patiently like an appliance on standby.”
I remember thinking of what kind of metaphor/simile I could use at that part. I wanted to convey that sense of patient readiness. It took me maybe a couple of minutes to write and then I promptly forgot about it. But when JohnDoe mentioned it, I felt so fucking happy. I felt like, 'YES! He gets it! He appreciates it!' I swear to God, if I ever see that line anywhere else, I will be crushed. And the funny thing is, I wasn't even sure the line would work. I was thinking, 'Do they call them appliances in the US? Do they use the word 'standby'? Ah, fuck it, who cares?' And even if every other reader didn’t even notice that line or skimmed past it, I don't care. Because one person liked it. I touched one person in a non-physical way through a fucking story I wrote from the other side of the world and that just about makes me feel on top of the aforementioned world.
I know that I'll grow to hate this story. I always end up hating them. But I had to write about it because right now, it makes me really happy. My attitude towards my writing is obscenely influenced by what other people think of it. I know that on Lush sometimes you read a story and you race through it and don't appreciate it and do the old vote/nice comment and I accept the fact that a lot of people probably did that for this story. But there's some who GOT it. And it's kind of in a raw form, like freshly-mined, needs polishing, needs bits to be less rambling but I didn't want to overwork it. I didn't want to ruin it.
Reading this back makes me feel so, so self-centred and pretentious. I should stop. I will stop. My closing statement: if you plan to read it, don't do so just to make me happy. Read it because you want to read a story and you're prepared to read a story. And please criticise it as much as you want (privately, via PM!) because that's the best thing you can do for me.
That must’ve been the longest interview you guys have ever had! Oh, we’re off air? Since when? The FIRST QUESTION??!! Fuck y’all.
EDIT: Said story has been awarded with an EP. And can also be listened to as an audio story, thanks to the wonderful efforts of jimmasters who kindly narrated it.
Lost Angels
Genre/Category: Reluctance
Provide the link: https://www.lushstories.com/stories/reluctance/lost-angels.aspx
1. What first inspired you to write this particular story?
The idea for this story came to me late at night. I was sitting up in bed, the Wi-Fi was fucking lousy and I was watching the music video for Blue Jeans by Lana Del Rey. That video has fucked with my mind so many times; the way the guy slowly undresses, the way she watches. It's so aching. I found myself furiously tapping the story plot onto a Notepad document on my tablet (the free Word subscription on my Linx has expired!) A lot of the original ideas for this story made it to the final piece. Some I forgot about which annoys me. The story was inspired by a lot of things though, not just a music video. It's mainly about wanting things.
2. How did you come up with these characters?
Wow. I really don't know. I think I often want to fall into the trap of writing about rich people and how their lives are fucked up and stuff. But this was about poor people. Lise and Aiden. I really have no idea where they came from. I never described their appearances in much detail in the story but I know vaguely what they look like. I think the ideas, plot and characters just snowballed. I added their history, personalities etc. as I wrote. It wasn’t pre-planned. So these characters kind of formed as the story did.
3. How does it differ from some of your other stories?
This story is different to my others because it feels like more. It feels like I wrote it to put people right there, like voyeurs on all the different scenes.
The thing is, I feel as though I tapped into something and while I didn't get quite as far as I would like to get, it's further than I've ever got before.
4. What was the most challenging thing about writing this piece?
I've never been to Los Angeles (the story's setting) but I've heard a lot about it and I researched it furiously. It's hard when you find out things because you automatically want to show off your newfound knowledge but you can't because the characters see these things as normal. I hope that makes sense. You can't show off. You have to be all nonchalant and slip in one thing out of a thousand. I totally indulged while talking about (minor spoiler alert!) Bill's lieutenant status and the pins. I thought it was so cool that there was like this insignia system for cops in the USA (there might even be one in the UK but idk about it) and I JUST COULD NOT RESIST.
As a British citizen who's never been anywhere but Paris (for two weeks, hardly came out of the hotel), I'm obsessed with the USA. I'm obsessed with New York City and LA and Florida and Boston and all that. I guess if I ever went (don't particularly want to anymore) my ideas of it might get dampened a little. But what the hell. I'm writing fiction.
