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I hope I posted this is in the right place....
The Literary Review gives out an award for the worst sex scene in a literary novel. Least anyone think that sex is easy to write....
The winner for 2015 was Morrissey. The competitors were: Before, During, After by Richard Bausch, Book of Numbers by Joshua Cohen, Against Nature by Tomas Espedal, Fates and Furies by Lauren Groff, The Making of Zombie Wars by Aleksandar Hemon, Fear of Dying by Erica Jong, List of the Lost by Morrissey, and The Martini Shot by George Pelecanos. I know at least two of those names! This was the scene that swayed the judges:
At this, Eliza and Ezra rolled together into the one giggling snowball of full-figured copulation, screaming and shouting as they playfully bit and pulled at each other in a dangerous and clamorous rollercoaster coil of sexually violent rotation with Eliza’s breasts barrel-rolled across Ezra’s howling mouth and the pained frenzy of his bulbous salutation extenuating his excitement as it whacked and smacked its way into every muscle of Eliza’s body except for the otherwise central zone. ~List of the Lost
Sounds painful....
You can find the rest of the "winners" here: https://literaryreview.co.uk/bad-sex-in-fiction-award
Sometimes I hear people talk about how writing sex is easy. Beg to differ. Cheers for you if you write hot sex!
The Literary Review gives out an award for the worst sex scene in a literary novel. Least anyone think that sex is easy to write....
The winner for 2015 was Morrissey. The competitors were: Before, During, After by Richard Bausch, Book of Numbers by Joshua Cohen, Against Nature by Tomas Espedal, Fates and Furies by Lauren Groff, The Making of Zombie Wars by Aleksandar Hemon, Fear of Dying by Erica Jong, List of the Lost by Morrissey, and The Martini Shot by George Pelecanos. I know at least two of those names! This was the scene that swayed the judges:
At this, Eliza and Ezra rolled together into the one giggling snowball of full-figured copulation, screaming and shouting as they playfully bit and pulled at each other in a dangerous and clamorous rollercoaster coil of sexually violent rotation with Eliza’s breasts barrel-rolled across Ezra’s howling mouth and the pained frenzy of his bulbous salutation extenuating his excitement as it whacked and smacked its way into every muscle of Eliza’s body except for the otherwise central zone. ~List of the Lost
Sounds painful....
You can find the rest of the "winners" here: https://literaryreview.co.uk/bad-sex-in-fiction-award
Sometimes I hear people talk about how writing sex is easy. Beg to differ. Cheers for you if you write hot sex!
Bug
Quote by mranonymous7
1) I'm guilty of this. mostly because the description allows me to see the lady or guy in my mind & therefore write better about them. but I'm going to try to do better and just say tall...or firm medium size boobs...etc. instead of the laundry list. it a 15 year old habit so it'll be hard to break. most of the time the girl I'm describing is a real person.
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3) I'm one of the guilty ones here but not by choice...I'm dyslectic & no matter how many time I proof read...I see it the way its suppose to be rather than how it is...UNTIL you point it out. then I can see it wrong & correct it. I have a friend that when he has time edits my stuff & eliminates part of my problems. But alas not all. so since for me its a medical thing over which I have no control I hope you can forgive me.
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If it helps at all, sometimes, I write my laundry list in a separate file, just to get the description solid in my head. Then as I'm working on my story, I try to hint at the idea that she's a blonde haired, blue-eyed, hundred-pound kick-boxer through the action. Tossing a blonde braid. Needing a step-stool to reach top shelves. Things like that.
I fight with dyslexia, too. The second pair of eyes is the most useful thing but if I don't have that (as I often don't for my erotica drafts) putting my story down overnight usually makes the errors easier to see when I pick it back up again.
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I like hearing about my partner's past. If I can get over myself, it's a turn on.
Also, I like being informed. So when my now wife, then girlfriend, and I walked into a club and she bumped into an ex, she just whispered to me, "Remember that story about the girl who let me drive four hours to meet with her and then when I got there, she had a girlfriend? That's her."
Then, I know what their angry, animated discussion is about. And while I'm sitting, enjoying my martini, I get to explain it to the current girlfriend of my wife's ex.
Also, I like being informed. So when my now wife, then girlfriend, and I walked into a club and she bumped into an ex, she just whispered to me, "Remember that story about the girl who let me drive four hours to meet with her and then when I got there, she had a girlfriend? That's her."
Then, I know what their angry, animated discussion is about. And while I'm sitting, enjoying my martini, I get to explain it to the current girlfriend of my wife's ex.
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I really do want to turn my readers on. It's secondary to being entertaining, but for most of my writing, I'm hoping to do both.
I've had people tell me it helped their married sex life and I think that's my favorite response. Though, I never mind knowing there was a physical reaction to something I put on paper.
Most of my worry is that someone will decide that everything I write is a Mary Sue and I'm really looking to be fisted in a shed or have sex in public. Although...maybe that would be good for my reputation.
I've had people tell me it helped their married sex life and I think that's my favorite response. Though, I never mind knowing there was a physical reaction to something I put on paper.
Most of my worry is that someone will decide that everything I write is a Mary Sue and I'm really looking to be fisted in a shed or have sex in public. Although...maybe that would be good for my reputation.
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Quote by oceanrunner
Such a good story (not mine). I plan on re-reading it today, as I noticed it is getting close to Famous status. I think it's one of the best on the site, from one of the best on the site.
