Shit poems are the worst culprits for cheap RRs on Lush and there are loads of them - but then they're judged by people who don't necessarily have any idea what good poetry is. This is why they say it's "subjective".
Most of it is just teenage diary garbage. This kind of unmitigated tosh:
"I gave you my soul complete.
Lost within your kisses sweet"*
All me, me, me. Nothing that actually kicks you in the ribs.
Meter and rhyme is a tricky problem on here. Americans, scots, welsh, Aussies, scousers they all stretch and merge syllables in different ways. First time I read one of Mazza's poems I thought - this is close to being perfect but it just doesn't read right. I then read it in a Glaswegian accent and it was amazing.
[* I made this up on the spot]
So let me this straight. Someone puts together a 1500 word story, building characters and plot with a good dash of eroticism that you feel is good enough to be worthy of leaving comment. You run off an 8 word platitude and then expect to be the one who's thanked in this exchange?
You're only one teased down zip, several undone buttons and a quick wriggle to let the rest just slip off, away from being completely #naked
If your text is ploddy - speed it up. Cut to the chase, play around with timelines, switch scenes, keep the reader on their toes. An added bonus is that speeding it up gives you the option of slowing it down when you really need to. If you think your text is too verbose you could start by trimming off the adjectives, I often find they're the culprits for stodgy writing. A tip I use for this is to read through replacing any adjective with the word "nice" - you'll soon see if you're using too many of them.
I pace out stories before I write so I know where I want to be in a story at, say, halfway or three quarters in. You don't have to stick rigidly to these milestones and when you come to the second or third draft you won't need them any more.
Another reason why I pace out stories is that I rarely write a story from the first scene all the way through to the final scene. Sometimes I can start with the end and work my way back other times I'll chop and change all over the place - this might work for you or it might not.
You have to be honest with yourself. The so-called BDSM lifestyle can be a bubble for you to hide yourself in, away from conservative, "vanilla" societal norms. A form of escapism from how people expect you to behave and act. Being a sub doesn't mean you abdicate your values.
He won't want things to change - he's having his cake and eating it too. If you're happy to live with that, good luck to you. If you're not happy, take control of your life back.
It sounds like he's been allowed out of the bubble and to have a normal life while you haven't. How would he feel if you decided to marry someone or even date someone?
Doesn't sound too promising.
I wouldn't say you've been "friend-zoned", per se, but it sounds like you're on the way. Those texts you get may not be just for you - they could be all contact-all texts - social media 1990s style! I wouldn't read too much into them. If her life is that hectic she may not want a relationship with anyone right now. If she has to work with you then she'd should give serious thought before having casual sex with you.
The only way you'll actually know is to talk it out with her. Scary but it'll save you a hell of a lot of angst. Just don't be an asshole if what she says isn't to your liking.
Good luck
Coy euphemisms,
Teasing double entendres
Only mean one thing
Those top lists vary on every category - at the moment Humour only has one author on it
You probably need some kind of minimum number of scores to get on there