5. Anything else you want to tell us about it?
The title came from a 30 Seconds to Mars video called City of Angels. Of course, Los Angeles is meant to mean something like "the angels"(?) but there was this dude who commented in the video saying something like he thinks it means 'Lost Angels'. I felt that it fit. It was only yesterday evening (three days after the story came out) that I realised I'd named my characters Lise and Aiden, their initials being L and A respectively. It's kind of weird and unplanned but amazing. I still can't understand whether it was a coincidence that I gave the characters those names, or a subconscious decision. Must've been a coincidence.
It makes me enormously happy when a reader tells me a sentence/quote that they liked. I had this one that JohnDoe specified. It goes like this:
“It never took long to turn him on. In fact, I privately believed he was always half-ready, sex just beneath the surface, ready and waiting patiently like an appliance on standby.”
I remember thinking of what kind of metaphor/simile I could use at that part. I wanted to convey that sense of patient readiness. It took me maybe a couple of minutes to write and then I promptly forgot about it. But when JohnDoe mentioned it, I felt so fucking happy. I felt like, 'YES! He gets it! He appreciates it!' I swear to God, if I ever see that line anywhere else, I will be crushed. And the funny thing is, I wasn't even sure the line would work. I was thinking, 'Do they call them appliances in the US? Do they use the word 'standby'? Ah, fuck it, who cares?' And even if every other reader didn’t even notice that line or skimmed past it, I don't care. Because one person liked it. I touched one person in a non-physical way through a fucking story I wrote from the other side of the world and that just about makes me feel on top of the aforementioned world.
I know that I'll grow to hate this story. I always end up hating them. But I had to write about it because right now, it makes me really happy. My attitude towards my writing is obscenely influenced by what other people think of it. I know that on Lush sometimes you read a story and you race through it and don't appreciate it and do the old vote/nice comment and I accept the fact that a lot of people probably did that for this story. But there's some who GOT it. And it's kind of in a raw form, like freshly-mined, needs polishing, needs bits to be less rambling but I didn't want to overwork it. I didn't want to ruin it.
Reading this back makes me feel so, so self-centred and pretentious. I should stop. I will stop. My closing statement: if you plan to read it, don't do so just to make me happy. Read it because you want to read a story and you're prepared to read a story. And please criticise it as much as you want (privately, via PM!) because that's the best thing you can do for me.
That must’ve been the longest interview you guys have ever had! Oh, we’re off air? Since when? The FIRST QUESTION??!! Fuck y’all.
EDIT: Said story has been awarded with an EP. And can also be listened to as an audio story, thanks to the wonderful efforts of jimmasters who kindly narrated it.
Coco Pop
Quote by PhilU
Aw, thanks. I should add that my ambitions when entering the competition were: to have some fun, see if I could improve a bit as a writer, and see if I could get some feedback from some of the awesome writers around here. Mission accomplished!
And thanks to nicola, and the judges, and everyone else who made the competition happen!
That's the spirit! I'll bet y'all anything that this guy will be in the top ten next time he enters!
Coco Pop
I'm made up for you, Gil. And Virgo who deserved to place above me. E, have you had enough coffee or do you want some more?
Coco Pop
Quote by PhilU
Many congratulations to all who made the top ten, and especially to puddleduck, WannabeWordsmith and littleduchess.
And congrats too to all my fellow "equal 11th placers". It was fun to read what everyone did with the girl in the photo (I mean "did" in a literary sense...honest!)
Dude, you were in my top ten!
Coco Pop
Quote by WannabeWordsmith
#W00t
@browncoffee: I totally dedicate my success to you this time around. Without your entry, mine would have been less than half the story it turned out to be. Thank you for being awesome and inspiring me to do better.
Hey, no worries. You can wire the hundred bucks over to my swiss bank account at your earliest convenience.
Lol, no. It was all you!
PD is so gracious. I'd be like, 'fuck y'all. I won!'
I'm so happy for Gil too who placed with her unforgettable story about cocktail umbrellas. All the top ten were actually fantastic. I'm amazed at how many brilliant writers are on here.