Trading Favors, by Burquette
I know you know how much this means to me. Thank you so much for complements and promotion.
I don't follow views closely but I do check them every once in a while. When I look at Trading Favors I can hardly believe that there have been almost 30,000 clicks. I know not everyone who clicked, read, but it's still humbling.
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Quote by 1nympholes
Kids Thank you for your wise comments about orgasms. But I do not think she would be asking for help if it was just agreed upon fun and training. I would guess that it is what you and I would call punishment.
Since she is young and Submissive it may not be that easy for her to pack her things and leave.
Is there a Submissive out there that learned to hold off her Orgasm until their Domme give her permission to cum? I have read of this but never have known anyone like this or in a similar environment.
Honestly, if she's not having fun and he doesn't care, she really should reevaluate what she's getting out of this.
In the meantime, if she wants to hold off, tell her to try mental arithmetic (add the year of her birth with her age, Subtract the year she graduated high school from the year a sibling was born...things like that). Times tables won't work because they're largely memorized; she needs to distract herself with something that engages the mind. Mentally recalling recipes works for me, too...whatever she uses needs to be dull and it needs to make her think. That's my best advice.
I hope things turn out all right for her.
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I'm going to assume that this is playful punishment rather than abusive. Otherwise, ignore everything I'm saying and go straight to the comments above that say find someone else.
Her boyfriend should be helping her. In fact, if it's a BDSM thing, it can be a training. If he edges, she can figure out how to hold off on her own for short periods. Like TheAngryishLover said, it can cause a mind-blowing orgasm.
My trick is thinking about work, personally.
Her boyfriend should be helping her. In fact, if it's a BDSM thing, it can be a training. If he edges, she can figure out how to hold off on her own for short periods. Like TheAngryishLover said, it can cause a mind-blowing orgasm.
My trick is thinking about work, personally.
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looks like you do have to create an acct to read the story itself:
"Non-members can read story descriptions and general announcements. If you wish to read erotic stories, comment on posts, and/or participate in forums, you will need to become a member. Free memberships are available.
How It Works: Choices in Reading"
And thanks for promoting my comp entry in your sig! I'm tickled pink!
Thank you for this!
I logged out of the site and it still let me read the chapter so I had hope. I guess not....
You know how I loved Gold-Medal Whore.
I hope you get more views and comments on that gem. 
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Quote by 69Kisses96
Donate at the grocery checkout for school supplies, veteran's organizations, the food bank and cancer research.
The food bank is my special charity. Everything else rotates from month-to-month (Local homeless animal shelters, women's shelters, very occasionally Planned Parenthood). I don't see a reason for hunger in this country and if you're not affiliated with a church, the food bank is your best option.
Bravo to you!
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So....I wrote and published a novel about four years ago. Here's the cover:
My publisher is an interesting little imprint. One of the things they do is serialize all of their novels for free. The idea is, hopefully, you'll like it so well, you'll need to read the end and, therefore, buy the whole book. My book started its serialization today. You can read it for free, one chapter a week (for nine months), here: http://forbiddenfiction.com/chapter/
You shouldn't need to sign up for a free membership just to read, but correct me if I'm wrong and I'll edit this post. You will need a free membership if you want to comment.
A couple of things:
1. I wrote it more than five years ago so my style is a bit rougher.
2. It's a behemoth at 116,000 words. I wasn't thinking of turning it into a published novel when I wrote it so I wasn't watching the word count.
3. If I were tagging it, it would be labeled with reluctance/seduction (of course), BDSM, oral sex, straight sex, gay sex, anal sex, lesbian, bisexual, exhibitionism, voyeur, group sex and supernatural (Clearly, I was trying to get every sex act I could think of in there).
Thank you if you give it a try. No hard feelings if you don't.
PS.....
Do you have her on an improvement program? Let me know if you need help with that. wink
My publisher is an interesting little imprint. One of the things they do is serialize all of their novels for free. The idea is, hopefully, you'll like it so well, you'll need to read the end and, therefore, buy the whole book. My book started its serialization today. You can read it for free, one chapter a week (for nine months), here: http://forbiddenfiction.com/chapter/
You shouldn't need to sign up for a free membership just to read, but correct me if I'm wrong and I'll edit this post. You will need a free membership if you want to comment.
A couple of things:
1. I wrote it more than five years ago so my style is a bit rougher.
2. It's a behemoth at 116,000 words. I wasn't thinking of turning it into a published novel when I wrote it so I wasn't watching the word count.
3. If I were tagging it, it would be labeled with reluctance/seduction (of course), BDSM, oral sex, straight sex, gay sex, anal sex, lesbian, bisexual, exhibitionism, voyeur, group sex and supernatural (Clearly, I was trying to get every sex act I could think of in there).
Thank you if you give it a try. No hard feelings if you don't.
PS.....
Quote by sprite
don't be nice to her - she's a terrible lesbian.
Do you have her on an improvement program? Let me know if you need help with that. wink
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Quote by kiera
It went really well thank youMy son's football team won their game so that was awesome.
I just read this story, it was outstanding. I never doubted that you were as exceptionally talented as everyone claimed, but now I know for a fact that you truly are. That was an excellent read, I can't wait to read more of your work.
Have a great week
I'm so flattered and pleased that you read. I get a little worried when I'm recommended because I would absolutely hate to disappoint. However, if I wasn't recommended, nobody would ever read me!
I'm sending you a huge hug for your time and just because I like you!