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GrushaVashnadze
6 hours ago
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For what it's worth, the first couple of chapters of Sprite's Would You Like Ketchup With That? are among the sexiest things I have ever read. I read them before joining Lush, and they inspired me to join, and to start writing myself.

Thank you, Rachel, for that amazing inspiration!
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Too much of tab-P-goes-in-slot-V becomes fatiguing.


Agree. However, another way of alleviating that fatigue - apart from the sexy build-up you describe, and which you are so good at - is to layer, juxtapose, cross-reference, and cut back and forth: sex which is intercut and layered over with dialogue, action, description etc. allows the story and characters to develop without letting up on the filth factor. (I like filth, but it's always best in context... )

Either way, not a zero-sum game. The sex enriches the story, the story enriches the sex.
This is a fascinating question, but I'm not convinced it's a zero-sum game. More sex should not necessarily imply less story (and vice versa) - any more than more action necessarily implies less dialogue, or more atmosphere implies less character, or more symbolism implies less realism, and so on.

Your own stories, Kistin, are so jam-packed with story, and sex, and action, and character, and imagery, and dialogue. All these aspects support, layer over, and enrich each other, so that the whole is more than the sum of its parts.

I aspire - though in a different way - to do the same. Here's one chapter I am particularly pleased with: Alison Goes to London: chapter 9 - The Prettiest Whore That You Ever Did See, because it contains a lot of rather soul-searching dialogue and character development and a lot of filthy sex in juxtaposition/contrast to that...
Good to intrigue the reader from the outset. This is one attempt I made to do so:

“Fucking or Non-Fucking?” asked the lady behind the ticket counter.
“Fucking, please,” replied Alison confidently.
“First Class or Shit Class?”
“First, please.”
“Two-berth, four-berth, or seat?”
“Uh… what’s the difference?”
“Well, it’s a long journey, so frankly, if you’re planning on doing any fucking, I would avoid the seat carriages. You can just about give a blowjob, but there’s barely room to spread your legs. Are you travelling alone?”
“Yes.”
“Then I’d go for a four-berth fucker. More fun that way: you might get a nice little orgy going.”


Guillaume de Machaut (1300-1377) - so I could've asked him how he was able to write music as divine as this:

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Personally, I prefer a shag

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As long as there's a pretty tit involved, I'm open to anything

Agree. Nothing quite like a pair of Great Tits:

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Swallow. Oh, wait. That's not what you're talking about, is it? Sorry...


Personally, I prefer a shag:

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People and friends have come and gone. New members have arrived, written stories, been plucked from the masses for promotion to Moderator, and thereby achieved eternal Lush fame and glory. Some of these I’ve offered help and advice, and it’s been great to see them settle in here and make it to the top. Others have flourished briefly before disappearing from sight.

Annie, you have achieved Lush fame and glory - on your own steam: that is worth more than so-called "making it to the top"!
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I'm not a looney, am I?

You may be a looney, K, but you are definitely one of the best!

And now...

cock + female + gape


(Hungarian beauty Lara Stevens - also, IMHO, one of the best...)
Dear Lushies,

I have just finished re-editing my novel Alison Goes to London. In case you didn't know, Alison is my Lush raison d'être - indeed, arguably my chef d'oeuvre. It is a love story - a romantic-comedy-cum-dystopian-satire inspired, inter alia, by Jane Austen, George Orwell and C. S. Lewis. An exploration of love and lust, youthful idealism and disillusionment, the transcendent and the temporal, freedom and societal control - oh, and, er, filthy anal fucking, those who have read it in its entirety assess it thus:

ChrisM: "This saga goes beyond being just good. It is IMHO great... Your writing style was unique and faultless... I love the slow progress from utter filth to a just and moral conclusion. Brilliant..."

VioletVixen: "By the second half, I found myself unable to put it down... You put beauty in filth and filth in beauty. You're also not afraid to NOT be filthy or to offend because you have a purpose, reason for telling all your stories."

CarltonStJames: "I kinda feel like I did when I finished Parks and Recreation or Friends. This entire series was a masterpiece from top to bottom. The evolution was brilliant, the world-building intricate, and I felt well rewarded as a reader travelling this road."

StarBelliedBoy: "Brilliant... wonderfully constructed story... managing to keep that wide a narrative arc up and the whole tone of filthy dystopia over 19 chapters is quite a feat... Alison will stand the test of time."

KimmiBeGood: "When I started reading, I was shocked... However, the more I read, the more I realized this was absolute brilliance. The series needs to be read in its entirety to see what it is really about... You never write just to be filthy... you always have a much deeper storyline... a one-of-a-kind series."

naughtyannie: "1984 with anal sex... filthy, funny, and thought-provoking"

el_henke: "incredible series... excellent author!"

However, one Lush luminary who has not read the novel in its entirety said: "In my opinion, his writing tends to be hyperbolic... It comes across as insecure, like he needs to throw in a bunch of swear words (and also push situations to the extreme) in order to emphasize his point."

In my recent re-editing process, I have, sadly, not removed any swear words, regarding them as essential to the satire, the setting and the character development. (How insecure is that?) But I have put a "the story so far" note at the top of each chapter, to make it easier for those of you who started but never finished - or even who might like to dip in somewhere in the middle for a taster...

Hope you enjoy it!

xxx Grusha
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Hi Grusha,
I Have read the story. First and second part obviously. Good story e good Italian. Only few comments.
Puttana is write with 2t, putana it's not italian.
"Fottimi il culo" is few used, better to tell "inculami".
"gran cazzo" is archaic expression, now we use "cazzone" it's more vulgar.
Bye


Lanziano, thank you - I will store up your suggestions for the next time I edit that story! Especially "cazzone": anything which makes it more vulgar sounds good to me! ;)

Grazie tanto!
Grusha
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Ciao, forse posso fare qualcosa per te... (maybe I can to do somethings for you)


Ciao, Lanziano. Grazie, ma - l'ho gia scritto!
E la storia e qui:
Metamorphoses chapter 2
Cosa pensi? Il mio italiano e accettabile?
Grusha
Here's some initial feedback on All Systems Functioning, my "foolish" competition story:

"A true classic" (el_henke)
"your best work, Grusha" (StarBelliedBoy)
"Just excellent... fabulous story" (CuriousAnnie)
"Highly entertaining!" (curvygalore)
"Confusticate and bebother those mental dwarves who do not love this." (ChrisM)


If you're trying to work out what the heck ChrisM is going on about, you'll just have to read the story!

Grusha
I transform people's lives, elevating their souls to places they never dreamed they could go.

Mostly I get paid for it...