Coco Pop
Quote by oddlittledesires
Haha thank you very much, that should make it easier : D
No worries!
Your location is now making me think of apple strudel. 
Coco Pop
The story in question can be found by clicking on the link below. 
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/interracial/the-sitter.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/stories/interracial/the-sitter.aspx
Coco Pop
Hi Emerson.
I PLACED 5TH IN THE COMP. DRINKS ARE ON ME!
DRINK FROM ME, DRINK FROM ME, WHEN I WAS SO THIRSTY...
Please don't take that literally. It's a song.
I PLACED 5TH IN THE COMP. DRINKS ARE ON ME!
DRINK FROM ME, DRINK FROM ME, WHEN I WAS SO THIRSTY...
Please don't take that literally. It's a song.
Coco Pop
omg yay! she's such a sweetheart; always checking up on me and being generally awesome. love you so much MP!!!
Coco Pop
Quote by Stormdog
This made me think of story I read awhile back, although I can't find it now. Apparently Mark Twain had running battles with his editors and proofreaders about punctuation, among other things. They vexed him constantly by changing, adding to, or otherwise "improving" his punctuation of his work, which he was insistent be published with his own punctuation intact.
Apparently, at one point he became so frustrated by it that he sent them his entire article with zero punctuation, and then filled a page with periods, commas, semi-colons, question marks, apostrophes, etc and included it separately, along with a note (which I paraphrase): "Here's is all of the punctuation about which you are forever complaining; put it wherever you want it."
Don't know if that's a true story or not, but it sounds like something he'd do.
that's a fun story! i do hope it's true!
Coco Pop
also, Mr WW, you should never read an entry before writing your own. it makes your story too damn good. grrr....
Coco Pop
Love 'em generally. I especially love Kings of Leon's cover of 'Dancing on my Own' (originally by Robyn). That recent cover of the song that came out last year and got hugely popular was absolute crap though. I love Radio 1's Live Lounge. Some of the covers that come out of there make me SO happy.
Coco Pop
PUDDLEDUCK!!! Ya rock! Such a good story!
Congrats to everyone else who placed. I'm amazed I got in. I tried to read every entry and was really impressed by a lot of them. Some gems didn't even make the top ten.
Congrats to everyone else who placed. I'm amazed I got in. I tried to read every entry and was really impressed by a lot of them. Some gems didn't even make the top ten.
Coco Pop
Quote by kiera
This was nice of you. I like seeing things like this on here.
Hiya
well, i thought 'how bad can it be?'
then i received the PM!
lol, joking! it's actually almost there. he still has to wait a week though.
hey, kiera. you're awesome.
Coco Pop
Just re-mentioning how useful it would be to have a 'search' function on the Lush Authors search page.
https://www.lushstories.com/authors.aspx
https://www.lushstories.com/authors.aspx
Coco Pop
I can't say I'll be fast but PM it over. Be prepared to wait a week for a reply!
Coco Pop
Chris 'Coldplay' Martin. I know he's older and not even that good looking but he's the kinda person who makes me love the world. And he's funny. And I imagine him talking dirty to me.
Coco Pop
I'm afraid i'd be unwilling to punctuate a whole story for somebody else. Try your best to do it yourself. There are a lot of guides onlne to assist you. When you think you've done all you can, I'll look over it for you. However you must try! You cannot expect someone else to turn a block of unpunctuated text into a story for you. Punctuation is really not hard. Just google 'how to punctuate a story'.
Coco Pop
Quote by Gillianleeeza
Daylight Saving Time may have messed up Emerson's schedule or he is exhausted from all the "inventory", lol. BTW did you all happen to ever find any new cocktail umbrellas back there? I'm running low.
Is 5am too early to start drinking?
Maybe some of Verbal's Nyquill might do the trick since allergy season started early this year. Although a coming Nor'Easter this week may help with that. It may snow all over my daffodils and other various things that have bloomed way too early.
Happy Sunday or whatever day it is to everyone.
I miss Bill too. He better get back soon.
5am is too early to be awake but not too early to start drinking.
There's a whole box of cocktail umbrellas; they were dropped off by a hot, blonde hitchhiker.
Where's Billlll....?
