One of the very first things i'll notice in a story, is if the dialogue doesn't sound real. often times it will sound stilted and stiff. write it how the character speaking would actually talk. don't make it formal unless the speaker is a very formal person. toss in slang if it's appropriate. please use contractions. most people i know don't talk like this:
It is very important that he should not go hiking today.
it's more like this: it's way important that he shouldn't go hiking today.
best advice, read it out loud and see how it sounds. and stay in character.
I am John Wayne's testicles.
Hi Sammi! *hugs* i could be. depends on your personality, your interests, all those things. i know some Trans-folk. they're lovely. some cross dressers too - lovely as well. not really my thing, dating CDs, but fun to hang with and if there was mutual attraction there, i'd be open to the idea. honestly, some of the trans folk are prettier than me, so yeah, it's not something i would close the door on - always open to the possibility - that said, i am married, so i'm not really looking.
btw, what is a rock melon? is that some Australian thing?