I agree with Nicola, in that it is slightly repetitive. When I write a poem I make sure that the descriptive words are all completely genuine and different. By genuine I mean that they are used correctly and in conjunction with what I'm trying to say with the poem. Also you will hardly ever find two rhyming words that are the same in my poems.
For example if I say
I love you a lot you know it's true
I knew it when your favourite colour was blue.
You will never find true and blue, rhyming again. and rarely (unless it's a longer poem) will you find another oo sound.
I avoid being super blunt with my poetry.
I've written sex poems before, (which I promptly threw out because they were no good) but I avoided saying penis or vagina or cum or anything like that because it's too blunt.
When a reader is captivated by something it's usually because they are using their imagination to it's fullest potential
If I were to say:
I came inside you and felt it in my penis
I can imagine that sure, but it's very black and white.
But if I were to say
Engulfed in desire lightening shot through my body
You get the imagine of a man being over come with passionate lust for the other person. The lightening imagery works both as a metaphor for cumming and for the feeling that it procures.
I really hope this helped and I can't wait to see the stuff you come up with next.
Good answers so far guys.
If I couldn't have teleportation I'd want to have the ability to morph into anything I wished. Kinda like Mystique
Personally I'm a skinny guy, and I've always idolized people who were very human, yet still could kick some serious ass.
For example I hate Superman with a passion.
He has:
- Heat vision
- X ray vision
- Freeze breath
- He can fly
- Super strength
- Invincibility
- Super speed
and I can't even remember everything else. AND THEN to top it off his disguise is a PAIR OF GLASSES!!!!?????
Fuck superman
At any rate I idolized people like Spiderman, Batman is my favourite super hero ever because he kicks ass, and hes a fuckin ninja!
But if I could have a super power my super power would be to BE Nightcrawler. Like literally BE Kurt Vagner.
So Lushites, what super power would you have.
I'm gonna start the wolverine tally lol because usually that's ever guys favourite: 0
that's not a lie ali. I do, and I'm sure I've told you YES!!! you sly vixen you!
Ali's nipples are actually lazer cannons, much like the austin powers fembot fame. They shoot photon rays that when aimed at a tree, can incinerate it from 40 yards away.
I'm seriously fantasizing about traveling to the future. They are talking about a space endeavor to mars with people in the next 10 years. And we could colonize the moon in 40 I'd say. Being a HUGE Star Wars fan I just can't accept the fact that I'll be dead just as we reach a new planet. I want to travel in space NOW!!!
I hope I'm not creepy. I love the lush ladies! In a total brotherly love type of way.
And girls I will give you your massages as soon as you materialize inside my living room.FCOtplAyiYprw5Fb
2 green both are my favourites number and colour
When I first became interested in sex, all I watched was edu-porn. I knew where the g-spot was when i was 11, and I knew how to make a woman have multiple orgasms by 14 (after some application) I honestly don't really like video porn all that much. I do enjoy it from time to time, but for the most part I think nothing of it. Reading I obviously have no problem with lol. So yes to answer your question I'm all up for edu porn
It was next to the church of my ex girlfriends lol and it wasn't with her.
my shoulders are my weak spot. Honestly they are the most sensitive spot on my body. and if you kiss those I'll go wild. That or one of my ears but I'm not saying which lol
by the way nic i get what you were trying to do. post one line only, but i ran with this poem.
heres my one line contribution, hopefully whoever continues it will just post one line only
"This is a burning story, one of serendipity"
To see a world in a grain of sand
And heaven in wild flower.
To accomplish 100 simplicities
Before the end of the hour
To hold potential in your hands
that nevermore shall die.
To see a rainbow in the sky
and wonder curiously why?
To see a robin flying high
in endless freedom flight
To feel no stress or worry,
at the end of every night
To while away the hours
in a fit of constant joy
To feel the rushing excitement
as you open a new toy.
To witness real magic
performed right before your eyes
To never doubt in others
never telling silly lies
To dream of the unfathomable
Life's a play ground running wild.
To know true peace and happiness.
This is to be a child.
lol I see this becoming like a bar tune
Stuart has explosive diarrhea.
"These Boots" - I like Megadeth's cover so I'm goin with that
Will you respect me in the morning?