My rewritten chapters 4 and 5 of "Defying Customs" are now out. Chapter 5 now has the car sex scene that should have been there from the beginning. After showing the readers how glamorous and lovely Elizabeth looks at the wheel of the 1952 Chevy with day gloves and a headscarf, it doesn't do to disappoint them by waiting until chapter 9 to finally have that scene.
They have a new friend on the backseat and I didn't know what to do with this. I put the bent-over-the-hood scene in the evening when Sophie is dozing off on that backseat. After, it is strongly suggested that she watched and got a kick out of it. Then, there are threesomes, including a pirate-themed roleplay. This could easily fall into excessive raunchiness, but since she's playing the she-Captain of the pirate ship, wearing a feathered hat and a gold-embroidered jacket, Elizabeth always retains her glamour.
At this point, this chapter is only read by guests, but a guest could like it a lot and decide to become a member, who knows?
Moving some sex scenes from chapter 6 down to chapter 5 makes the story easier to follow when Louise makes her first appearance on the intercity coach. On-board toilets were a novelty back in the early 50s. Most buses still had to make hourly stops on their way.
I really want to make readers feel how different these times were through details such as sixteen-year-old lads wearing suits with a fedora hat and able to put on a necktie with blinding speed, a teen girl dreaming of becoming a housewife, phones that would never fit in your pocket, but were black boxes attached to a landline and you always had to round-dial "0" for the operator each time you wanted to make a (costly) long-distance* call, etc. * Telegrams were the usual, cheaper alternative. This is why you see Gaston writing a love to Elizabeth in Chapter 7.
