Quote by simplyjohn
Thats the sort of thing I would expect to see on BGT... I would call that a talent not a sport.
have you ever jumped rope, old man? total sport. don't make me come over there and piss in your meat freezer.
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Quote by TransitionalMan
Are you sure the great outages are over? Today's crash very much has me wondering.
this one was planned and announced ahead of time.
https://forum.lushstories.com/yaf_postst66833_Site-Down-1400-22nd-March-for-about-12-hours.aspx
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Quote by TonyaL
Ohhhhh myyyyyyy Gooooooodddddd this has been hellllllll!!!!!!!
Would love a stiff drink unfortunately I can't have one. While lush was down you have no idea how bad it was. The doctors were gonna have me committed my family didn't know what to do with me and I was just "babababa" in the corner rocking back and forth.
Seriously, I'm glad to have my friends back. I really did go to the Dr yesterday and I got a bit of a lecture from my nurse. She is quite worried that I am going to put myself in the hospital. My blood pressure is ranging from 150 to 220.
I went there because I was having pain in my knee. Fuck I've never felt pain like the doc doing a knee tap.
I guess I'll have a virgin Hannah, Bill.
*hugs* girl, you need to work on the BP! wow. try mediation? i always hate suggesting meds.
lol
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Quote by Beffer
Not my pussy so much as my nipples. I have always had this nervous habit of rubbing my breasts and pinching my nipples. I hope I don't do it in front of other people, but when I'm doing something by myself, I often find myself touching my boobs/nipples.
i like your new avi. a lot. never change it, or i will be forced to have you killed. thus have i spoken.
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Quote by violetcrumble
I personally lean towards more 'fill' or back story then most others on here. It is however a fine balance and I think on the most part it depends on personal preference. I think some good examples that have struck that perfect chord for me would be, Parisian nights (Liz), Moonlit Maize (daleHwest) Frank Chase private dick skittles (sprite) the blue room (dancing_doll) to name a few. I think these though may lean to a little bit much story though for some, especially moonlit maize. Would be interested in others opinions though to see.
On a side note, strangely most of my favorite pieces lean on the hardcore side of things, though thats not at all my style. I think this is more so indicative of the quality of writing over genre. Rach and Ashleigh, WHEN are you going to give me something thats sweet and gentle and a little less heavy in the bedroom
err... have you read The Exchange? i think that's about the only thing i've done that fits sweet and gentle.
and thanks for the shout out. 
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Quote by Jimwillhavefun
Coming from you and Verbal, I will take this under advisement. I would love to have both of you as followers of my work. Maybe even help to advise me along the way. You both are exceptional writers and I could use all the help I can get. Thank to both of you for you comments.
Thanks to everyone that posted on here about with opinions about this. I will hopefully continue to grow and have more people enjoying my work.
a story should grab you by the first paragraph. first sentence, really. if you waste your shot by describing the girl, or something like that (she is blonde, blue eyed, has 38DD tits, and is 26) then you're off to a bad start. not meant to be a shameless plug, but go read my blondie stories. the idea is to hook the reader in right at the beginning. no preface, just bam. novels are different, but short erotica pieces need to pull you in hard. ever read a story and sort of skim through the first bit until the sex catches your eyes? you shouldn't be feeling that way - you should WANT to read the pre-sex stuff. you shouldn't care when the sex comes in. back story is great if it grabs you, but if it just drones on like a history paper, it's getting in the way.
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Quote by Verbal
I suspect I am one of the few exceptions here. I get bored by backstory and character motivation and long, linear build-ups. Don't necessarily jump into the sex, but jump into something, whether it's action or dialogue or plot (or sex). Jump into them moment and let the reader figure it out.
I don't really care that before fucking, they had dinner in a nice restaurant and then romantically walked the streets of Paris at sunset.
*nods* i don't need the sex to grab me and pull me in, but i need something to. wading through too much backstory or descriptions or whatever loses interest after a while - an interesting character or scene, tho, sexless or not, will work for me.
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Quote by Verbal
I didn't know you were embarrassable.
lol - you have no idea. i'm also, at times, incredibly shy and somewhat insecure, though it's not a side of me that people here see very often. Let's just say that Sprite is a lot more boisterous than rachel is.
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Posted another Seattle Mix Tape, if anyone's into reading - flash, so it's short. btw, for anyone curious, and since it seems right to give credit, i started writing the psychedelic pussycat dreams after reading Furball's Shard series, cause really, it's brilliant, and i like stealing great ideas - what's the point of stealing crap ones, really? anyways, the Seattle Mix Tapes are more of the same - difference is, the PPDs are fictional, and these are... errr... not, nor are they memories... yeah... *shuffles feet* more like recent experiences... anyways, hopefully that piques interest and also gives Hannah more reasons to embarrass me than usual... ok, not going to be able to show my face in here again, so it was nice knowing ya'll.
happy sunday, and i'll have a Strawberry Daqueery, please.
happy sunday, and i'll have a Strawberry Daqueery, please.
