Two linked pieces today...


Just For You (Girls) and
Just For You (Guys)

Date online - 17/18 June 2011

Category – Love Poems

Number of reads to date – Girls - 3422; Guys - 4569

Links –

Just for You - Girls | Lush Stories

Just for You - Guys | Lush Stories

Badges – None

Reader comments:

"You have a enchanting and powerful diction. Words seem to be flowing from you, conveying exactly the emotions and feelings you wanna describe. Lovely."

"So very sensual and erotic. Made me long for the touch of another woman"

"This was a yummy poem to read in bed this morning."

"beautiful images form your words, hauntingly sensual"

"great..erotic and well written....you have a special way with words"


There’s not a great deal to say about these two parallel stories/poems, although I guess it’s unusual to have two versions of the same piece, written as straight/lesbian alternatives.

I didn’t start off meaning to write two versions, but I think I couldn’t decide whether to make it a straight or lesbian piece, and then the idea came to write it twice.

I didn’t actually submit them to the “poetry” section of Lush, because I didn’t think of them like that. They were just pieces of erotic prose laid out in a loose way on the page. But the moderator moved them into the “love poems” section, and I think that’s probably the right place for them, since there’s no real narrative, just an attempt to describe sex in a fairly soft-focus, vanilla sort of way.

On the other hand, one of the writers I most admire, CeliaIsAliena, commented (on the Girls version):

"An impressive piece of narrative erotic poetry! It begins so quietly, I didn't anticipate the build-up in the imagery and passion as the poem proceeds. It's rather a daring strategy, the way the sophistication of the poem's diction and imagery accelerates with the escalation of the lovemaking. The result is a passionate and very vividly-detailed ride, one worth following carefully through to the end!"

So maybe they're better than I give them credit for.

Here's the next one...

“At Night, Two Birds”

First published - 12 June 2011

Category – College Sex

Number of reads to date – 36,253 (now 42,281 - 24 Mar 2023)

Link - At Night, Two Birds | Lush Stories

Badges – Famous Story

Reader comments:

"A cheery tale with lots of cheeky humour and rambunctious sex appeal!"

"Very nice good characters, very believable even the squirting"

"What a yummy morning treat to read. It was sort of innocent but really really sexy too. Loved it"

"I got hard just thinking about your sweet young puss the way you make your panties look oh i think i will make cock cum looking at your sweet young ass love your sweet panties"

….

This was the first story that I wrote specifically for Lush. After having had some good feedback for my first story, “Wet Mountain”, I decided I wanted to write another one and see how that did. And after writing a “straight” story, I wanted to try my hand at a lesbian one.

Following the time-honoured formula of “write about what you know”, it is set in the student flats of an unnamed university, very much like the ones I was living in at the time. Although it features two girl students having sex, at the time my experience of lesbian sex was fairly small, and restricted to little more than a few girlish experiments. But I had a vivid imagination.

The “Annie” in this story is a rather more sexually confident version of me – or at least as I was six years ago, when this was written. In some ways, I was more like the Louise character, but I wanted to write a story in which I took the lead – trying to more assertive in my own life, I suppose. And maybe, looking back, I just wanted to be seduced by someone confident and sexy like the “story Annie”, who would show me what two girls can get up to together.

Would I write it the same way now? No, probably not. Although it’s got some of the same characteristics of my later stories, like the use of humour to set the scene, I’m not sure if the steam-of-conscious style, interspersed with personal asides, really works. It seems a bit affected to me now, but that was how I wrote it at the time, so it can stay like that.

[Spoilers] If the story can be said to have any special features, it would have to be the “squirting” at the end. I’m pretty sure this is only there because I’d seen it on some internet porn, and it looked like a fun thing to introduce in a story. The actual focus of the story is all about the slow seduction and undressing, but I thought it needed a more interesting climax, and the squirting was supposed to do that.

One final obscure fact. The title is an oblique reference to a novel by the Irish writer Flann O’Brien, called “At Swim-Two-Birds”, which I’d recently been reading (he gets a name-check in the story, too). I don’t suppose anyone else got it, but the title’s okay anyway, so I’m not going to change it now.

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