Toenail clippings are very nutritious.
It's nice to see Rump's name on here more than once when it comes to critiquing. He's a master at it. I've also been helped by CurvyGalore (most recently!), Layla, MollyDoll, Ravenstar, Shannon3K, a few others.
I agree that the site is not designed to encourage critiques and extensive rewrites. The mods make sure spelling and grammar and basic story-telling are correct. Most people just want to hear good things about their writing, and there is nothing wrong with that. I would rather not score than give anyone under a 5. And while I try to critique most stories I read, I stick to the things in a story that work the best and try to point them out.
If you want a critique with constructive criticism, you might need to reach out and ask (that's what I do, though not often, as I am a bit of a control freak when it comes to my writing). Someone you know and trust, someone whose writing you enjoy.
I must confess I've been pretty lax about reading contest entries, though I think I have read all the entries from the patrons of this fine establishment. Please let me know if I missed yours.
Not very talkative this morning, nothing is wrong, I just can't seem to get my brain to fully wake up.
The answer to that is, of course: köffee!
Pork chops on the grill! First grill of the summer. With a simple salad.
Silence from my alarm clock. And the soft breathing of Layla to let me know she is sleeping next to me.
Morning all.
As Bill pointed out yesterday, TouchofGrey's (that the name of a Grateful Dead song!) story is excellent, and I heartily recommend it too.
Sara'a comp entry is quite good too - how can you not love a story that ended up with the couple sleeping in the bed of a pickup, staring at the stars. I've spent several nights that way myself.
I have an unpleasant task in about an hour. Wish me luck.
Köffee please.
I think the apology is a graceful gesture, you are discreetly acknowledging what happened and letting him know you didn't take offence. It saves everyone embarrassment. I would feel relieved and grateful.
This would make a great Flash, by the way. No added sex scene, just the fleeting incident in the elevator.
Double post. But I gotta say, the guy above me is kind of a dick.
Nice (mostly...), and a very good friend.
Ironman 1 and 2. RDJ is really good and the character is kind of a dick. I saw these right before I got sick of superhero movies in general and the endless parade of 20 minute fight scenes. I suppose Wonder Woman and Black Panther were good, l saw them, I am just too burnt out on the genre.
The Incredibles was good, though I don't know if it qualifies. Also, the first Spider-Man 2 (does that even make sense?) with Alfred Molina playing Dr. Oct was good (trivia note - Michael Chabon got a screenwriting credit on it).
Oh, and Deadpool made me LOL several times.
This is a thing? I've been driving for decades and have (thankfully) never seen anyone jerking off in a car before. Nor, I hasten to add, have I.
