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Quote by Verbal


Thank you, dear. Actually four of the Shard stories are linked to the Open trilogy. Everything's connected together! I will explain the chronology n the Shard-o-verse thread some day.


for the record, i love you flash shards. please, never stop writing those. and when i say please, i mean, if you do, i will find out where you live and key your car. smile

ok, since Rumple hates me and refuses to serve milkshakes, can i have one of them Hannahs everyone raves about?
Quote by oceanrunner
But what if you are a pretentious asshole?


see my previous post - if your character is pretentious, and i actually know someone like this, who uses "big words" in conversation, then write their dialogue like that - but remember, remain consistant when you do it smile

also, if you're Shakespeare, you are allowed to use iambic pentameter. the rest of you...
One of the very first things i'll notice in a story, is if the dialogue doesn't sound real. often times it will sound stilted and stiff. write it how the character speaking would actually talk. don't make it formal unless the speaker is a very formal person. toss in slang if it's appropriate. please use contractions. most people i know don't talk like this:

It is very important that he should not go hiking today.

it's more like this: it's way important that he shouldn't go hiking today.

best advice, read it out loud and see how it sounds. and stay in character.
Quote by Buz
Y'all should see her at Naked Twister. When it comes to poker she counts cards, somebody at least toss me a towel.


Shush, you. don't give the rubes anything. *smacks your ass with a towel, then tosses it at you*
I'm crap at poker, but what the hell - i AM good about taking my clothes off..
Quote by Gillianleeeza


Hannah will be pleased. She is hard to say no to.

I am so happy everyone is entering. It is a good feeling and fitting legacy for Alan. I would hope that he would be pleased to see how many people he is still inspiring with his passion.

It will be interesting to see how many entries are eventually submitted, since the competition doesn't close for over a month. I would not want to be a judge.

I have a lot of reading to get to.ZJgVjcYEsxjLDdiF

I'll put off taking my Nyquil till a bit later and see what I can catch up on. Although I am sure most will put mine to shame, it's still nice to be able to have entered a poetry competition.


only reason i wrote a piece is to i can disqualify myself from the judging. lol ironically i just sent Nicki a note that she needs to start reading if she wants to keep up with all the submissions smile and yes, i like to think Alan would be pleased. probably get a good chuckle about it. smile
Quote by oceanrunner


you're ahead of me. i keep starting poems and chucking them b/c they suck.



don't listen to her - it's an amazing piece. people keep upping the bar in this comp. smile
Quote by Gillianleeeza
Hannah, it appears you are doing a great job getting everyone to enter the comp. I can't wait to see everyone's entries.

You even convinced Verbal to enter. I am eagerly awaiting his now.

I'll have a couple of Hannah's to celebrate Hannah's efforts. Now if she could just come to my house to make me get more done at home, lol.

A toast to our very own cheerleader. I know they don't have cheerleaders where you are from Hannah but you can be an honorary one now.


Verbal's is up. it's actually incredibly gorgeous and a bit emotional.
Quote by Verbal


You are going a little Tracy Flick on us, dear. smile I am, however, submitting something poem-like today.



best. movie. ever. smile
Quote by Liz


Gonna need a special ribbon for that.



i so want the rainbow umbrella ribbon! heart
you know. that cheers show, they had a theme song. i'm thinking this place does too... in the mean time... you guys serve milk shakes?
Quote by MostPreciousLittle


Okay, Rachel. Thanks.

I will then.



Quote by MostPreciousLittle


Oh shit. Lol. I was thinking of entering. Have I thought of anything, no.



please? please please please please? i promise to read it and say nice things about it. smile
Quote by Jen


I have heard it being said *glances around* that a dirty limerick which uses the word 'frottage' will do well.

There was a young man in a cottage
Whose smile was of maximum wattage...

Knowhatamsayin?



Though his teeth were quite shiny
His cock was really tiny
And his only relief was some frottage
Hi Sammi! *hugs* i could be. depends on your personality, your interests, all those things. i know some Trans-folk. they're lovely. some cross dressers too - lovely as well. not really my thing, dating CDs, but fun to hang with and if there was mutual attraction there, i'd be open to the idea. honestly, some of the trans folk are prettier than me, so yeah, it's not something i would close the door on - always open to the possibility - that said, i am married, so i'm not really looking.
Quote by oceanrunner


Nope. no one heard a thing. (Here's the bottle of tequila, Rachel)


*shakes head* not a good idea. tequila only makes me write bad poetry. i've done enough of that for one day...
Quote by oceanrunner
what are people drinking?

I'll have a Hannah, but with some tequila, aka a dirty Hannah.



dirty Hannah. i like the sound of that. wait, did i say that out loud?
Quote by gilrenard

Thank you sprite.


i do think i managed to rhyme cock and clock, but that's about it, really smile
Quote by gilrenard
Will a poem written in free verse catch the eyes of the judges?
Or is the rhyme dictionary king of this comp?


anything goes. mine is free verse as are many others. smile
Quote by rafael
you're assuming that he's a good dad. what if he's a shit dad?

I was going to come back to that.

If he's the kind of dad that spends loving constructive time with his son, reads to him, engages with him etc - then it's going to be harder to break up the home.

But if he is non functional as a father - it might be worth having that chat and possibly moving on.

She never said he was a shit father - or even a shit partner.


nor did she say he wasn't. just wanted to cover that. i know plenty of kids who'd be better off if their dad took a hike.
Quote by browncoffee


It's not DM/Alan themed! It's about passion. Surely, you know a thing or two about that...? And besides, Verbal's entry depends on yours so - please!

Whew, all that quoting was fucking tiring. I'll have a Hannah, please. Bill, you'll be entering too, right?

Where's Emerson?



one of the mistakes people are making, and i get it, and it's sweet, but they're writing tributes to Alan. the theme is passion. that's the key word and that's a key in the judging. some very good stories don't make the top 10 at times because they don't adhere to the theme. personally, mine's gonna be pretty filthy.

btw, you seem like a good bunch. i might have to spend more time here in the future
Quote by rafael


Well - you are entitled to your view and I to mine. I dont disagree with much of the advice you have given here. Though I dont believe confronting him is a good idea - it could lead to regrets. He also may not be able to articulate his feelings - or in fact even know precisely what they are. You say she should move on if he no longer loves - really? Perhaps dad will have a view on that. Not sure if he'll want his partner to go off with his son - he may want custody. Saying children are resiliant seems to make it easier for parents to split up doesnt it - it's a convenient phrase - wonder what the boy thinks of it. The OP has not indicated that the famly environment is unsuitable - merely that she thinks her partner does not love her.

What good will it do the boy if he is deprived of living with his father. Living with a happy fulfilled mum cannot compensate a boy for having a weekend dad. Boys need correct fathering - and dad needs to be present in the family home for that to happen.


you're assuming that he's a good dad. what if he's a shit dad?
btw, what is a rock melon? is that some Australian thing?