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Well since you asked you're not allowed to judge me or deem me pretentious though you'll probably do both but just don't tell me and it will be fine. You have to be utterly disgustingly pretentious like me and pretend you think I'm not pretentious and shower me with compliments regarding my intelligence and beauty and all that stuff to fill my empty soul, okay?

Ökay.

So the thing was that before I wrote this story I wrote a poem. And I didn't love it enough to post it but there were some lines in it that I was absurdly proud of and it seemed a shame for them to go to waste so in some parts of this story, I made sentences rhyme. I meant to add in more rhymes while I was editing but I got too sick of the story and abandoned it so there weren't many but I was still quite surprised that no-one seemed to notice. Since you've already read it, I'll post some of the lines referred to here:

The lights were too bright, the crowds too loud.

My hand moved faster, spurred on by the blurred displays of obscenity.

...because I always laughed too hard or said something off kilter, talking too fast to filter the words.

Sitting on the balcony, legs dangling, his cigarette angling to the sky, his laugh strangling the darkness until light overflowed and made me feel like every dream I’d ever had glowed on the brink of reality.

Winter came, Christmas bringing listless lingering in the warm glitter of department stores.

Soooo. There were more but you'd have to go back and find them and I'm sure you've better things to do such as GETTING YOUR COMP ENTRY DONE.

Laters, fam.

Quote by Coco
I'll see you in hell, is naked Twister played there? I mean I like to drink too, but I'd like to play that with you.

I don't recall any character or parts of a setting that I didn't glean from something or someone real. There are just too many opportunities to do so: the sexy hunk that's in line staring at me while his girlfriend or wife pays for their merchandise, the seemingly shy librarian that has an undercurrent of sexual heat just barely contained under the surface, and the powerful businessman texting in the elevator--too many things that my mind takes a note or an image of; how are we to pass those things up?

Let's face it, and I'm not saying about the numerous talented authors here, but often we need that little bit of reality to set the right tone in a story. It's foolish to think that artistry isn't shared.

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The "Supernatural" genre really isn't my thing (read my comp entry/failure, "I, Succubus", for confirmation), but you're a very gifted writer, I would recommend PM'ing a couple of the winners of the "Supernatural" competition and seeing if they would be willing to collaborate. I'm not sure that I'm even qualified to edit a "Supernatural" genre story.

Quote by Frank_Lee
I have to imagine you'd make a marvelous writing partner. It's so tempting to write with you, but I know I'd only end up giving you high blood pressure. Just ask Delphi. lol Good luck finding someone. Better yet, hopefully the right idea will come to you.

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I'm working on the 2nd chapter to The Gift, I'm also hoping to get out another about a young female student who works at a restaurant and has the hots for the owner/chef of the restaurant.

Quote by Dani
I prefer the cum/came combo.

I've never liked the use of 'come' versus 'cum' simply because 'cum' is just shorthand for 'succumbed', which when used in a sexual sense is to 'succumb to pleasure'.

I get that came is just past-tense of come, but it makes more sense to me than cummed. *Cringes*

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"Come" is definitely the verb, meaning to orgasm. For example, "I'm going to come", "I'm coming", or "I came". The past tense is always "came". It's never ever "comed".

As for "cum", it's the noun meaning semen or sperm. For example, "I shot my cum all over her tits", or "my cock was oozing pre-cum through my pants".

I hate using "cum" as the verb, such as "cumming" or "cummed", but as a story moderator, I'll let it slide. The one that really chaps my ass though is when people use "cum" in place of "orgasm" or "climax" etc. For example, "I had such a good cum." *shudders*