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Her Royal Spriteness
Quote by Kron96
. If a mod can get through 47 chapters in 2 days, then the entire thing could be up in two days, from whenever she's done.
For the record, several of my fellow mods are currently holding me down forcefully so that i don't beat you senseless. now, go back to your room and stay there for the rest of eternity.
Her Royal Spriteness
Quote by stephanie
Words of a DICK are about to follow:
https://www.lushstories.com/forum/yaf_postst41842_Fucking-Around.aspx
I loved that I did this. Throwaway, quite lovely... Proud of it.
But SHE, GETTING THE GAME INSTANTLY, batted it back like a tennis serve, inserting a much more metaphysical element and indeed, matching AND BETTERING an initial idea. And you JUST CAN'T FUCKING ARGUE with that kind of elegant eloquence.
There's a famous quote, (at least among historians) about the troubled T E Lawrence, "He was not brilliant by accident..."
Neither is my sister.
xx SF
(Had to edit that to correct the quote!!)
Drats! I've been outed! Yes, I really am T E Lawrence. i spent several years riding camels in the African desert while dressed as an arab and blowing up trains... wait.. Lawrence of Arabia? really? they're not the same? nevermind!
Her Royal Spriteness
It needs editing. a mistake people will fall into, sometimes, is that they write poetry as a stream of consciousness, which is where poetry should start, but it shouldn't stop there. take what you write and then craft it. figure out what works, what doesn't, meddle with it - i'll tell you the same as i tell story writers - you should spend far more time on editing than you do on writing - writing should be freeing, you just do exactly that, write - and then, you sit down and do the hard stuff, the not as fun stuff, the important stuff, and take the raw clay shape of your story and turn it into a work of art.
I felt every drop dripping
like a sieve left for ages to let its wet slowly
begin taking a woman
i'll use the above example - YOU might know exactly what you meant by the three lines above, but you should be writing for an audience - me? i was left wondering where the breaks should come, what the drops were, what were drops like a sieve - drops FROM a sieve, i would understand. what does 'to let it's wet slowly begin taking a woman" even mean? was that where the break was even meant to be? seriously, work this, don't think that, just because the words are in ink that it's finished.
hopefully, that's constructive criticism. take it to heart. rome wasn't built in a day, ya know?
I felt every drop dripping
like a sieve left for ages to let its wet slowly
begin taking a woman
i'll use the above example - YOU might know exactly what you meant by the three lines above, but you should be writing for an audience - me? i was left wondering where the breaks should come, what the drops were, what were drops like a sieve - drops FROM a sieve, i would understand. what does 'to let it's wet slowly begin taking a woman" even mean? was that where the break was even meant to be? seriously, work this, don't think that, just because the words are in ink that it's finished.
hopefully, that's constructive criticism. take it to heart. rome wasn't built in a day, ya know?
Her Royal Spriteness
Quote by ChuckEPoo
Thanks for explaining this. I was wondering how it worked. I know there are also a ton of resources here I didn't see mentioned.
Yep, we have things like Clum's punctuation guide and Chrissie's everything you should know about Commas in the writer's resource forum. Also, there is my own: How to Survive a Beating by Sprite for Making Too Many Typos - suggested reading if you want to make it to 2016!
Quote by ChuckEPoo
Including the hard assed ones like Sprite.
My ass is as soft as a pillow, just ask anyone.
Her Royal Spriteness
Quote by prairiedogg
First of all, I want to thank those of you who responded to my posts. Your honesty impresses me, really it does.
I don't want anyone to think that I am in any way denigrating the excellent work that the mods do here. I have never had a problem with a mod and I believe that out of 69 stories and poems I have had approved only two came back for any kind of revision. Believe me, that makes me very happy. It tells me that I must be doing something right.
My beef, if you want to call it that, is all about the RRs. I don't like them, even though I received one for a poem I didn't think deserved it. I just don't think that it should be in the hands of one person.
As for sprite, no, I'm not angling for a RR at all. Like I said, I'm not a fan of them. Just getting approved is good enough for me.
EPs are done by committee - the RRs are as much for the mods as for the writers - the mods nominate stories for EPs and that's the end of it for them - they wanted a chance to reward stories that excelled, but didn't quite make the EP cut - i have, myself, several times RRed stories that were really good but i knew wouldn't make the EP vote cut. if we were to do it any other way, we'd have to have an RR committee as well, for one. for another, it takes away what i consider to be a perk for being a mod.
Her Royal Spriteness
Quote by asleep
SPRITE may not remember this, but she badgered / browbeat me into improving a submission and then scored it less than a "5". However, she DID take a moment and explain herself. I remain very proud of her comments. Other mods (and former mods) have been helpful also. I applaud them for the job they do, and especially so when they go that extra step.
I remember it well, Rick. I think i called you several rude names, punched you in the face and threatened to kill your dog if you didn't fix several typos. Lucky for you, i was in a good mood that day.